@sajjad

You need to clear ur mind and decide some things before u write a word of the essay.
you have to take a stand either u agree or you don't. then prove your stand with strong arguments. Conclude every paragraph by making it relevant to your stand.
it looks as if u were writting on the history of abuses of women in pakistan or status of women in pakistan.there is no relavance to the topic in the first few paras I read.


still, it was a good attempt. These were my views and may be i am totally wrong.


@ zakir

I don't agree with your views, you have to stick to your stand. you can not just agree and disagree at the same time. I agree that it was a tough topic.


@rani

I attempted the same topic in 2010 and scored good.