This is an outstanding attempt if you were able to develop on the this outline.If i maybe so immodest to raise one point,the essay had two parts,man is born free and is everywhere shackled,you have not shown too much in that outline atleast,why man is born free.Balance is a good thing.

I also attempted the same topic,have done it slightly differently,i have not only stressed political aspects but economic aspects of subjugation as well.I wish you'll succeed.Pray for me as well as mate.

It is more important to do juctice with the topic rather than focusing on length. Never compromise quality for quantity. The more you write, chances are that you will expose your weaknesses. Try to be relevant and write enough to put a comprehesive argument. I have known people writing 10-15 pages and scoring good marks while there are candidates writing bundles of pages but failing.

Without Independent Truth Finding Commission Accountability is unachievable

Introduction
‘It’s not the time for the IMF and World Bank to be lending Money to Pakistan to what Pakistan need is an Accountable Government’
1. Features of Truth Finding Commission.
2. Extent Of Corruption In Pakistan.
• Transparency International Reports.
• Corruption in Major Departments.

3. Promulgation Of PRODA
Promulgation Of EBDO

4. How to bring Transparency
• NAB to be depoliticized.
• Non PCO Judges to be appointed as Chairman.
• NAB to Function Independently.
• Internal Checks and Balances.
• Multiple reporting.
• Decentralization of Discretionary Powers.
• Media as a tool to curb Corruption.
• Independent Judiciary.
• Executive Judiciary And Legislature Check and Balances.
• Making Of Commissions Without Army Influence.
• E-Filling Of Complaint’s.
• National Call Center .


5. Reason of Corruption in Pakistan
• No Checks and Balances.
• Corrupt judiciary.
• Media is in Chains ( If we Chain The press we chain ourselves).
• Feudalism.
• NRO to legalize corruption.
• PCO judges.
• Involvement of Army in Politics.
• Corruption Inherited from India.
6. What Truth Finding Commission can do:
• Accountability will be Possible.
• Economic Development would be possible.
• Proper Revenue Allocation and It’s Usage
• Reduce Inflation.
• Rule Of Law/ No one is Superior to law


7. Conclusion
‘Public Money is like a Fish Bone it get struck in the Throat’




plz comment on my Essay...........

I think u all submitted best u all will have a good idea about every thing but i will must suggest for my friends appearing in 2011 inshallah that the quantity is not matter the original thing is quality and the things which are considred in essay are suitable quotes,good command over english and proper knwoledge about the topic

" Dialogue is the best course to combat terrorism "

I wrote on this one..

I had made the connection of terrorism with the current Gwot as the issue of terrorism is faced with a sharp degree after 9/11. So I attempted the essay with approach of WAR ON TERROR and how to combat it. So I tried my best to prove that after 9 years efforts of Nato and US we still stand no where in combating terrorism. Why it is so? Coz we have ( Taking an stance Internationally ) not taken the course of dialogue with afghan people and specially with Taliban who are a big portion of afghanistan. Besides I had deeply discussed that what effects terrorism is brining in different parts of the worldspecially focusing the situation of Pakistan. I had taken the side of afghanis that america should leave the land of afghanis but with a proper time schedule so that the consequences that pakistan might face in case of immediate withdrawal could be lessened.

My Outline was broad and clear in scope of my essay. It was comprised on 4 pages. I wrote totally 20 pages with 125 to 130 words on each side of a page including outline.

Lets see and pray for me too ...

In 2009 I got 43 marks in Essay paper.

Regards and Reverence

I have attempted this essay in the same context and my outline is mentioned below. Could you please have a look and give me your valuable comments. I would really appreciate.

Topic:Pakistan is rich in natural resources but very poor in their management.

