Expansion of paragraph Q3: "IT IS HARD FOR AN EMPTY BAG TO STAND UPRIGHT"
 

Salam to all panel judges;

I like to join study forum and request you to please consider the following effort of mine. If it is not enough then kindly let me know; I would provide you more introductory contribution of mine:

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The development of a character, which is full of ability and competence, takes years of toils. The fuel of such a personality is sleepless nights of untiring hard work until the glimmer of dawn. Blood of such ones, no doubt, is full of patience, forbearance, and hope. In fact, they never stop doing unflinching efforts and travail that become their cravings. Consequently, such people never afraid of competitions and failures; they always get ready for any struggle or contest. This is because of strong foundation of their individuality. However, contrary to this, a weak character, which is devoid of any significant inclination for exertion and fond of laxity, luxury, easiness, would easily cripple like a mound of dust. Such individuals would always be apprehensive of any competition as well as struggle and this is all owing to their careless nature without any glimpse of achievement and success. Moreover, if they take any kind of challenge like a test or an exam then they fail to perform any significant outcome, for their background lacks solid foundation of diligence. Their personality is like an empty bag, which has nothing to give out; and at the least, they are unable to stand upright for themselves. Hence, it is necessary for a successful life that one should always be laborious in developing his or her skills, qualifications, and education. This is the key for confidence; otherwise, the result would be like a disaster at any time in life and all that is due to one's negligence of striving for a bright future.

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SECONDOPINION02

precis 2007
 

Q#1 Make a précis of the given passage and suggest a suitable heading.

The author of a work of imagination is trying to effect us wholly, as human beings, whether he knows it or not; and we are affected by it, as human beings, whether we intend to be or not. I suppose that everything we eat has some effect upon us than merely the pleasure of taste and mastication; it affects us during the process of assimilation and digestion; and I believe that exactly the same is true of any thing we read.
The fact that what we read does not concern merely something called our literary taste, but that it affects directly, though only amongst many other influences , the whole of what we are, is best elicited , I think, by a conscientious examination of the history of our individual literary education. Consider the adolescent reading of any person with some literary sensibility. Everyone, I believe, who is at all sensible to the seductions of poetry, can remember some moment in youth when he or she was completely carried away by the work of one poet. Very likely he was carried away by several poets, one after the other. The reason for this passing infatuation is not merely that our sensibility to poetry is keener in adolescence than in maturity. What happens is a kind of inundation, or invasion of the undeveloped personality, the empty (swept and garnished) room, by the stronger personality of the poet. The same thing may happen at a later age to persons who have not done much reading. One author takes complete possession of us for a time; then another, and finally they begin to affect each other in our mind. We weigh one against another; we see that each has qualities absent from others, and qualities incompatible with the qualities of others: we begin to be, in fact, critical: and it is our growing critical power which protects us from excessive possession by anyone literary personality. The good critic- and we should all try to critics, and not leave criticism to the fellows who write reviews in the papers- is the man who, to a keen and abiding sensibility, joins wide and increasingly discriminating. Wide reading is not valuable as a kind of hoarding, and the accumulation of knowledge or what sometimes is meant by the term ‘a well-stocked mind.’ It is valuable because in the process of being affected by one powerful personality after another, we cease to be dominated by anyone, or by any small number. The very different views of life, cohabiting in our minds, affect each other, and our own personality asserts itself and gives each a place in some arrangement peculiar to our self.
445 /3 = 148.333 (approx. 149 words Precis required)

ANSWER OF 2007 PRECIS

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Any literary piece of writing has a bearing upon readers' mind as well as shapes their attitude. The degree of influence relates to the strength of author's personality reflecting through the written material and the weakness of the reader's attributes. A young reader or an old reader without sufficient reading background is more likely to be inspired by the charm of one or more than one writers. Gradually, as one's span of reading increases then he or she starts evaluating one author from another and this ability of assessment develops critical thinking, which protects one from the supremacy of any particular form of writer. Value of excessive reading is not accrual of knowledge but it is the critical judgment that sprouts from it. Hence, at a single time, multitude of opinions of different authors resides in an intellect but the reader assorts them according to his or her taste. (149 words)

THANKS

REGARDS

SECONDOPINION02

appraisal of the effort
 

salam _______________?

were u an aspirant in css2007? ;)
if yes result?
if no then r u preparing 4 2008?

precis seems good except a sentence in 3 or 4 line, a serious grammar mistake. i wrote almost the same with the same title but :sad

paragraph i believe too short.
yes they say 250 words but when it comess to giving marks they like an effort of some 2 pages. (usually that is the case with all examiners)

my advise to all future aspirants that english is the key. agar ye PASS to sab ok warna better luck next time.

Regards:
HAMID

Dear Hamid;

It's nice to hear your comments and valuable suggestions; and I congratulate you on clearing CSS written test. Please elaborate the mistake that you have found out.

thanks..

Looks like Second Opinion you are right on track. You are using words and phrases and sentence construction which when a person starts using, he becomes a good writer after about six months to three depending on the mental aptitude and hard work he puts in. I am not concerned about the study forum so won't comment from that perspective. Best, Deviant

I Suggest The Title "critical Sensability" For This Precise Para Graph.

@secondopinion02

If i were the checker, i would give u full marks for ur attempt. Ur precis contains all the required ingredients: the most suitable title, correct & graceful use of language, meaningful sentences and perfect length.

its true that precise made by you is excellent . its better than i did in exam.

[B][SIZE="3"][FONT="Lucida Sans Unicode"][B]It is hard for an empty bag to stand upright.

The proverb means very need of thing makes life impossible. One who has nothing he cannot stand upright in the way of survival. Empty clouds never rain. A man with might, knowledge, perfect character and passion stands upright in life. He stands up in front of every misfortune and mishap. He is like a fulfilled bag that has strength to stand upright. A man who is uneducated, poor, passionless and materialistic he cannot give something out of his life. Can an empty bag give something out?

Man like Che Guevara whose bag of life is full with passion, struggle, education, dare and emotions he stands up in life without any shoulder or support. He stands not just for himself, but he stands also for others. He tries to give others their rights and like a true man, he never lets injustice and inequality take place. He leaves a fine character in history of mankind. He becomes like a fruitful tree which stands upright and gives fruit to everyone. Unquestionably, it happens when a tree bears and struggles in very hours of life.

Those men who have nothing in their lives, they ever need a support or shoulder to stand. They live on others food. Their lives are hand to mouth. They remain homeless and helpless on account of, they have nothing in the bag of life, which can stand upright. They crawl on earth and forget that they have wings to use or they know not skill of flying towards success. Those men are like a stick which cannot stand up without any support.

Alama IQbal says; “If there would be no compulsion in life every one would be god. “ So, compulsion is part of life. One whose bag of life is empty he should be optimistic and struggler and start to fill the bag of life while burning candles of nights. Undoubtedly, drop by drop an ocean becomes. So, one should launch and struggle with passion. An ant can kill an Elephant. So, Nothing is impossible for insurmountable. Indeed, that flower is the most beautiful which smiles in adversity.


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thank u for this nice post,,,,
 

thank u for this reasonable post,,,,
post other like threads that aspirants may get some knowledge and the method to know how to write a paragraph and so on,,,,,,,,,,,