A really good attempt, keep it up.
Suggestion:
You are describing the status of woman on religious basis. Though you have included "Conditions of women before islam" but I'll suggest you go like this:

• Woman and Judaism
• Woman and Christianity
• Woman and Hinduism
• Woman and other religions

This will help you to elaborate this topic contextually much better.

Best Regards

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