Originally Posted by aftababbasi

Dua, I won't comment on your first essay shared by the title of 'Books', because of the reason that it's been a 'copy and paste' work.

However, I would like to commit a few of my thoughts here on this page about 'Role of Education' to let you know about your writing.

Dua you just have good knowledge; posses will to write good in a way as good an essay can be; and more importantly, you have substantial understanding of meanings of the words at 'intuitive level'. But here lies the problem too; you are just messing up with the words showing as if you have been possessed by them.

The briefest but resonating solution, I will propose to you, is that, 'Try to write short, simple and compact sentences.'

If it's possible for you, then try to consult a teacher as you need counselling to improve your expression.