My Expansions for Evaluation

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I am starting this thread entitled "Expansions for Evaluation" for posting regularly an expansion so that you share your constructive criticism about my work. Hopefully, you'll contribute your suggestions.

MAN IS THE ARCHITECT OF HIS OWN DESTINY
Being the crown of creation man is endowed with rationality and conscience, as the two sources of guidance. He is capable of changing the course of his fortune with his indomitable will. Thus, the fate is not something inescapable. Being the smith of his own destiny, a man must actively try his best to change and alter ill-fate into good one. For one’s actions either make or mar one’s fortune. As, William Jenning Bryan has aptly said: “Destiny is no matter of chance. It is a matter of choice. It is not a thing to be waited for; it is a thing to be achieved.”
Rightly, those who passively resign to their fate are cowards. They do not exercise the power of will. It is sheer incompetence to find a locus of blame for one’s inactions or misdeeds outside one’s self. Only a coward and incompetent who without taking any pains would readily accept the favors of fortune or submissively resign to its adversities.
One wonders whether or not fate is inescapable. Is there any possibility of carving one’s fate anew? The only answer to these puzzling questions is an unwavering “Yes”. Provided that the will to sail counter the current of fate is firm enough to reach and land at the shore of one’s desired end.
Even the first humans-Eve and Adam- after realization of their folly of disobedience, chose to repent. Consequently, they were forgiven. They did not take their folly and sinning for granted. Since they possessed free will and conscience they chose to regain their lost status.
Similarly, history abounds in examples of those nations and people who carved their own path either for the good or the bad. However worse the consequences, they were the smiths of their fate not their stars. For instance, Dr Faustus, an intellectual and scholarly man, led by blind ambition, defied God that put an end to his erstwhile blissful life. Likewise, Helen and Paris’ elopement put a seal to the peace compact between Troy and Greece. Thus, it is man himself who is to be held responsible for his deeds. For ‘waiting for godot’ is surely an unwise move.
The contemporary world also backs this idea of holding man responsible for all his actions. While the world thought that as some nations were dashed to dust they would never rise, but those nations have risen from the debris of ruin and achieved a respectable status among the comity of nations. Take the example of Japan into consideration, and one would be awe-inspired that how with diligence Japan has emerged as a developed nation after the destruction of Hiroshima in the World War II. Hence, fate and some inevitable events do not reckon to end of one’s prosperous days, rather with one’s determination new horizons of development are achievable.
Therefore, the line of argument can end at this point that whatever the fate holds, can be altered with the free will that a man enjoys. Nothing is unattainable or inescapable for a man who makes his choice. All it takes is his decisiveness.

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