Outline:

1.Introduction
2.Overview of natural resources and mismanagement
3.Current scenario in Pakistan
4.Natural resources of Pakistan
- Water
- Natural gas
- Oil
- Coal
- Minerals
- Precious and ornamental stones
- Chemicals
5.Related problems due to mismanagement and its:
- Social effects
- Economic effects
- Political effects
- Transportation industry problem
- Industrial sector loss
- Effects on foreign relations of Pakistan
6.Natural resources mismanagement at:
- Departmental level mismanagement
i.WAPDA
ii.OGRA
iii.Minerals extraction departments
- Higher level mismanagement
i.Lack of legislation
ii.Power politics
iii.Problem of regionalism
iv.Political influences
- Individual level
7.Suggestions for improvement
- Legislation for natural resource utilization
- Separate departments for policy making
- Media role in creating awareness
- Fixing problem of regionalism
- Privatization of departments
- Special accountability bureaus to be installed for NR
8.Analysis
9.Conclusion


Further my introduction paragraph starts like this:

"Life without conservation of natural resources would be like a deaf listening to music or a blind enjoying dance exhibition. Life of a modern man is directly or indirectly geared by natural resources in its various manifestations whether at consumer level, industry or means of transportation are concerned, no one can deny the fact that natural resources in its different manifestation are the ultimate driving force. Consumer using it to keep the pot boiling, industry needs it to maintain its production line while transport industry is using it to connect one end with other. As a result of this heavy dependence gave birth to the problem of resource mismanagement in itself and a resource rich country lay exposed to the problem at social, economic, political fronts."

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Awaiting your kind response :-)

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If you have good expression and justified well in your writing then it would be a good effort that could earn passing marks.

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(10) The world politics stands more derisive than it was ever before due to the specific imperialists designs.
I chose this topic. I did not draw any outline and wrote about 2000 words. Ans the book: The Clash Of Civilization And The Remaking Of World Order by Samuel P. Huntington remained my sole guide in attempting the essay. I focused less on the contemporary world politics even though i made some passing references to the present chaos and its implications but it was the cold war and the immediate post cold war world politics which remained the center of my attention.

Terms such as: unipolar,bipolar,multipolar world, Transnational war,liberalism. capitalism,communism,Islamic resurgence,WMDs, containment policies were frequently used. Role of world trade and security organizations UN, NATO, ASEAN,SC, SAARC, EU. alliances, West and rest politics, cultural wars, Confucian rise, declining economic primacy of west or US and and its efforts to maintain it at whatever cost. these ideas I put together randomly. (Not satisfied)

Thanks for your valuable comments Miss Naqvi. I really appreciate that you have spared some time to comment on my Essay. I would be thankful, if you come up with the outline for this Particular Essay. You are right that this Essay is about how Commission can bring Accountability? I explicitly wrote 3 to 4 pages on it. The outline I reproduced is mere reflection of what I wrote in my paper but it wasn’t the same. But Honestly Speaking I delved a lot in this topic but didn’t come up of what should be the crux and how to crack it. You are respectable senior member and more enlightened so I really respect your valuable contribution. You can go through other outlines in this Forum and solve this conundrum for me and other members, as this topic is quite esoteric. This was my first attempt and it really haunts me that I might have missed the right direction. I have gone through a lot of websites but it is still a dilemma for me.


This was my Introduction
Is it possible for the person who is caught up in the dust storm to inhale pure oxygen? When thick clouds of pungent smoke hover around will there be any safer haven available to inhale pure oxygen? The fact is surrounded by filth, smug and smoke no efforts to remain clean is likely to succeed. In a densely populated urban town no one escape the polluted environment. Our individual, social and political behavior at national level depends on the system in which we are made to spend our lives. Unfortunately system prevalent in Pakistan has taken the whole nation hostage. The system is feudalism with its aversion to democracy. These ground realities leads to the fact that until and unless the system prevalent in Pakistan is not upgraded, we will not be in a position to bring transparency and Accountability in Pakistan.

Commission Part
The government should appoint a commission to prepare a credible and comprehensive National Anti Corruption Strategy which takes in to account proven global practices for presentation to parliament for approval. NAB should be reformed by making it independent, expanding its jurisdiction to all organs of the state and appointing a retired Non PCO Supreme court Judge as its Chairman. The NAB functioning is compromised by having its chairman from within the government ( civil or military), while the appointment of supreme court judge to this position could ensure that the NAB works a depoliticized manner and within the Law.
The NAB chairman and senior management should be appointed for a five year to 7 year non renewable terms, with safeguards to ensure that they cannot be easily removed.
Second the Reformed NAB should engage world class audit firm to conduct an independent audit of all financial returns filled by elected official with the EC with the objective of verifying their reliability and faithfulness especially matching the personal life styles and assets of elected officials with their declared source of income. This exercise is the critical first step in reducing corruption at the top and to bring accountability.
Thirdly NAB should establish a National Call Centre with Toll Free numbers for people to call in to report financial misdoings. The NAB should also partner with the Media in its crusade against corruption.
Fourthly the Public procurement regulatory authority should be strengthened and made independent of the government, starting with appointing as its chairman a person of high integrity and someone who has years of public procurement experience.
And other 3 to 4 pages on Commission role and what it can be done through commission.


