Learn to walk before you run
 

[B][COLOR="green"][SIZE="4"]Seniors:Please comment on the expansion of the cited subject, given below.[/SIZE][/COLOR][/B]

[B][COLOR="Blue"][SIZE="4"]Learn to walk before you run[/SIZE][/COLOR][/B]


There is no royal road to success rather its culmination of gradual but persistent struggle. The idea of achieving milestone overnight may deem fit in fable and fictions but not in the world of reality. Accomplishment of any task in real life requires certain steps to be followed in logical and gradual manner that lead to the destination. As one cannot enjoy mastery of a language unless have learnt the alphabet, the same way no one can be the adept runner without developing the ability to walk first.

Life has become overwhelmingly systematic and calculated in contemporary age. The researches conducted in the areas of Humanities and Management has enlightened the Man to devise a well planed, disciplined and strategic approach for achievement of goals. In this process every step carries huge importance and doing away with any of it may cause failure.

One must be armed with essential skills, experience and knowledge in order to perform effectively and efficiently. Getting responsible positions through back-stair influence without having experience and skills always remain unjust to the respective role.

Over ambitious minds, some time, strive to realize the dreams in wee time using shortcuts but this approach leads to failure as there is no shortcut to success.

While turning the pages of history it can be realized that those who touched the zenith of majesty, achieved milestones by persistent and valiant struggle throughout the life. These shining stars of history started from scratch and struggled long to become part of galaxy. Following the footsteps of these role models; it is imperative for the contemporaries to pursue the route with steady but persistent struggle without looking for shortcuts.

It is a very good effort. I think you require some more practice in this area.

related and to the point
 

Hello,
Your expanision of ideas is related and to the point.
This topic gives the sense that gradually improve yourself
then compete with the others.
Although,i am a junior member on cssforum but i have attempt papers
of css composition.so,i appreciate your ideas.

Salam
Dear its a good attempt ,keep it up.:)
Regards

@AFRMS
Brother Thanks for your comments.It would be a kindest favour if you can guide me to improve my writing skills ,specificaly for upcoming attemt of 2010.

Brother :ohmy: :oo No dear i am your sister:laugh: .I have read some of your posts Mashallah your expression is good.
few things
Reading books really helps a lot ,improve your vocabulary by learning a new word every day.
Read Dawn News or any other english newspaper of your liking,also read articles espacially related to current affairs daily from net,gather material from net and make your own notes.
Practice basics of correction ,direct indirect etc.Write essay every week it helps a lot.
Write down and check new words or expressions that you find in paper or article.Avoid spelling mistakes,bit of novelty does magic add quotations or sayings.
Improve your handwriting,work on your expression.Be positive and keep working hard.
Best wishes
Regards:)

saleeqa Batool
 

aoa
its very good attempt
but try to explain you one idea in one paragaraph
your expansion should not exceed four paragraphs
try to hit the topic in firs few lines rather moving around the topic
try to use suitable words .dont use bambastic language
be specific thats it.


take care

Regards

farhan badar

[QUOTE=Saleeqa Batool][B][COLOR="blue"][SIZE="4"]Seniors:Please comment on the expansion of the cited subject, given below.[/SIZE][/COLOR][/B]

[B][COLOR="Blue"][SIZE="4"]Learn to walk before you run[/SIZE][/COLOR][/B]


There is no royal road to success rather [COLOR="blue"]its [/COLOR]culmination of [COLOR="Teal"]gradual but[/COLOR] persistent struggle. The idea of achieving [COLOR="Green"]milestone[/COLOR] overnight may[COLOR="blue"] deem fit [/COLOR]in fable and fictions but not in the [COLOR="Blue"]world of reality[/COLOR]. Accomplishment of any task in real life requires certain steps to be followed in logical [COLOR="Blue"]and gradual[/COLOR] manner that lead to the destination. As one cannot enjoy mastery of a language [COLOR="Green"]unless have [/COLOR]learnt the alphabet,[COLOR="Green"] the same way [/COLOR]no one can be [COLOR="Green"]the adept[/COLOR] runner without developing the ability to walk first.

