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Originally Posted by Zoha
Aoa, it's a very good effort.
My suggestion : your essay was going very smoothly till the end of causes part n then there was an abrupt shift to remedies.Add some connecting lines in between to maintain the coherence.
Best of luck.
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W.salam. .I will infuse some transition words to enhance its connectivity and coherence .Thanku
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