PMS-2018 Precis Solution
 

The end of traditional democracy is the dignity and worth of an individual. It believes in persuasion, fraternal good-will, love of truth, and overall welfare and happiness. On the other hand, the ends of democracy are rational and humane values for which it uses least force and maximum voluntary assent. We may stick to democracy without renouncing our faith which enshrines traditional democracy. There are numerous issues with democracy but still it can be employed because it gives us suitable conditions to ensure the dignity and worth of the individual through minimum force and free will.

Note: A critical appraisal will be appreciated.

[QUOTE=psas;1077921]The end of traditional democracy is the dignity and worth of an individual. It believes in persuasion, fraternal good-will, love of truth, and overall welfare and happiness. On the other hand, the ends of democracy are rational and humane values for which it uses least force and maximum voluntary assent. We may stick to democracy without renouncing our faith which enshrines traditional democracy. There are numerous issues with democracy but still it can be employed because it gives us suitable conditions to ensure the dignity and worth of the individual through minimum force and free will.

Note: A critical appraisal will be appreciated.[/QUOTE]

Using the phrase "the end" in the beginning gives a double meaning, should have avoided it. And later in the 3rd sentence why have you used "on the other hand" when its the same idea being conveyed. Moreover, the word limit given was 80(I guess), and in that case you have crossed it by 16 words, which can turn out to be fatal.

It was a very difficult passage my Dear. If you can summarize it for me, I will be obliged.

[QUOTE=psas;1078744]It was a very difficult passage my Dear. If you can summarize it for me, I will be obliged.[/QUOTE]

Democratic ideology adheres to rationality and humanity. It believes in the honour and potential of a man. It also believes in persuasion, fraternal good-will, and love of truth. In addition, it poses great responsibility upon those with knowledge and power. It bounds them to ensure inclusion of all in the decision process regardless of their social status. Democracy truly believes in the capacity of man and his humane powers. It provides utmost desirable conditions to achieve the end goal through all peaceful means.

P.S I am in no way an expert brother. I just highlighted those issues in your precis which I thought were against the *rules of precis*

[QUOTE=psas;1078744]It was a very difficult passage my Dear. If you can summarize it for me, I will be obliged.[/QUOTE]

Yes indeed. It was a tricky one. But if you give it a read multiple times, you will note that the author is just beating around the bush. His central idea is democracy. What was your title btw?

Bro, my title was " The Chief Virtue Of Democracy".

Don't you think that the passage was actually a comparison between traditional democracy, in religious sense, and democracy prevalent in Iqbal's time or you may say western democracy?

[QUOTE=psas;1078880]Don't you think that the passage was actually a comparison between traditional democracy, in religious sense, and democracy prevalent in Iqbal's time or you may say western democracy?[/QUOTE]

Hmm...patah nahi, I don't think there is exactly a comparison. I think the central idea is the *essence of democracy* whether it be traditional or western.

Wallah o Alam :/

My title: The Democratic Ideology

In the second sentence it has been said that "These are the values that are affirmed by the traditional democratic ideology". In the third sentence, he goes on to say that " The case of democracy is that". Had he not referred to two democratic concepts, he would have used the word "The" before the word "democracy" which is a rule in English language. Further, in the first sentence he declares that the ends of traditional democracy are human dignity and worth. While in the third sentence he counters that statement and refers to the rational and human values as ends of democracy. This makes his sentences contrasting that is why I have put the words "On the other hand" in my precis.

[QUOTE=psas;1078916]In the second sentence it has been said that "These are the values that are affirmed by the traditional democratic ideology". In the third sentence, he goes on to say that " The case of democracy is that". Had he not referred to two democratic concepts, he would have used the word "The" before the word "democracy" which is a rule in English language. Further, in the first sentence he declares that the ends of traditional democracy are human dignity and worth. While in the third sentence he counters that statement and refers to the rational and human values as ends of democracy. This makes his sentences contrasting that is why I have put the words "On the other hand" in my precis.[/QUOTE]

Hmm... interesting! Well in that case, your precis makes complete sense.

I took it as Democratic Ideology and its essence as rationality and humanity. Used other arguments to supplement the main thought.