[COLOR="Green"]Life has become overwhelmingly systematic and calculated in contemporary age[/COLOR]. The researches conducted in the areas of Humanities and Management [COLOR="blue"]has [/COLOR]enlightened the Man to devise a well planed, disciplined and strategic approach for achievement of goals. In this process every step carries huge importance and doing away with any of it may cause failure.

One must be armed with essential skills, experience and knowledge in order to perform effectively and efficiently. Getting responsible positions through back-stair influence without having experience and skills always [COLOR="blue"]remain[/COLOR] unjust to the respective role.

Over ambitious minds, some time, strive to realize the dreams in wee time using shortcuts but this approach leads to failure as there is no shortcut to success.

[COLOR="Green"]While turning the pages of history it can be realized[/COLOR] that those who touched the zenith of majesty, achieved milestones by persistent and valiant struggle throughout the life. These shining stars of history started from scratch and struggled long to become part of galaxy. [COLOR="Green"]Following the footsteps of these role models[/COLOR]; it is imperative for the [COLOR="Green"]contemporaries[/COLOR] to pursue the route with steady but persistent struggle without looking for shortcuts.[/QUOTE]

overall nice attempt
i colored the parts that contain errors or don't make accurate sense
avoid repetition of words, change the language if you're repeating ideas
try to put one or two quotes as well
be more careful with the usage of vocabulary

all the best.

regards,

@ farhan babar
thnx brother.I shall try to pratice in the light of your guidance.

@ Adil Memon
Brother Thank you very much for the kindness.I have tried to rectify the disrepencies pointed by you but at some places i could not identify the mistake.I am reproducing it again and request you to please higlight the nature of that mistake .It would be a kindest favour.
[quote]

There is no royal road to success rather it is earned through persistent struggle. The idea of achieving [b]milestone [/b] overnight may be demonstrated in fables and fictions but not in the reality. Accomplishment of any task in real life requires certain steps to be followed in logical and gradual manner that lead to the destination. As one cannot enjoy mastery of a language without learning the alphabets, the same way no one can be the runner without developing the ability to walk first.

[b]Life has become systematic and calculated in the modern world.[/b] The researches conducted in the areas of Humanities and Management have enlightened the Man to devise a well planned, disciplined and strategic approach for achievement of goals. In this process every step carries huge importance and doing away with any of it may cause failure.

One must be armed with essential skills, experience and knowledge in order to perform effectively and efficiently. Getting responsible positions through back-stair influence without having experience and skills always[b] remains [/b] unjust to the respective role. Over ambitious minds, some time, strive to realize the dreams in wee time using shortcuts but this approach leads to failure as there is no shortcut to success.

History reveals that those who touched the zenith of majesty, achieved milestones by persistent and valiant struggle throughout the life. These shining stars of history started from scratch and struggled long to become part of galaxy.[b] Following the footsteps of these role models;[/b] it is imperative for the [b] contemporaries[/b] to pursue the route with steady but persistent struggle without looking for shortcuts.[/quote]

milestone... it would look better if you add 'a' before it.

life has become... i didn't understand what did you mean by that. it doesn't seem to be a defensible argument.

'remain' should have been 'remains'... you have already corrected it.

following the footsteps... idiomatic mistake.. it should be 'following in the footsteps'. i would suggest a different usage though. your usage doesn't make correct sense.

contemporaries... it isn't the right word. requires change.

note: all these suggestions are made according to the best of my knowledge.

you shouldn't be worrying about these minor corrections. just act upon the broad suggestions i wrote in my previous post.

all the best.

regards,

@ Adil Memon
Brother I am speechless before your Kindness.They way you have guided me is commendable and i will remain grateful to you always.Thank You Very Much.

