Originally Posted by mustansar~hussain

Grammatical mistakes
You’ve repeated same 02 mistakes again.
1) Having been non-NATO ally = Having been a non-NATO ally
2) attacks not only have killed terrorists , but also hoards of innocent



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1) (Implement although & yet) Having been a non-NATO ally she has confronted with militancy.

2) [You may be right, but it seems irrelevant to the topic. Although, yet or however can work better here]
As a matter of fact, the drone attacks not only have killed terrorists , but also hoards of innocent people have been killed.
[Therefore or any other transition related to above “although, yet or however”]
It has destabilized the whole South Aisa and world politics.

3) [Don’t be specific] On account of such scenario, the militant groups incite their innocent people in Afghanistan, Pakistan, Egypt and Syria to fight with Pakistan army & western world.

On account of such scenario, the militant groups incite their (innocent is irrelevant here) people to (use adjective) promote their (use adjective) ideology.


4) [Irrelevant, No need of this sentence] On the other hand, India, who is one of the biggest enemies of Pakistan, since its inception, is trying her best to destabilize our country.

5) [Moreover,]
India has been a supportive source to incite Balouch rebellions & militant groups in Pakistan.

6) [No need of this sentence] She does not miss any chance to add fuel to the fire.


7) [No need of this sentence here, or manage it in the beginning] Because of prevailing circumstances, Pakistan is passing through a very sensitive episode, due to unwanted militancy in our country; many innocent people have been killed.

8) [Change the order of sentences]
In addition to that, terrorism has adversely affected our country greater in intensity and larger in scale. It is the need of the hour to take considerable steps to root out terrorism from Pakistan. Although it is a global problem, it can be eliminated with the improvement of socioeconomic and political stability.

In addition to that, terrorism has adversely affected our country greater in intensity and larger in scale. Although it is a global problem, it can be eliminated with the improvement of socioeconomic and political stability. It is the need of the hour to take considerable steps to root out terrorism from Pakistan.