Essay Paper 2017 - Page 14

étoile brillante · #**131** Thursday, March 02, 2017

you are right

thanks for response ok soon I will post my essay here.

étoile brillante · #**132** Thursday, March 02, 2017

Dear akkk
you have mentioned the flaws of the system very right and yes I knew not to discuss east or west but the statement I passed the composition paper but esssay killed me

étoile brillante · #**133** Friday, March 03, 2017

I have noted down suggestions of both of you.

Samreiyn · #**134** Monday, March 06, 2017

I attempted this topic in the paper. And posited that the first world is also replete with women issues, and feminism is a global problem not limited to first or third world countries. To support my stance I quoted examples from both third and first world and contrasted them, as to how the first world has advanced feminist demands, and how the third world is still fighting for the basic rights for women.

Finally, concluded it with a set of recommendations as to how the outlook towards feminism should be global.

I do not remember the exact outline, but the theme was as mentioned above. Thoughts would be appreciated, since this was my first attempt at CSS.

aminshah101 · #**135** Monday, March 06, 2017

Quote:

Originally Posted by hmsaad

can you share your outline

Alright guys. Sorry for being late. Having no option left, I went with topic # 10

Stance: Life without controversy is meaningless and aimless

Arguments to justify the stance

1. Everything today is relative; hero of one is villian of other, e.g. Hitler, Mao

2. Individual free will and thought is a divine blessing. Being conformists defies your own purpose of existence and deprives of this divine gift.

3. Controversy depicts individual brilliance, e.g. Genghis Khan and his military strategy

4. Controversy brings fame, e.g. Qandeel Baloch, Veena Malik, Seeta White

5. Controversy brings innovation, e.g. Western Scientists and their inventions like Edison, Wright Brothers

6. Controversy sets examples and lays down principles of justice. If all were conformists, there would have been no identification of right and wrong.

7. Controversy brings improvement through difference of opinion and constructive discussion.

8. Controversy encourages Independence of thought and independence of action, e.g. Pakistan movement

9. Controversy is inevitable, even the Prophets were controversial for the infidels. Every action invites controversy and critique.

10. Conformists base their success on controversial people.

11. Success and controversy go hand in hand; most of the successful people are scandalized.

12. Controversial people set trends.

13. Lastly, It is a source of entertainment, e.g. media hype, news etc.

Conclusion: Life without controversy is indeed no life.

I have forgotten one point in arguments of the outline but it was largely the same as I have mentioned

imranshahab · #**136** Tuesday, March 07, 2017

Are Modern Wars not Holy Wars ?

1. Introduction: The Modern wars are in no way holy wars but have been perverted by the stakeholders for their own vested interests.

2. Holy War: In its truest sense

3. Current Scenario of the World

4. Syrian Conflict: War of Interests
(A) Battle ground of the world.
(B) Battle of Ideologies.
(C) Battle of Hegemony.

5. Palestine-Israel Conflict: Sacred claims or Race of Survival ?
(A) Background
(B) Prevalent Scene
(C) Survival of the fittest
(D) Hegemony of the US

6. Terrorist Elements: Warped sense of Jihad

7. War against terrorism: Cleansing, Not Jihad !
(A) Pakistan's Scenario
(B) Scenario of other war torn countries

8. Conclusion

Zahoor Soomro · #**137** Tuesday, March 07, 2017

Topic :- life without controversy is no life. But why one should not choose the safe heavens of conformism.

Outline :
1:- Introduction
Undoubtedly, life without controversy is fruitless. Controversy develops when a person/ nation holds different opinion than other person/ nation. If people had not left the safe heaves of conformism then the progress which we are observing today would not have happened.
2 :- People become controversial because of holding different opinions
3:- Controversy is natural in a society
4 :- Controversy and then civilized way to deal with that controversy lead to development of progressive, tolerant and an egalitarian society
5 :- Controversy and democracy go hand in hand
6 :- If people had not left the safe heavens of conformism we would not have witnessed progress
A. Socrates, Hegel and Karl Marx
B. Romantic movement of poetry in europe
C. Progressive movement of poetry and afsana in Pakistan
7 . All the revolutions in the world happened because people left the safe heavens of conformism and chose to become controversial
A. American Revolution
B. French Revolution
C. Muslim revolution in the subcontinent
8 . People choose safe heavens of conformism over being controversial because of the violent ways of dealing with controversy ---- it's causes
A. Illiteracy
B. Religious dogamtism
C. Lawlessness
D. Tribalism and feudalism
E. Ethnonationalistic tendencies
9. Impacts of this
A. Stagnation in a society
B. Populism
C. International conflicts
10. What should be done to deal with controversies in a civilized way
A. Education --- rational
B. Rule of law
Independent judiciary
Rule of might is right should be curtailed
C. Promotion of democratic values and decrease influence of tribalism and end feudalism by land reforms
D. Decrease ethnonationalistic tendencies
11. Pakistan: A case study
12. Conclusion
To conclude is to say that it is need of the hour to develop a civilized way to deal with controversy so that people can fearlessly leave the safe havens of conformism, otherwise civilization will perish.