Children have no childhood in Pakistan
 

Looking for kind favour .......Please comment

[B][SIZE="3"][COLOR="DarkOrange"]Children Have No Childhood in Pakistan[/COLOR][/SIZE].[/B]

The real beauty of life lies in childhood, the infant age characterized by innocence, indifference, purity and peace of mind. Children rarely confront the intricacies of life thus enjoy it to fullest in this age. However, encountering the tough realities may blur the colors of childhood and this situation is quite prevalent in Pakistan.

Our country in flooded with socio-economic evils engulfing the beauties and charms of the innocence. Insufficient recreational opportunities, unavailability of free education, scarce resources and status discrimination prevent the kids to enjoy the life.

Poverty is one of the biggest feuds to young angles forcing them towards physical labour .It snatches the shining smiles and steals the redness of pretty cheeks of kids. Poor law and order situation portray the ugly picture of life and ever rising inflation deter the innocent desires to materialize. Summarily, children fell victim to all social evils either directly or indirectly.

Infant age is crucial in personality development. Freud the father of psychology has said that initial five years of age determine one’s path for his upcoming fifty years so if a child has fulfilled needs at that stage would lead a balanced life. A kid has to grow and ultimately assume the responsibility of real life. They are future of nation and by depriving them from sufficient opportunities of recreation, learning and personality development, we not only stand guilty for snatching colors of infancy but also commit the offence of preparing incapable leadership for future.

Children Have No Childhood in Pakistan.
 

[QUOTE=Saleeqa Batool]Looking for kind favour .......Please comment

[B][SIZE="3"][COLOR="DarkOrange"]Children Have No Childhood in Pakistan[/COLOR][/SIZE].[/B]

[COLOR="Blue"]The real beauty of life lies in childhood, the infant age characterized by innocence, indifference, purity and peace of mind. Children rarely confront the intricacies of life thus enjoy it to fullest in this age.[/COLOR] However, encountering the [COLOR="Blue"]tough realities[/COLOR] may blur the colors of childhood and this situation is quite prevalent in Pakistan.

Our country[COLOR="Blue"] in[/COLOR] flooded with socio-economic [COLOR="Blue"]evils [/COLOR]engulfing the beauties and charms of the innocence. Insufficient recreational opportunities, unavailability of free education, scarce resources and status discrimination prevent the kids to enjoy the life.

Poverty [COLOR="Blue"]is one of the biggest feuds to young angles forcing them towards [/COLOR]physical labour .It snatches the shining smiles and steals the redness of pretty cheeks of kids. [COLOR="Blue"]Poor law and order situation portray the ugly picture of life and ever rising inflation deter the innocent desires to materialize. [/COLOR]Summarily, children [COLOR="Blue"]fell[/COLOR] victim to all social evils either directly or indirectly.

Infant age is crucial in personality development. Freud [COLOR="Blue"]the father of psychology [/COLOR]has said that initial five years of age determine one’s path for his upcoming fifty years so if a child has fulfilled needs at that stage [COLOR="Blue"]would lead[/COLOR] a balanced life. A kid has to grow and ultimately assume the responsibility of real life. They are future of nation [COLOR="Blue"]and by[/COLOR] depriving them from sufficient opportunities of recreation, learning and personality development, we not only stand guilty for snatching colors of infancy but also commit the offence of preparing incapable leadership for future.[/QUOTE]

I gave it a try...

Highlighted ones range from grammatical errors, inappropriate or in complete expressions, pen-slip mistakes, unnecessarily long sentences...and others...
Note: Beginning was irrelevant, hit the topic in the beginning, dont go hanky panky:))

@ Sajid A. Balouch

i have tried to remove the mistake please review it once more.

[B][SIZE="3"][COLOR="DarkRed"]Children Have No Childhood in Pakistan[/COLOR][/SIZE].[/B]

The real beauty of life lies in childhood but confronting the hardships of life in this age, blurs its colours and this situation is quite prevalent in Pakistan. Our country is flooded with socio economic problems engulfing the beauties and charms of infancy.

