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Originally Posted by Mohammed Uzair
TOPIC: More and more international Military Engagement by the UN; is the world moving towards peace
1)Introduction
“ We the people of United nations affirm to prevent the scourge of war, which twice in our life time has brought untold sorrows to the mankind..”—UN Charter Preamble
Thesis: United Nations, despite its increasing international military engagements, has not been able to ensure peace. And has belied the essence of its charter.
2)Brief Overview of International military engagements by the United Nations
3)International military engagements by the United Nations and peace
4)How Despite increasing international Military engagements by the UN world is not moving towards peace
(4.1) Plight of Syrians continues unabated despite increasing international military engagements by the UN
(4.2) Yemen crisis continues to fester and the peace still remains elusive despite international military engagement by the UN
(4.3) China remains undeterred in South China Sea
(4.4) Despite UN’s involvement in Israel, Israel continues to expand its settlements in Palestine, which has resulted in intermittent clashes between the warring parties
(4.5) Other UN’s military engagements and their failure
(1) Peace keeping mission in South Sudan
(2) Peace keeping mission in Columbia
(3) Peace keeping mission in Central African Republics (CAR)
(5) Why despite UN’s increasing international military engagement world is not moving towards peace
(5.1) UNSC represents old geopolitical power balance, which affects its effectiveness
(5.2) Disunity among its veto-wielding Permanent members
(5.3) UN’s State-centric approach affects its ability to address contemporary challenges, which are largely intra-state
(5.4) Organizational inefficiency and Weak position of UN Secretary General
(6) How Can United nations be reformed to ensure peace in world
(1) Reforming the structure of UNSC in accordance with contemporary geopolitical realities
(2) Restrictions on the exercise of Veto
(3) Revamping the organizational structure to reclaim its efficiency
(4) De-politicization of the post of Secretary General
(7) Conclusion
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This essay has a potential to get through if the examiner doesn't find fault with your particular examples of 'UN's military engagements'. The only weakness is the irrelevant bits found in between.
For example the essay would have been complete without the point 2. It appears redundant.
Moreover, in points 5 and 6, you have digressed from the actual topic which demanded that you analyze world peace in context of UN's increasing "military engagements"; you have instead analyzed world peace in UN's context alone (leaving out the military engagements bit and irrelevantly focusing on UN's structure and organization). Let's hope the examiner doesn't notice that.