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Originally Posted by Bilal Hassan
More and more military engagements by the United Nations, is the world moving towards peace?
1: Introduction
a) Historical Background:Post World War II Scenario and creation of UN as custodian of Peace
b) Current Scenario: UN as a manipulative tool of Security Counsel
c) Thesis Statement: The world is absolutely not moving towards peace amid increasing UN military engagements
2: How UN Peace Keeping Missions have compromised the Peace?
a) Intervention in Congo led to escalation of war as Peace Keepers went beyond mandate
b) Failure of PK mission in Somalia
c) Provocative Offensive approach of UN Protection Force in Bosnia
d) Ukraine crisis: An omen for return of cold war and UN failure
e) Condoning the Palestine Crisis: Indication of UN's biased approach
f) Biased approach of UN Force in Sinai during Arab Israeli conflict prolonged the Yom Kipur war
3:Why has UN failed to establish peace via Military Engagements?
a) Non inclusiveness of General Assembly: Dominance of Security Counsel
b) Biased and prejudiced approach of UN
c) Excesses of PK missions led to escalation
d) Peace Keeping missions have been used as tools of aggression for vested interests
e) Complete silence of UN on Palestinian, Syrian and Afghanistan invasions and condoning destabilizing role of US and Russia
4: Conclusion
a) UN military engagements have escalated the conflicts rather mitigating
b) A neutral approach is essential for UN to play its role as a Peace Keeper
c) Equal participation and Inclusiveness of General Assembly is crucial for establishing peace. |
Sir, does every blue line in your pasted outlines represent a separate paragraph ?
Secondly ,to me every blue point seems similar (in meaning) to each other .e.g sub point f of point 2 and sub point b of point 3 are similar...Wouldnt it be more appropriate to elaborate first '' Biased and prejudiced approach of UN '' as a topic sentence and then in the same paragraph write ''Biased approach of UN Force in Sinai during Arab Israeli conflict prolonged the Yom Kipur war '' as an example to support the topic sentence ...?
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