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Old Thursday, June 27, 2019
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Originally Posted by Acidius View Post
Intro
The corridors of worship places today will be traversed by those who will usher the nation into the corridors of power tomorrow. Worship is a sanctimonious deed; worship places, even more so. Large segments of our lower and middle class society have, ever since the 70s, come under the shadow and pale of a distorted ideology. This was originally devised to counter what was deemed at the time a threat to the existence of the entire country. However; today this mindset has become ingrained and etched into our thinking. This, to the extent that our responses have become inebriated in that most of us have no qualms over lynching a man upon mere heresay.
Outline
Prevailing situation
1. Loudspeaker hate culture
2. Rigid mind-set under the garb of being staunch
3. Above point eventually turns into intolerance towards others
Implications
4. On the brink of abandoning religion like Europe did with Christianity when Church couldn’t reconcile science with religion
5. Lack of compassion
6. Rise in crime
7. Deprived from the rewards and dividends of practicing true religion
8. Breakdown of society in a nation bound and united solely by religion
Factors
9. Binary conception of heaven and hell
10. Poverty leads to asymmetric perception
11. Prevailing elitist ostentation dikhawa culture antagonizes lower-class
12. Lack of actual manifestation of religion in society leads to dearth of actual role models (hence groping in the dark for a leader figure to follow)
13. Some elements posing as highly religious ¬¬—confounding those who follow them
14. Segregation of religion from visual arts leading to inability to grasp abstract concept

Conclusion
The prevailing attitude towards and by worship places holds tremendous potential to enlighten the masses and shine the light on the way paved for their progress. Every member in society must pause and reflect on their current bearings in wading the waters of religion. Man has a tendency to subvert to his will any and everything to satisfy his never ending animalistic desires. It is the suppression and positive channeling of these instinctive impulses that informs our very humanity as being worthy of superseding the angels in magnanimity and loftiness.
Brother, im an aspirant like you, not a pro. so here's my view:
First, your expression is really amazing. Loved it.
Second, avoid using "pronouns" in the introduction.
Third, your Introduction seems to be unclear. I cant comprehend what stance u have raised? (kindly clear that).
Fourth, outline even does not hit "Let there be more lights in the places of worship." What's your take about the topic should be clear. Think more!
Thanks, hope that u take it in positive direction.
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