Poverty is the biggest enemy of kids, forcing them to physical labour and depriving them from quality education. A report of Federal Bureau of Statistics reveals that 3.8 Million children of age group 5 to 14 are labouring in Pakistan to support the financial needs of their families. It also discloses that Pakistan is second amongst the countries of world with highest number of children who do not go to school.

Majority of school going children is enrolled either in Government schools are low standard private schools. These schools normally lack the proper facilities of education and recreation and resultantly students remain deprived from quality learning and sufficient opportunities of personality development, according to the needs of modern age.

Infant age is crucial in personality development. Freud, the renowned Psychologist, has said that initial five years of age determine one’s path for his upcoming fifty years. A kid has to grow and ultimately assume the responsibility of real life thus they are future of the nation. By depriving them from sufficient opportunities of recreation, learning and personality development, we not only stand guilty for snatching colors of infancy but also commit the offence of preparing incapable leadership for future.
,

[QUOTE=Saleeqa Batool]@ Sajid A. Balouch

i have tried to remove the mistake please review it once more.

[B][SIZE="3"][COLOR="DarkRed"]Children Have No Childhood in Pakistan[/COLOR][/SIZE].[/B]

The real beauty of life lies in childhood but confronting the hardships of life in this age, blurs its colours and this situation is quite prevalent in Pakistan. Our country is flooded with socio economic problems engulfing the beauties and charms of infancy.

Poverty is the biggest enemy of kids, forcing them to physical labour and depriving them from quality education. A report of Federal Bureau of Statistics reveals that 3.8 Million children of age group 5 to 14 are labouring in Pakistan to support the financial needs of their families. It also discloses that Pakistan is second amongst the countries of world with highest number of children who do not go to school.

Majority of school going children is enrolled either in Government schools are low standard private schools. These schools normally lack the proper facilities of education and recreation and resultantly students remain deprived from quality learning and sufficient opportunities of personality development, according to the needs of modern age.

Infant age is crucial in personality development. Freud, the renowned Psychologist, has said that initial five years of age determine one’s path for his upcoming fifty years. A kid has to grow and ultimately assume the responsibility of real life thus they are future of the nation. By depriving them from sufficient opportunities of recreation, learning and personality development, we not only stand guilty for snatching colors of infancy but also commit the offence of preparing incapable leadership for future.
,[/QUOTE]

Good attempt...keep continue your efforts...

I have rephrased it as...(mistakes are welcome:) )

A big number of children in Pakistan has to live a childhood which is devoid of its beauties. The childhood of children gets spoiled as they have to face the hardships being caused by the socio-economic challenges prevalent in Pakistan. The country is flooded with immense challenges which tend to wither the beauties and charms of childhood, particularly of those belonging to poor strata.

The menace of poverty leads to child labour which affects the education prospects of these children in Pakistan. A report of Federal Bureau of Statistics reveals that 3.8 Million children of age group 5 to 14 are labouring in Pakistan to meet the financial needs of their families. It also discloses that Pakistan is second amongst the countries of the world having highest number of children who do not go to school. The state of the affairs deprive children of the beauties of their tender age.

Majority of school going children is enrolled either in government schools or in low standard private schools. These schools normally lack the proper facilities which badly affect learning, personality development and other needs of children.

Infant age is crucial in personality development. Freud, the renowned Psychologist, has said that initial five years of age determine one’s path for his upcoming fifty years. The above-mentioned children in Pakistan generally lack proper attention in these basic years of his growth. By depriving children from sufficient opportunities of recreation, learning and personality development, we not only stand guilty for snatching their colours of infancy but also commit the offence of preparing incapable leadership for future.

Note:
dear improve structures...dont lengthen sentences...one sentence for one idea, and two for two...mention the topic in between your writing to show your relevance with the topic...Other tips with other writings...till then chao chao:)

We learn from history that we don’t learn from history.
 

i have no words to pay my gratitude to the seniors for the valuable guidance they provided me to improve my writing skills.Here goes my next attempt in which i have made utmost effort to write in the light of your guidance.



