Brother. The Essay was surely about the critical ( in-depth ) analysis of the three education system, i.e. Government, Private and Madrassah.
I won't keep you in the dark but would clearly let you know that it is a mistake on your part.
Just be cross-fingered.

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Analysis is analysis, be it separately or collectively. Remember, Examiner needs fine expression of your ideas and your perspective about certain thing. You have done it in a good manner. May GOD bless you with good marks.

Here is the outline which i wrote in the exam. I wrote 19 pages. Seniors are requested to comment whether it can get passing marks or otherwise.

A critical analysis of education systems in pakistan

Outline

1. Introduction
2. Forms of education
a. Formal educaion
i. Schools
ii. Colleges
iii. Universities
iv. Other recognised intitutes
b. Informal education
i. Distance educaion
ii. unrecognised madarsahs
iii. educaion at home and society
3. Importance of education
4. Defects/shortcoming of eduction systems in pakistan
a. Disorinted system
b. No uniformity
c. No check and balance
d. lack of financial resources
e. lack of infrastucture
f. No research and development
g. Less training facilities to teachers
h. Neglect of agriculture section
i. Mismatch of syllabus
j. Poor examination system
5. Outcome of poor education system
a. low literacy rate
b. lack of knowledge
c. high drop out rate
d. low agriculture and industrial output
e. less econmic growth
g. increase in poverty
h. increase in unemployment
i. increase in crime
6. Remedial Measures to improve education system
a. Government steps
i. ministry of education
ii. HEC
iii. NEVTEC
b. increase in fund allocation
c. development of infrastructure
d. Establishment of new education institutions
e. Uniformity in education
f. more research and development
g. training facilities to teachers
h. Emphasis on agri and industrial education
i. revamping of syllabus
j. effective controls
k. reforms in examination system.
7. Conclusion

"Critical Analysis" which means you should produce good and bad point in our education system. infect, it appears to me that good point or steps taken so far are missing in your outline.

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@Ainuddin Kibzai and others.

Plz also comment on my essay.

A Critical analysis of the Education systems in Pakistan.

Outlines:


Introduction:
The education sector of Pakistan faces multilateral problems. But the present government taken
steps to address these issues.

Critical analysis at commitment level:
1. Pakistanis do not believe in the true worth of the education.
2. There is a poor quality of education in Pakistan.
3. There is a poor access to education in Pakistan.
4. Insufficient funds also hinder growth of the education in Pakistan.

Critical analysis at governance or implementation level:
1. There is a lack of coordination among different layers of the education
system.
2. There is a private-public divide.
3. The education is also backward due to feudalism.
4. Corruption is also a problem in education system in Pakistan.
5. Lastly lack of management and planning hinders education development in Pakistan.

Recommendations and the Government steps to overcome the above problems:
1. The leaders should themselves get education and also disseminate awareness, regarding education, among the masses.
2. The education policy-2009 envisages improved quality of the education.
3. The education policy-2009 provides for wider access to education.
4. The education policy-2009 promises greater funds for the education.
5. The clear-cut areas should be carved out for each of the layer of the education system.
6. The education policy-2009 plans to reduce the private-public divide.
7. Governance should be improved.

Conclusion:

Energy Crisis

No one mentioned higher energy prices. Everyone focused on the the shortage. I focused on this too.

Also no one mentioned indirect taxation,as 25 % of Government revenue from petroleum levy.

Everyone mentioned circular debt but no one mentioned that government issued 391 billion TFC's/Bonds to retire circulatr debt on 05 Nov 2011. Why ?

Please comment

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@Sarfraz

Dear i have sent you an email at your account. Plz reply.

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Can you please describe your essay strategy in detail? Also I want to appear in 2013 css exams..and want to start my preparation off with English..so please guide me where should I start it from?

ur 1st point: Higher prices r due to energy crisis n nt vice versa.

ur 3rd point: One was required to discuss "Causes n Consequences" n nt solutions.

Energy crisis is due to higher prices. Pakistan has capacity to generate electricity more then its demand. Only reason is higher prices of the petroleum. Because it pressurizes the Balance of Payments. Moreover Government has giver subsidy on electricity, so higher the prices of petroleum higher the subsidy is. Now one question I ask to you,

Why Government releases funds after riots ? What is purpose of that ? When there is no capacity where funds utilized ?

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