Zahoor Soomro · #**138** Tuesday, March 07, 2017

Please evaluate

hmsaad · #**139** Tuesday, March 07, 2017

Quote:

Originally Posted by Zahoor Soomro

Topic :- life without controversy is no life. But why one should not choose the safe heavens of conformism.

Outline :
1:- Introduction
Undoubtedly, life without controversy is fruitless. Controversy develops when a person/ nation holds different opinion than other person/ nation. If people had not left the safe heaves of conformism then the progress which we are observing today would not have happened.
2 :- People become controversial because of holding different opinions
3:- Controversy is natural in a society
4 :- Controversy and then civilized way to deal with that controversy lead to development of progressive, tolerant and an egalitarian society
5 :- Controversy and democracy go hand in hand
6 :- If people had not left the safe heavens of conformism we would not have witnessed progress
A. Socrates, Hegel and Karl Marx
B. Romantic movement of poetry in europe
C. Progressive movement of poetry and afsana in Pakistan
7 . All the revolutions in the world happened because people left the safe heavens of conformism and chose to become controversial
A. American Revolution
B. French Revolution
C. Muslim revolution in the subcontinent
8 . People choose safe heavens of conformism over being controversial because of the violent ways of dealing with controversy ---- it's causes
A. Illiteracy
B. Religious dogamtism
C. Lawlessness
D. Tribalism and feudalism
E. Ethnonationalistic tendencies
9. Impacts of this
A. Stagnation in a society
B. Populism
C. International conflicts
10. What should be done to deal with controversies in a civilized way
A. Education --- rational
B. Rule of law
Independent judiciary
Rule of might is right should be curtailed
C. Promotion of democratic values and decrease influence of tribalism and end feudalism by land reforms
D. Decrease ethnonationalistic tendencies
11. Pakistan: A case study
12. Conclusion
To conclude is to say that it is need of the hour to develop a civilized way to deal with controversy so that people can fearlessly leave the safe havens of conformism, otherwise civilization will perish.

Your essay is very good upto point 7 ,but what I think is that there was no need for point no 8 and onwards.Actually,the speaker is himself claiming that controversies will arise and they will and must be challenged.These controversies will be faced by anyone whoever is tryng to go against the status-quo. So it is implicit from the statement that you will be challneged no matter from whatever sort of people whether they are illiterates or whatever.
And in point 10 it could have been better if u had suggested that how to cultivate the spirit of non-conformity ,of debate within the society.
The need for causes and how type of things is not as such needed in such type of essays.

I had alhamdolillah passed 2015 essay paper attempetd war on terror essay.in that topic too people went off the topic by discussing causes and other thing related to WOT as also mentioned in Fpsc report.you should read that.

You have attempetd very well upto point 7,beyond that even if you had not written much it could have been better.Nevrtheless,it is my opinion and inshallah you will get through.you are to the point upto point 7 which is your main assertion.

PartyPooper · #**140** Wednesday, March 08, 2017

Quote:

Originally Posted by Zahoor Soomro

Topic :- life without controversy is no life. But why one should not choose the safe heavens of conformism.

Outline :

1:- Introduction

Undoubtedly, life without controversy is fruitless. Controversy develops when a person/ nation holds different opinion than other person/ nation. If people had not left the safe heaves of conformism then the progress which we are observing today would not have happened.

2 :- People become controversial because of holding different opinions

3:- Controversy is natural in a society

4 :- Controversy and then civilized way to deal with that controversy lead to development of progressive, tolerant and an egalitarian society

5 :- Controversy and democracy go hand in hand

6 :- If people had not left the safe heavens of conformism we would not have witnessed progress

A. Socrates, Hegel and Karl Marx

B. Romantic movement of poetry in europe

C. Progressive movement of poetry and afsana in Pakistan

7 . All the revolutions in the world happened because people left the safe heavens of conformism and chose to become controversial

A. American Revolution

B. French Revolution

C. Muslim revolution in the subcontinent

8 . People choose safe heavens of conformism over being controversial because of the violent ways of dealing with controversy ---- it's causes

A. Illiteracy

B. Religious dogamtism

C. Lawlessness

D. Tribalism and feudalism

E. Ethnonationalistic tendencies

9. Impacts of this

A. Stagnation in a society

B. Populism

C. International conflicts

10. What should be done to deal with controversies in a civilized way

A. Education --- rational

B. Rule of law

Independent judiciary

Rule of might is right should be curtailed

C. Promotion of democratic values and decrease influence of tribalism and end feudalism by land reforms

D. Decrease ethnonationalistic tendencies

11. Pakistan: A case study

12. Conclusion

To conclude is to say that it is need of the hour to develop a civilized way to deal with controversy so that people can fearlessly leave the safe havens of conformism, otherwise civilization will perish.

Essay is relevant from points 4-7. Everything above and below these points is irrelevant, and will most probably be penalised. You should have stuck to proving the very last line of your thesis. You deviated. Let's hope the examiner goes soft on you, otherwise you are in the danger zone.

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