good attempt once again, but the style remains the same.. every good writer varies his style in his various writings.. And also the theme is the same as ur earlier attempt had.. Try to create innovation, novelty, something new, or write something old with a new style.. otherwise your writings and attempts will not be noticed.. Keep writing and keep looking for improvements.. Gud Luck n Stay Blessed..

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