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RMKamran · #2 Thursday, February 26, 2015

Quote:

Originally Posted by Metlo

Labor saving devices are more troublesome than they are worth.
Outline.
Preamble:
labor saving devices may ensure rapid progress in work, however, such progress as without human consideration is of no value.
A. TROUBLES CAUSED BY LABOR SAVING DEVICES:
1.laborers are destroyed mentally, morally and physically.
2. Frequent episodes of hunger and humiliation for workless laborers.
3. Erosion of character due to chronic idleness.
4. Death of creative power due to over-dependence on the labor saving machines.
5. Mental chaos resulting from over-indulgence in the labor saving devices.
6. Physical and psychological ailments arising from the excessive use of modern devices.
7. Inhuman, unethical and unjust socio-economic results of the modern machinery.
8. Economic inequality due accumulation of wealth in the hands of a few.
9. Socio-cultural values of the past have been hampered by uneven use of modern machines.
10. Use of labor saving machinery causes enviornmental pollution; e.g cultivation, industry affect enviornment and the quality of life.
11. The labor force in the world today, especially in the third world, suffer from mental, moral, physical and financial problems.
B. THE WAY FORWARD:
1. skill development needs to be prioritised over the use of labor saving devices.
2. Human consideration should be valued more than the adoption of any counter-productive technology.
C. conclusion:

Aoa,

Despite some loopholes, the outline seems good to me. Here are my following comments:

1.You did not mention “labour saving devices”. N if you did, then you should have mentioned them in the main body as well.

2.Rather penning down sentences, you should have used short words or broke them into 2-3 sub-points.

3. You have missed a major troublesome: cyber-crimes being done through electronic devices: online money laundering –hacking websites cause: - exploitation of privacy - threat to national security and sovereignty.

4. Since this is an argumentative essay, so whether you support or reject it, you should have also penned down a counter argument – the worthiness of labour saving devices – time saving – long-lasting and put less burden on the expenditure due to labour. N since you have supported the topic, so you should have put forward another counter argument to support your argument and counter the worthiness of such devices. In this section, one should be careful in the sense not to repeat the ideas.

5. If I had attempted this topic, I would have been given some examples from Pakistan as well.

6. Your way forward is good but this point could have been added:
- Ensuring the use of environment friendly technology in making labour saving devices

Well, I made two outlines. One on "war on terror" and the second one on your topic but I decided to go with the former. But, I have found your topic the easiest one. I wish you and everybody a warm best of luck. You kindly pray for me as well brother.

Stay blessed.