[B][COLOR="DarkOrange"][SIZE="3"]We learn from history that we don’t learn from history.[/SIZE][/COLOR][/B]



The modern world may turn in to heaven if history is regarded as torch-bearer. However it never happened in the history of mankind. The thrust for material pursuits always set aside the lessons of history that resulted into the recurrence of blunders historically proved as lethal and disastrous.

History enlightens that nothing is eternal in this world but human acts. The brutal rulers, of their times, ultimately departed their lives. Their acts were prosecuted in the impartial court of history to decide their place in it. Many of them were convicted ruthlessly and their name affixed on the dark pages of history. Nevertheless, no lesson was learnt and that brutality continued to prevail in the coming periods.

History also acknowledges and appreciates the services rendered for betterment of humanity. There is a galaxy of stars sparkling on the bright pages of history. These shining stars devoted their lives for the cause of humanity. History rewarded them irrespective of their social and monetary status. Socrates was a stone cutter but he devoted his life to preach truth against cruelty of ruthless rule. He was humiliated and sentenced to death but history honored him. Today he is remembered as a great philosopher and a dignified person. His opponents were lost in the ocean of time and no one knows their names.

History proceeds in just and equitable way. It has proved that human values of love, justice and dignity prevail in the long run over the momentary delights. This turbulent world would transform in to a peaceful, progressive and prosperous one, when human beings stared learning from history.

[QUOTE=Saleeqa Batool]i have no words to pay my gratitude to the seniors for the valuable guidance they provided me to improve my writing skills.Here goes my next attempt in which i have made utmost effort to write in the light of your guidance.



[B][COLOR="DarkOrange"][SIZE="3"]We learn from history that we don’t learn from history.[/SIZE][/COLOR][/B]



The modern world may turn in to heaven if history is regarded as torch-bearer. However it never happened in the history of mankind.[U]The thrust for material pursuits always set aside the lessons of history that resulted into the recurrence of blunders historically proved as lethal and disastrous. [/U]

History enlightens that nothing [COLOR="Lime"][COLOR="SeaGreen"]but human acts are eternal[/COLOR][/COLOR]. The brutal rulers, of their times, ultimately departed their lives. Their acts were prosecuted in the impartial court of history to decide their place in it. Many of them were convicted ruthlessly and their name affixed on the dark pages of history.[U] Nevertheless, no lesson was learnt and that brutality continued to prevail in the coming periods.[/U]

History also acknowledges and appreciates the services rendered for betterment of humanity. There is a galaxy of stars sparkling on the bright pages of history. These shining stars devoted their lives for the cause of humanity. History rewarded them irrespective of their social and monetary status. Socrates was a stone cutter but he devoted his life to preach [COLOR="SeaGreen"]the[/COLOR] truth against cruelty of ruthless rule. He ishumiliated and sentenced to death but history honored him. Today he [COLOR="SeaGreen"]is[/COLOR] remembered as a great philosopher and a dignified person. His opponents were lost in the ocean of time and no one knows their names.

History proceeds in just and equitable way. It has proved that human values of love, justice and dignity prevail in the long run over the momentary delights. This turbulent world would transform in to a peaceful, progressive and prosperous one, when human beings [COLOR="SeaGreen"]started[/COLOR] learning from history.[/QUOTE]

Note:little or no attention is suspected in this attempt...except underlined ones it seemed irrelevant...keep the topic in mind...you can do it...write and write...hopeful attempt even then... ;)

Please comment

[B][SIZE="3"][COLOR="Black"]Sweet are the uses of adversity[/COLOR][/SIZE][/B]


Harmful effect of adversity can be transformed into sweet results by developing a positive prospective and optimistic approach.. The realities of life, its evil nature, and harsh truths are visible only when one passes through a phase of adversity. Adversity can shake us out of routine thinking and compels towards introspection. It reveals one flaws and shortcomings. So, once confronted with failure, one can learn to overcome the obstacles and head towards the success.

