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Old Wednesday, January 04, 2012
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Originally Posted by Hamza Kahlon View Post
he will top the essay exam if this topic comes which obviously is not certain.

But i agree your essay covers almost every aspect of the topic, but in an idealistic scenario, id say u can further improve the structure of ur essay.
Another thing, there should be an outline or atleast a thesis statement so that the examiner knows what all ur covering and how, without needing to read every word of ur essay. U could suffer because of that.

In the end a very good effort, but do work on ur grammer (noticed quite a few mistakes) and try to 'upgrade' ur written expression and vocabulary.

P.S. After going through a few paragraphs just now, i wanted to 'warn' for ur own good that work on ur grammer. Uve made innumerable mistakes. Good ideas but horrible grammer.

The only thing i can suggest u in this short time, i guess is that u should ready new articles and focus on sentence structure.
Thanks a lot. Indeed my grammar is weak. ;( Yes, i shall try to make outlines in next attempt.
I would work over it as i have ample of time almost 3.5 years. Humary pass waqt bohat hai.
Just keep on praying for me and let not me astray. THANKS!
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