Chech out this Miss Naqvi

written by Rishz forum member

Without independent truth-finding commission , accountability is unachievable?

Essay Outline!!

Introduction
What are truth finding institutions?
What is accountability?
Main scheme behind the predicament
Historical Implications and the standard of truth finding institutions in Pakistan
Recent Scenario….. (Judicial set-backs and Government interference)
NRO, the legal protection to corruption
Struggle in discovering independent truth finding commissions cum legal frame works
From 1947-1960(PCA 1947)
From 1961-1988(PPC 1960)
From 1988-1999(CPI, PCPS, NAO)
From 2000-2009(NAB reforms 2002 and police reforms)

The Fault lines behind the grieved situation
Corruption in United India, inherited to Pakistan
Economic problems of people and inflation
Poor standard of life
Meager accountability standards
The highest corrupt institutes in Pakistan (WAPDA, NHA, MWH, POLICE, PUBLIC SERVICES & COURTS…..)
Recent surveys and crying facts and figures
CPI
PCPS
WWGI
TI surveys
Different kinds of corruptions and frauds
Electoral fraud, embezzlement, kickbacks, nepotism, cronyism, petty bribery etc
Government’s attitude of policies to address mismanagement
Effects of the widespread calamity
Domestic corruption rises
Poverty and economic conditions worsen
Inequitable distribution of wealth
Institutes are derailed
Good governance invisible
Undermining FDI, Investment and inflows

Recommendations to improve the aggravated crisis
Independent judiciary and complete check
OMBUDSMAN, AUDITOR GENERAL OF PAKISTAN, NAB to work independently without government’s interference
Media can give a live audit
Transparent parameters and recruitments
E-Governance will bring revolution
Zero tolerance measures
Critical Appraisal


@ Miss Naqvi

If you look at this Essay then it also carries material related to corruption. So I feel this topic was hard to crack and little to write about commission. Look if there would be no independent truth finding commission then there would be no accountability and in effect would lead to corruption. Secondly what commission can do is Important and what will happen without having Independent commission then it will head to Corruption. If corruption topic is too touched lightly then I am worried that 99% of us have missed the right track. You tell what should be the perfect outline with corruption touched lightly as recommended by you.

Plz Sudhan you have to keep your heart big to absorb what I am saying. I have my personal opinion that may be contradictory to many others. Whatever I will say is based on my personal experience and expertiese. Those who are ready to learn, learns well and excell in life but if one is over-confident and believes him / herself authority then there is no learning. I still consider myself a learner so try to learn whenever I get the oppurtunity. So I may learn new things while discussing this topic in detail. So lets learn

Inshallah I will give you the outline as it should be in my opinion.

Thats very good caz your topic point was to justify this fact.

Definately outline is just the reflection of your plan of action. One most important thing is balance that should be visible from your outline to conclusion. Very very positive approach when you said that you haven't written the topic as you wanted to write it.

Look Sudhan, It happened just because of lack of practice. If you are preparing for your next attempt make it a habit to write an essay atleast per week. Take essay topics from CSS past papers and write, then re-write and then re-re-write. This practice may seems childish but it helps you to refine your own work and improve your essay writing skills. You must have read practice makes a man perfect and so is for essay writing. The more you write the more you learn to handle it.

Dont worry and trust Allah. Prepare yourself well and put all your worries aside. Yea its very hard to find material directly for essay topic given in CSS, you have to make selections from different articles according to the flow of your essay.


Sudhan this style of writing isnt admired by the CSS examiner. One of my teacher who remained examiner for essay paper said its just like beating behind the bushes. You can use it for body of the essay but not for introduction. Introduction should be given in a very concrete form having reference based quotation with citation supporting your point of argument (if possible) Present the topic by highlighting your stance with logical argument and make a snapshot of the whole essay that you will expalin in following paras.

In my next sitting I'l come up with the outline, how I perceived the topic.

I am not commenting over it but will definately write one for helping all the aspirants to understand the topic well.

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