Kindly evaluate #10 essay attempted in 2017

1) Introduction
Although controversies will arise when one seeks a break from conformity,but non- conformity is necessary for reaching the goal of self actualization,for human progress and to gain one’s rights.

2) Reasons why one should not should chose safe haven of conformity

a. Non conformity is the nature
i. A dialogue between a wave and shore
ii. God does not change those who do not cange themselves

b. Non conformity is necessary for self-actualization
i. To reach Iqbal khudi one should carve one’s own way (one cannot reach one’s destiny by treading on other’s path)

c. Non conformity is necessary formanking progress
i. Politivcal progress(American progressive movement)
ii. Social progress(feminists movement)
iii. Scientfici progress(corpencius break away from church’s notion that earth sun reveolves around earth)

d. Non conformity is necessary to preach the truth
i. Socrates
ii. Prophet Muhammad(Pbuh)

e. Non-conformity is necessary to unfetter oneself from usurpation of one’s rights
i. American civil rights movement
ii. Pakistan freedom movement

3) Recommendations(how one should non conform or requireemnt)
a. Be a change yourself
b. Moral courage
c. One other point

4) Conclusion (remain hopeful for results of non conformity ---)