@Sadialeo

Your Intro:

The system of education in Pakistan

education is the most effective way of bringing up the people of any country to meet and compete at international fronts, speak for rights, distinguish between right and wrong and devise practical steps for advancement of the country. (It is a good start, but try to shorten your sentences). It is the key factor for national development and its availability (Don't know whether education can be made available. Rephrase it like, availability of educated and skilled human capital ....) ensures accelerated growth and progress. Deprivation of education can go in reverse direction and bring the country at its lowest ebb. (You can not deprive some one of education one has. Rephrase it like for example, Lack of education is therefore a major obstacle in economic progress .....) unfortunately, Pakistan depicts the later picture. Despite of many provisions of the constitution of 1973, (provisions about what? state clearly) nothing has been done yet for its up gradation. Indecisive system of education, (Education system can be ineffective, but not indecisive) outdated syllabus, meager budget allocation and many other such factors have played havoc with the fate of this unfortunate nation. Importance of education can not be negated. Pakistan is a developing nation riddled with a multitude of problems and facing innumerable challenges, the only long term solution lies in the dispensation of education which is free of vested interests.

Your intro is a good effort. Also try to incorporate changes that has already been posted by other member.