View Single Post
  #8  
Old Wednesday, July 29, 2015
Nazish Hina's Avatar
Nazish Hina Nazish Hina is offline
Senior Member
Medal of Appreciation: Awarded to appreciate member's contribution on forum. (Academic and professional achievements do not make you eligible for this medal) - Issue reason:
 
Join Date: Dec 2014
Location: Searching...
Posts: 697
Thanks: 248
Thanked 449 Times in 287 Posts
Nazish Hina is on a distinguished road
Default

Quote:
Originally Posted by haseebbaloch View Post
replace the position of example of japan and put british first because japan learn from british

secondly add the point of green revolution and boi-technology in food and agriculture headings

thirdly talk about some E-learning which is missing in outline

fourthly the role media or anti-hacking software to curb cyber crime , a valid point











































and thanks
GMOs ARE bio technology.
Open source learning IS e learning
I don't understand, why would you give feedback when you don't know?

Sent from my iPhone using Tapatalk

Quote:
Originally Posted by Man Jaanbazam View Post
You are welcome. Not everything is vague.
You have just written "Transport". How Transport is useful in the development of economic prosperity in terms of Science and Technology? Yes, you may mention Green Technology, A Cheaper and Healthy Mode like Hybrid Cars.
You have mentioned farming thing under two to three headings. You should have mentioned it under one heading. Do not focus on one thing only. There are a lot of other aspects.
And I really do not get security thing that how can be it helpful in the development of economic prosperity in terms of Science and Technology?

Other than these I just have suggested you to make things more clear.
Your essay is on the track but it seems single sided. You should introduce all the key factors that play an important role for economic prosperity and then focus on science and technology. I mean outline is what examiner gets an idea about your essay by reading key points. I have just suggested the things to you on your pattern of thinking so that you can grasp the idea more easily.

The other way of writing this topic is by focusing on Pakistan or Muslim countries OR you can also negate the statement by discussing adversities of science and technology. Its all about how much effectively you can build your thesis and support your argument later on.
Good Luck !
This is what I was talking about .. Although I wouldn't negate it because I believe science is powerful for the economy and humanity both. But if course, I can add misconceptions. I also understand the outline part. If first impression fails to impress then it'll be hard to win the examiner back.

I meant that science can improve security through advanced surveillance and data of criminals. Which in turn would benefit economy. But obviously it was bad phrasing at its best.

I shouldn't have written so much about farming but I read it recently so I had a lot of information just sitting in my brain so I decided to put it in it. :p Which was stupid of me. Even though I knew that I should answer the question that's asked not, that I would have liked to be asked.
Thanks a lot

Sent from my iPhone using Tapatalk
__________________
♥ Alis volat propriis ♥

Last edited by incounternable; Wednesday, July 29, 2015 at 11:11 AM. Reason: merged
Reply With Quote
The Following User Says Thank You to Nazish Hina For This Useful Post:
Man Jaanbazam (Wednesday, July 29, 2015)