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Originally Posted by neoeinstein
brother check my outline on the same topic and give your comments:
BREXIT MEANS GLOBALISATION IS THE RHETORIC OF THE PRIVILEGED AND CAPITALISM WILL RETURN FEROCIOUSLY AS EVER:
introduction
globalisation defined
understanding brexit
connection between brexit and anti globalisation wave:
dissatisfaction with the neoliberal world order
rising economic inequalities
outsourcing of jobs
threat to cultural identity
rise in extremism and militancy
impacts borne out of this antigloalisation trend:
more clashes
regional power blocs
ultimately clash of civilization
impediments to antiglobalism stride:
benefits of economic liberalism
political peace
what needs to be done/?
inclusive economic designs
management of globalisation
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You haven't addressed the "globalisation is a rhetoric of the privileged" part, and neither have you shed sufficient light on the "capitalism will return" part.
What you have done is addressing specific parts of the title (your essay revolves around globalisation), which shows that you may have probably prepared "globalisation" as a full topic. You ignored to relate your knowledge to prove or disprove the given topic (in my opinion).
Now if a layman like myself can notice that your special preparation of "globalisation wala topic" is readily apparent from your essay, will the examiner be unable to discern it?
Your essay lacks in relevance. That's the thing you need to work on in the future.