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Old Saturday, September 08, 2018
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Originally Posted by Saba Arif View Post
One great defect of our civilization is that it does not know what to do with its knowledge. Science, as we have seen, has given us powers fit for the gods, yet we use them like small children.
For example, we do not know how to manage our machines. Machines were made to be man's servants; yet he has grown so dependent on them that they are in a fair way to become his masters. Already most men spend most of their lives looking after and waiting upon machines. And the machines are very stern masters. They must be fed with coal, and given petrol to drink, and oil to wash with, and must be kept at the right temperature. And if they do not get their meals when they expect them, they grow sulky and refuse to work, or burst with rage, and blow up, and spread ruin and destruction all round them. So we have to wait upon them very attentively and do all that we can to keep them in a good temper. Already we find it difficult either to work or play without the machines, and a time may come when they rule us altogether, just as we rule the animals.

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Title: "Dependency on Machines"

We don’t know what to do with knowledge. Science has given us powers, yet we don’t know how to use them. Machines require proper management or maintenance and to get fed up. If we don’t do they refuse to work and cause destruction. We became so dependent on machine that we don’t feel comfortable to do anything without them. In the course of time they may become our master and rule us.


While I do not claim to be an authority on the subject still I would like to opine on it because of the incessant mistakes that I found it to be littered with. First off, you shall never use contractions such as "don't" in formal writing. Always use the full form such as "do not". Another horrendous mistake is in the sentence "machines require proper management or maintenance and to get fed up." Rephrase it as "machines require proper management and maintenance". To get fed up would mean to lose interest in something which is an extreme blunder of syntax.
There are other mistakes too. While you have captured the essence of the precis, the problem remains with your style of writing. Hope this helps.
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