Thread: Essay On Food Crisis/Food Insecurity (Plz Check & Comment)
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Old Saturday, July 09, 2011
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Originally Posted by zareenkhan View Post
Sir, introduction of your essay is unnecessarily elongated. Besides, it does not address the topic directly. Therefore, I put my humble suggestion of rewriting this introduction. Your efforts are plausible. Good job. Take care.
thnx sis for ur kind comment and suggestion......ya i'll surely rewrite the intro of the essay......sis wat abt the other part of the essay?does it go in right direction?..thnx
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