aminshah101, please guide. Is it okay to give one's own life's example in this controversy essay? Like can we write that 'my own life has been full of controversies', etc?

Also the question part in the essay paper says that narration can be used. And narration is talking in first person (using of 'I' and such words) so is it okay to use narration in essay? That is, write about one's own life? (in case it is applicable ofcourse).

brother , i am new aspirant . kindly give your remarks on my outline. your ideas are logical and broad. how you got this skill ?. how i can boast my English in short time. can i be legend in CSS ?
i am waiting for your reply.

ESSAY:: are modern war not holy war?
.causes of holy war.:::
1 Disunity among muslim umaah .

2 Creation of ISIS to defame Islam.

3 Middle east crisis is a project for greater Israel.

4 American invasions on Muslim states after 9/11 inside job.

5 Killings of non-Muslims by the funded extremists in Muslim states.

6 Formation of Islamic military alliance to tackle NATO states who are involved in holy war.

7 Create reasons for civil wars within Muslim state for further expeditions.

8 Installations of puppet governments to weaken and plunder muslim states.

9 To label muslims as terrorists in the western world.

10 Media is a tool to show controversies regarding the lifestyle of muslims .

11 American interest to conflict between shia-sunni leaders in world politics .

12 Bashing of western leaders against Muslims in their election campaigns.


.Effects of holy war,
1 Victimization of Muslim immigrants .


2 Muslims mass migration with lost hope.

3 Genocide of Muslims in all war zones of this century

4 Islamophobia is growing

5 Radicalization

6 terrorism is increasing day by day

7 Humanity is suffering.

8 Maximum chances of World war 3.

9 Arms race.

10 Brain wash of the western people against Islam and Muslims.

11 Impartiality of UNO regarding Muslims rights.

12 Sectarianism .

Solution to end this holy war:

1 Nato states should call back their army from war zones.

2 To empower UNO by finishing the hegemony of VETO STATES .

3 Ban on military alliance such as nato or Islamic military alliance.

4 To resolve Palestine-israel issue peacefully.

5 Religious clergies should play their role in media to remove misunderstandings
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6 To find similarities between Christianity, Judaism and Islam for love and peace. (as sir syed ahmed khan had done after war of independence ).

7 UN should ban journalists who hit religions .

8 UNO member states referendum for peace invasions .
emarks on my outline .

Good work amin shah

How can I improve my English ?
Please Helpppp

Read all the books suggested by FPSC for English. Those are designed to study without a need for an instructor.

Well dear, it was a random selection as Essay was unpredictable for me too. I gave around 20 min to jot down all the ideas that came into my mind and then reorganized them.

Regarding your English improvement, read a good Newspaper or even a story/text book of interest, note down tough words and their meanings and try to develop a good expression by following footsteps of the writers/editors.

No one can claim to be legend in CSS. It is an exam where luck factor, according to me, is more than 65%. All you need is proper planning, correct execution, focused approach and above all, faith.

I have seen your timeline, its above average but requires more practical solutions to address the problem. Plus, your stance is missing in the topic. Its better to decide whether modern wars are holy wars or otherwise, and then build arguments in favor of your stance.

All the best dear

Well, they invite your opinion. Giving example from one's own life is not recommended in my opinion

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Very tough ppr this time.

i also attempted this topic

1. Introduction
2. What is colonialism
3. Avdent of british in sub-continent
a. East india company
b. War of independence
4. Era of muslim glory in sub-continent
5. Ideology of pakistan
6. Post establishment problem in pakistan
7. Hurdles in pakistan's progress
a. Social hurdles
i. Illiteracy
ii. Unemployment
iii. Corruption
iv. Poverty
v. Terrorism
b. Political hurdles
i. Lack of political awareness
ii. Lack of visionary leadership
iii. Feudalism
iv. Weak political institutions
v. Military intervention
c. Economic hurdles
i. Budget deficit
ii. Decline GDP
iii. Nationalization
iv. Inflation
8. Remedies of obstacles in progress
a. Increase education
b. Alleviate corruption
c. Reduce poverty
d.alleviate feudalism
e. Accountability
f. Independent judiciary
9. Does these hurdles belongs to colonialism mentality
10. Conclusion

This is my simple guide to you that first of all give importance to knowledge.If material is not good or deviate from topic.Examiner have no interest to read your material.He will not only look for english but main purpose to check your opinion on topic.Write in simple english without grammatical mistakes.So examiner will interprete your opinion.This is simple logic for essay.First of all make well refined outline on important topic and then start practice.Don't waste your time only on english.It is one of the most important purpose of essay to convince examiner.So build your argument in such way it didn't deviate from topic and give evidences to convince examiner.That is all for essay exam.