Perfect. Your paragraph is way perfect than mine. Thank you very much Anam. Certainly your version could earn me 4 to 5 more marks.
538 are the total words. My precis boasts meager 135 words
. 1/3 turns out to be 179 words. If I include your version of first paragraph it increments to 140.
Don't know how to stretch it to add 40 missing words.