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Old Tuesday, March 27, 2012
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@Wasim

gud atempt..but as far as the topic of the essay is concerned u have given some irrelevant points in ur outline(essay)..When writing essay u must hit the topic from the very beginning keeping in view the topic of the essay..Since the topic is "Strategies For Alleviation Of Poverty", so u shud focus on Strategies more than anything else...To me Following are some irrelevant points:

1. What is poverty
2. Causes Of Poverty

Above points are not related to the essay topic, so avoid them...Furthermore ur intro isnt sufficient to cover the soul of the essay..Ur intro must be strong and attractive that must give the whole view of the essay..

Nevertheless, keep working hard, Practice makes man perfect...Wishing u gud luck..Regards
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