The high achievers always taste the bitterness of failure before reaching the zenith of majesty. Ultimately they could hit the target with confidence they had set before, when they exercised patience. Sir Nelson Mandela spent 27 years in jail and during this period he emerged as a potent symbol of freedom. His struggle in the adverse conditions earned him honor and respect across the globe.

Our own leader Quide Azam Muhammad Ali Jinnah set the example of founding a new state in the face of intense opposition from the Rulers and other influential forces. He had to fight on multiple fronts. But, these adversities strengthened his commitment instead of being hurdle in his way.

Adverse situation offers the best opportunities to prove one’s mettle. Those who learn the art of making their way in the worst conditions, never fail during the ordinary course of time. Unfavorable condition always carries positive aspects, but under the veil. One should strive to unveil the positive sides and continue the journey instead of laying down the arms before it. In this way, adversity may prove a blessing in disguise.

Better than last
 

Saleeqa Batool,
You have improved more than the first paragragh.
You had commited many grammatical mistakes in the last but this is better than that.
there was no any logic from the beggining but this is to the point.
i encourage you to write more and more.this will imrpove your written skills.

[QUOTE=Saleeqa Batool]

[B][SIZE="3"][COLOR="Black"]Sweet are the uses of adversity[/COLOR][/SIZE][/B]


Harmful effect of adversity can be transformed into sweet results by developing a positive[B],[/B] prospective and optimistic approach. The realities of life, its evil nature, and harsh truths [COLOR="blue"]are visible[/COLOR] only when one passes through [COLOR="SeaGreen"]a[/COLOR] phase of adversity. Adversity can shake us out of routine thinking and [COLOR="blue"]compels [/COLOR]towards introspection. It reveals [COLOR="blue"]one flaws[/COLOR] and shortcomings. [COLOR="Blue"]So, once confronted with failure, one can learn to overcome the obstacles and head towards the success.
[/COLOR]
The high achievers always [COLOR="SeaGreen"]taste the bitterness of failure [/COLOR]before reaching the [COLOR="blue"]zenith of majesty[/COLOR]. Ultimately they [COLOR="blue"]could [/COLOR]hit the [COLOR="blue"]target with confidence they had set before[/COLOR], [COLOR="SeaGreen"]when they exercised patience[/COLOR]. Sir Nelson Mandela spent 27 years in jail and [COLOR="blue"]during this period[/COLOR] he emerged as a potent symbol of freedom. His struggle in the adverse conditions earned him honor and respect across the globe.
[COLOR="SeaGreen"]
Our own leader Quide Azam Muhammad Ali Jinnah set the example of founding a new state in the face of intense opposition from the Rulers and other influential forces[/COLOR]. He had to fight on multiple fronts. But, these adversities strengthened his commitment instead of [COLOR="blue"]being hurdle in his way[/COLOR].

Adverse situation offers the best opportunities to prove one’s mettle. Those who learn the art of [COLOR="blue"]making their way [/COLOR]in the worst conditions, never fail during the ordinary [COLOR="blue"]course of time[/COLOR]. Unfavorable condition always carries positive aspects, but under the veil. One should strive to unveil the positive sides and continue the journey instead of laying down [COLOR="blue"]the arms[/COLOR] before it. In this way, adversity may prove a blessing in disguise.[/QUOTE]

buddy, i don't like students who repeat the same mistakes. ;)

in my previous suggestions, i had asked you to keep it simple. don't try to stuff in english phrases. rather than impressing the reader it exposes your weakness in the language. e.g. what is this "Zenith of majesty"?

i've been strict in my checking this time. and i have highlighted/coloured the parts which contained grammatical errors, or could have been better or lacked maturity.

i shall leave it to you to point out your mistakes.

regards,

saleeqa batool,

let me add that i like the spirit with which you've been composing these passages and posting them. believe me, while i was preparing for the exams, i simply hated these things.

i didn't compose as many passages during my entire study period as you've done within the last few days.

keep it up! :)

regards,

@Adil Memon

i realy appreciate your support to rectify me.

