Travolta, welcome to the CSS Forum Pakistan.

Your intention to help the aspirants and sharing material is commendable.

In my thinking amalgamation of these sentences cannot be termed as an essay. There is a great room of improvement. Firstly please dont use green colour bigger font, it gives difficuilty for reading in forum. Secondly, try to improve your sentence strucuting and usage of grammer. Thirdly, there seems to be dearth of cohesion in your sentences to give an impression of good paragraph.

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