Originally Posted by GanXTeR

well your outline is food enough to pass the paper.

however, some discrepancies are found.

1. sub -heaeing under introduction not an impressive thing. the points discusswd had to be made separate heading like definition, origin/history, comparison with west etc

2. defi ition given by abraham lincoln should have been included in the outline. your outline was not giving proper understanding of the word democracy as it is govt of the people but was not discussed.

3. features and charachteriatics of democracy were reuiqres to be added in the outline to built the proper outline.

4. history of failed democracy in pak was wrong heading and you were not supposed to declare as failed democratic state. the point of hiatory of democracy in pak in terms of form of govt was better option as since inception this point is under discussion. in 1956 1962 and 1973 forms were keot changing, dictator wanted presdential system and political parties supported parliamentay system of govt which is core point of the statement.

5. democracy in islam should have been elaborated being islamic state and with refrence to religion of state etc

6. heading regarding u.n was good addition but it had to be discussed after hopes/sugggestion by linking it.

7. outline did not diaclose any hint about public opinion, timely election, smooth transfer of power etc which are necessary for survival of democrqcy in pak.

8. hopes and suggestion are inter-linked therefore seperate points were not needed and required to be enlisted under hopes. though you could make one point of these,two headings.

many other aspects are missing or did not properly organizes/structured.

analysis is givenfor your next attempts if any bad luck occurs.


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