I welcome even if you would be harsher than this because you have extended real support and your comments are guiding stars for me.

Even I cant express myself knowing that you are from PSP and empowered enough to apply any clause of PPC (Pakistan Penal Code) on me. :laugh: :laugh: :) :)


I have rectified the mistake as much i can.If still there reamins any flaw ,please mention it.

Harmful effects of adversity can be transformed into sweet results by developing a positive perspective and optimistic approach. The realities of life, its evil nature, and harsh truths can be felt only when one passes through the phase of adversity. It shakes us out of routine thinking and encourages introspection. It reveals one’s flaws and shortcomings. Once confronted with the failures, one can learn to tackle the odds.

The glorious wins of great people remind their persistent struggle in the wake of hardships. Sir Nelson Mandela spent 27 years in jail and emerged as a potent symbol of freedom and liberty. His struggle in the adverse conditions earned him honor and respect across the globe.

Quid e Azam Muhammad Ali Jinnah had to cross swords with the dominant Congress-British alliance during Pakistan Movement. They left no stone unturned to prevent him in materializing the dream of Pakistan. Nevertheless, all the conspiracies and black mailing tactics strengthened his commitment. He leveraged the adversities to the benefit of his cause and realized the Muslims of Subcontinent that only Muslim League can guard their rights.

Adverse situation offers the best opportunities to prove one’s mettle. Those who master the art of endurance under the worst circumstances, always win the laurels. Unfavorable condition always carries positive aspects, but under the veil. One should strive to unveil the positive sides and continue the journey instead of laying down the arms. In this way, adversity may prove a blessing in disguise.

hahaha, this was an amazing reply. honestly, this ppc idea never crossed my mind. you're really creative. and we must have some section of ppc to punish students who repeat mistakes. :)

after reading the reformed passage, i have realized that you were able to spot most of the mistakes and correct them. it's really impressive. there is trouble only when we have to explain the learner 'what' the mistake is and 'why'.

you have been given some reputation points for this. good job.

regards,
strict (not harsh) teacher :)

I opine that you should go ahead with the idea of implementing PPC on the forum. You must assume the charge of IG at forum. Although it will take considerable time in professional career to reach that "zenith of majesty" :haha :haha :haha
I am sure honourable forum is ready to provide you this oppurtunity in response to your extended support and you could enjoy that status so long before the time.

Here goes my new topic and would be eagerly waiting for your master comments.

[COLOR="blue"][B][SIZE="4"]Cowards dies many times before their death[/SIZE][/B][/COLOR]

Cowards are scared of death thus live in constant dread. Their heart sink over the thought of death and their imagination take them near to it. A terrible news or thought make them shudder. This fear governs their lives and crafts them to be the silent participant. They are unable to exercise God-gifted freedom and are compelled to compromise their desires and wants.

Cowards are unable to grow morally thus lack the courage to withstand the truth and justice. It is approved fact that one who lacks moral courage can never be straight forward so prefer to bend before the power. Cowards make no contribution to the society therefore, their existence is meaningless.

Life is trust of God and man is obliged to live it gloriously. Allah has bestowed man with uncountable blessings and ordered him to explore the universe to the best interest of mankind. The real beauty of life lies in its adventurous exploration however, cowards commit the breach of trust by keeping their capabilities dormant.

Death is an undeniable fact and every born has to taste it. It is therefore vain to pity oneself at the thought of death. Courage and Resolution may help a fine escape. Instead imagining oneself as the first causality in a riot one must have practical approach to deal with it. Real life does not lie in the longevity of body but it’s the spirit that keeps one alive for long. Those who encounter life bravely and face it eye to eye earn eternal name for them. There are few among millions who made their life eternal with their brevity. Muhammad bin Qasim, Tariq bin Ziyad and Rashid Minhas are such names that are still alive although many years have passed.

