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Old Thursday, November 08, 2012
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Some people earn little money but they spend more money in their expenditures.( This proverb tells us to live within our means and not to spend more than our resources and pocket allows.) Eventually, crisis COMES into their lives. They become tense and unhappy. As(OMIT) it is well said that cut your coat according to your cloth. Likewise, our current government has been suffered( HAS BEEN SUFFERING/ HAS SUFFERED) because of corruption, malpractice and bad governance. The current democratic government, usually spends a lot of money on their protocol, privileges and comfort life rather than spend on socioeconomic and growth. Moreover, our ministers either federal or provisional spends a lot of money in the fuel, unnecessary call, comfort houses and other privileges( REPETITION IN THREE SENTENCES, YOU CAN JUST SAY THAT OUR GOVERNMENT SPENDS MORE THAN OUR RESOURCES ALLOW INSTEAD OF CUTTING DOWN ON UNNECESSARY EXPENSES AND AS A RESULT OUR DEBTS KEEP INCREASING EVERY YEAR) . Then, its effect comes on our economy and government becomes destabilize and goes to down (WRONG) If our government KEEPS this point in their mind that cut your coat according to your cloth. Then the problems can be resolved effectively.

You need to develop a habit of reading everyday
Your grammar is incorrect, wrong use of prepositions, adverbs, pronouns etc.
Try not to use four of five word sentences.
Relate your examples to the topic and make sure they are relevant
Use at least one quotation per expansion
Start by explaining meaning of the proverb if you don’t want to use a quotation.
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