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Originally Posted by sheikh87
"Cream Always rises to the top"
In our Pakistani society, leg pulling and words of discouragement are often used for counterparts. We have evolved as a selfish community, with the passage of time, and the focus of individuals are mainly on their own self interest. Somehow, the roots of this ill behavior can be accredited to the feelings of competition forced into young children in joint family system. Nevertheless, parents and teachers also, by their negative talks and baseless criticism, creates a negative mindset in individuals when it comes to appreciate someone. This leads to a circulatory transfer of this ill from parents to their children, children to their children and so on. As a result, we can easily see someone with a good intellect or talent, in schools or in organizations, mostly undergoes back biting and is not much liked by others, specially, who are striving to glow their presence and intend to be noticed when playing in ground, participating in class, presenting their ideas to a group. But someone, who is potentially more skilful or talented will eventually be distinguished from others and will be appreciated.
Req: Please pin point the mistakes, or suggest a better usage of word in any sentence.
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Dear, you have written a wonderful passage, but you just got derailed from the main topic itself i.e "Cream Always Rises to the Top"
this passage is more like a "demoralizing-culture in our society"
the only thing you wrote according to your topic is the last line.
many an aspirant fail in essay just because of this problem. they think they have written awesome, though, they really have, indeed, yet they fail to realize that their material was mostly not according to the topic.
Same is the case with other questions. just remember, stick to the question asked.
there are some other mistakes too, but they are not as serious as what i just pointed out, according to me.
Hope this would help
