You have some good material here and you do show the understanding of the topic you are writing on. What you need is- try taking one point at a time and elaborate it. This will make paragraphs each with one central theme.
e.g. Consider this para
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Some of the black sheep present in Muslims in westerners as whole are creating a sense of hatred for one another. By doing this, they become able too gain their benefits. That is why it is necessary to point out those ones and be punished.
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Too many ideas, all mixed up and none elaborated. Tell the reader who are the black sheep, what are they doing, how is it harmful, how to point them out, what purpose will it serve.
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Islam has never taught about violence and terror. It has emphatically asked in Quran and Hadith to remain peaceful. The life of holy prophet is exemplary in this regard. All the Prophets, Sufis and saints taught the world the tolerance. It is due to this that Holy Prophet never got revenge from any of His enemies. The example possibly quoted here is the situation at the time of conquest of Makkah. Contrarily, westerners call Muslims the cruel ones.
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Write about Quran, hadith and sufis one by one; relating each with the central idea of your essay.
After you have organized all your points in concrete paras, try to form some logical flow through out the essay. That is arrange your paras in such a way that central theme develops as the essay proceeds.