its good man. Let me point out a few things:
Cockroaches and flies are not listed as the one which can destroy the habitats in the original paragraph.
4th line of your precis is not in coherence with the rest of your passage and doesn't provide any relevance.
Last two lines need a little more precision, as you intermixed intelligence with instincts.
Topic is good but I'll appreciate if that could be a little more precis, amm like 'Insects' Behaviour and Human Perceptions'
I don't know, please guide me if you think m wrong Best of luck