It's a Nice outline, however Farah, You do not have to put Salman Taseer as a direct example...You can use the assassination of prominent leaders or figures. (Plus skip his funeral)
Secondly...Please express the reason of this intolerance with respect to Pakistan. Extremism and related bombings are by products of this intolerance.

Now solution should be something practical...not mere abstract. It's true that one must show tolerance as it's enshrine in Islam...but at the same time you must put forward the idea of very reform of Mullah Culture. Unify system of preaching by clerics belonging to various sects. Sectarianism and it's balance. In the last the social-economic chaos. I am sure you will get the idea...

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