Originally Posted by hazelnut

Great nations win without fighting.
Outline:
Introduction: The greatness of a nation is never earned in the battlefield.

((Excellent thesis statement 10/10))


Example of the USA:
•The Monroe doctrine
•Emergence of USA after WW-II as super-power

((I think you want to say that USA is not great because it used war as a mean to achieve greatness.
True !
But you have poorly portrayed your idea. It is more ambiguous than clear. It's much more safer to completely omit this point. 1/10 for this))


What is the real greatness of a nation

((just write "the real or true greatness" don't write "what is".

The point is relevant so 4/10))

Drawbacks of fighting:

War has always been a recipe for depredation
•Economic setback
•Political setback( e.g. USA’s foreign policy on retreat)

((My friend don't mention USA repeatedly, the essay is about great Nations not USA,))

•Psychological and social effects
Today war is a negative sum game

((3/10 for this section))


Benefits to nations who avoid war

((nice heading.. 5/10))

•Cutting down the military expenditure

((write "low military expenditure"))

•Focus on development and nation-building
•Exalted standing in comity of nations

((nice points 5/10))

How to win without fighting
•Economic growth( e.g. China vs. USA)
•Multinational corporations ( theory of neo-colonialism)

((neo colonialism is something negative, okay.. You can justify your stance. But do it in the body and MNCs are included in economy,))


•Fourth generation warfare (Sun Tzu’s saying: The supreme art of war is to subdue the enemy without fighting.)
•Media warfare due to globalization
Challenges to Pakistan and use of soft power
•Victory earned by hard power is short-lived
Conclusion