Originally Posted by nickfury

Very well written, excellent use of grammar and the facts. Good job.

I pointed out a few changes, check them out plus something i noted was "right" and "right" try to change the right/wrong Right to something else, doesn't sound so good to me for your call.

Change "thing" to "something"


Instead of "in the same" you could use "Likewise". Try to rewrite the sentence to avoid using "thing". Doesn't sound so good, dont you think?


Instead of using "right" the second time in the same sentence even though the meaning is different, try using "accurate, ethical, proper, precise".


"Wrong" It doesn't sound too bad here but see what you can do with it.