Originally Posted by PartyPooper

While your criticism on Wazir's essay is valid insofar as it failed to address the core idea of the essay, and that it should have dealt with modernity as an idea, your own essay is too philosophical and jargonistic for an everyday English professor to interpret and grade. Disregarding the content and inherent merits of your essay, this approach (of using esoteric terminology and ideas) is discouraged in CSS essays. A generalist is marking your paper, and you are to be a generalist throughout your career. As simple as that.

Having said that, your essay is good structurally and in its technical treatment. You show a good command on the discussed concepts. Perhaps too good for this exam. That can sometimes come to bite you. Best of luck though.