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Originally Posted by waqarabbasi
your outline is full of examples; try to write ideas in your outline and then give examples in the main body.
your essay has many good points, but they are unorganised.
this outline is a little bit scattered.moreover, the ideas are not powerful to support your stance; you need to add strong arguments.
i hope it will work.
good luck
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I will work on it. Thanks for your comment Mr.waqar
Regards