Here goes my next attempt..please comment
 

[B][COLOR="blue"]my last post remained un-cheked ,however i am posting the new one with the hope of being honored by the comments of worthy qualifiers ,especialy Brother Adil Memon and Sajid A Baloch[/COLOR][/B].


[B][COLOR="Red"][COLOR="Navy"][SIZE="4"]Capital is the fruit of labour[/SIZE][/COLOR][/COLOR][/B]
Theoretically economic activity is interplay of four factors of production namely capital, labour, land and organization. However this notion stands unjust and unfair being a deliberate attempt to belittle the importance of labour. Infact it is human labour that generate economic activity and produce capital while other factors just support it.

The emergence of capitalism has undermined the worth of labour, in order to patronize the capitalists. The concept of interest has inflated the value of capital. It has been portrayed as the prime factor in the business process. However this myth is instrumental to exploit the labour rights. They are forced to accept less proportionate reward in comparison to their role in capital generation. The corporate share holders get lion share in company profits on the expanse of workers reward. The capital providers without direct involvement reap the real benefits of business activity in form of dividend and capital accumulation.

Islamic economic and financial system duly recognizes the essentiality of labour and discourages the concept of capital accumulation and interest. Islam acknowledges the worth of labour to produce the real economic activity. In capitalist economy capital may be produced without happening of the real economic activity. This has caused uneven distribution of wealth in the society accompanied with other economic evils such as poverty. An economic system that duly recognizes the vitality of labour as a core element of economic activity during the reward distribution can lay down the foundation of a prosperous society.

saleeqa batool,

barring a couple of minor grammatical and usage mistakes, it was a fine attempt. i guess you'll be able to point out the mistakes if you read it and look up the dubious words again.

apart from that, i find you associating islam with the socialist philosophy which is the anti-thesis of capitalism. i don't think islam prohibits profit generation through private business or investment. and islam does not accept labour as the only factor of production. it does take into account the importance of capital in profit generation. it also has the sanction for worker-owner relationship. moreover, at some point the capitalist was also worker. the system of capitalism makes the most efficient use of resources and generates a lot of wealth.

i think the islamic system is somewhere in the middle of both systems.

regards,

@ dear saleeqa, as already sugested by fellows, you have tried well to write that paragraph/note and adil memon has very rightly adressed some problems. you need to follow those guidelines and try to practice a lot. simultanously you should read dawn newspaper regularly.

The child is father of the Man
 

here is my next attempt.Looking forward the kindness of all seniors especialy brother Adil Memon ,Sajid Balouch and TS Awan.


[B][COLOR="blue"][SIZE="3"]The Child is father of theMan[/SIZE][/COLOR][/B]


[COLOR="Purple"][B]A child of today is father of tomorrow. Infancy is origin of life .The process of acquaintance to world commences with the birth of a child .It start learning the basics of life such as fulfillment of biological needs, relationships, emotions, language, culture and religion. During the early years of life, a kid develops certain beliefs and thoughts that play an important role in its attitude during the rest of life thus a child is the one who build a man.

A glance at history reveals that early years played an important role in the life of great People. Hazrat Abdul Qadir Jillanai changed the life of a dacoit and converted him in to a pious man. He learned the ethical values of truth and honesty from his childhood that earned him a great place in the Muslim History. Muhammad bin Qasim started walking by holding the cradle of Horse. He mastered the warfare-arts in his childhood and proved himself a great and youngest general of his age. Napoleon Bona Part spent his childhood in a terrible building besieged with full storm and fury .It made him daring and he turned to be a great conqueror of the world. The pages of history are replete with innumerable such examples where the early age experience held a decisive effect in latter life.

Freud, a renowned psychologist, has said that first five years of life determines one’s attitude during next forty five years. This follows that Children must be provided with sufficient opportunities of education, recreation and character building for their personality development. Moral and ethical values should be inculcated to them. A child grown in a good environment will add an upright man to the society.[/B][/COLOR]