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in my opinion ( its my opinion may be i am wrong ) there are some flaws in your essay. which are .. firstly, where is major issuein your outline,which is still unsolved despite of many resolution (kashmir). it should be discussed in such type of essays.furthermore, UN has become spectator on the issue of terrorism. secondly, in outline number 6 you missed two important reformation proposals given in past. thirdly not only reformations but other steps should b included to ensure peace process, which are, implementation of education, economic , alleviating poverty and such other projects can play a vital role to ensure peace in the globe ..... stay blessed |
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Mohammed Uzair (Friday, July 14, 2017) |
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This essay has a potential to get through if the examiner doesn't find fault with your particular examples of 'UN's military engagements'. The only weakness is the irrelevant bits found in between. For example the essay would have been complete without the point 2. It appears redundant. Moreover, in points 5 and 6, you have digressed from the actual topic which demanded that you analyze world peace in context of UN's increasing "military engagements"; you have instead analyzed world peace in UN's context alone (leaving out the military engagements bit and irrelevantly focusing on UN's structure and organization). Let's hope the examiner doesn't notice that. |
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Mohammed Uzair (Saturday, July 15, 2017) |
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Yes, I have appeared in the exam. 2017 was my last attempt. As for the question regarding how one can be a generalist. That's the whole point, dear. Teach yourself to be mediocre, that's the key to crack this exam. |
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Zarrar Khan (Saturday, July 15, 2017) |
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2009) from UET, Lahore. I did, then, Masters in English Literature and now starting my MPhil in English Literature. I qualified 2014 attempt but, unfortunately, could not succeed. Essay paper brought me down in 2015. Hoping to succeed in 2017, In Sha Allah. Please introduce yourself. What's your academic background ? CSS Experience ? |
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If you believed that the UN's organizational shortcomings were relevant to the failure of its military engagements, you should have made it readily apparent in your outline as well so that the examiner could also see the link between the two. Best of luck! |
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I am a physician, graduated from one of the top public medical colleges, doing post-graduate residency in a public hospital. Took 13 and 15 attempts. Failed in essay. |
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"(5) Why despite UN’s increasing international military engagement world is not moving towards peace" Thanks Buddy, i wish you all the best too, inshaAllah you will make it this time |
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PartyPooper (Saturday, July 15, 2017) |
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Kindly evaluate #10 essay attempted in 2017
1) Introduction Although controversies will arise when one seeks a break from conformity,but non- conformity is necessary for reaching the goal of self actualization,for human progress and to gain one’s rights. 2) Reasons why one should not should chose safe haven of conformity a. Non conformity is the nature i. A dialogue between a wave and shore ii. God does not change those who do not cange themselves b. Non conformity is necessary for self-actualization i. To reach Iqbal khudi one should carve one’s own way (one cannot reach one’s destiny by treading on other’s path) c. Non conformity is necessary formanking progress i. Politivcal progress(American progressive movement) ii. Social progress(feminists movement) iii. Scientfici progress(corpencius break away from church’s notion that earth sun reveolves around earth) d. Non conformity is necessary to preach the truth i. Socrates ii. Prophet Muhammad(Pbuh) e. Non-conformity is necessary to unfetter oneself from usurpation of one’s rights i. American civil rights movement ii. Pakistan freedom movement 3) Recommendations(how one should non conform or requireemnt) a. Be a change yourself b. Moral courage c. One other point 4) Conclusion (remain hopeful for results of non conformity ---) |
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