@R A Alizai

A very good expansion with smooth flow of ideas. I really liked its coherence and connection between thought. However, one thing I noticed is that you have focused only on one idea i.e. the need for people's vigilence about their leaders in a democracy, but I think you could have incorporated more ideas like, vigilence in terms of external threat, against one's ownself (I mean to correct one's own behaviour), internal threats to the country and so on.

Despite this, I think you may get something about 6 to 8 marks in 10.

Regards