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One great defect of our civilization is that it does not know what to do with its knowledge. Science, as we have seen, has given us powers fit for the gods, yet we use them like small children.
For example, we do not know how to manage our machines. Machines were made to be man's servants; yet he has grown so dependent on them that they are in a fair way to become his masters. Already most men spend most of their lives looking after and waiting upon machines. And the machines are very stern masters. They must be fed with coal, and given petrol to drink, and oil to wash with, and must be kept at the right temperature. And if they do not get their meals when they expect them, they grow sulky and refuse to work, or burst with rage, and blow up, and spread ruin and destruction all round them. So we have to wait upon them very attentively and do all that we can to keep them in a good temper. Already we find it difficult either to work or play without the machines, and a time may come when they rule us altogether, just as we rule the animals.

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We all know what we mean by a "good" man. The ideally good man does not drink or smoke, avoids bad language, converses in the presence of men only exactly as he would if there were ladies present, attends church regularly and holds the correct opinion on all subjects. He has a wholesome horror of wrong-doing and realizes that it is our painful duty to castigate sin. He has a still greater horror of wrong thinking, and considers it the business of the authorities to safeguard the young against those who question the wisdom of the views generally accepted by middle-aged successful citizens. Apart from his professional duties, at which he is assiduous, he spends much time in good works: he may encourage patriotism and military training; he may promote industry, sobriety and virtue among wage earners and their children by seeing to it that failures in these respects receive due punishment; he may be a trustee of a university and prevent an ill-judged respect for learning from allowing the employment of professors with subversive ideas. Above all, of course, his "morals" in the narrow sense must be irreproachable. (189 words)

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[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092230]Precis writing group. Post your precis and take part in precis writing.[/QUOTE]

[CENTER][B][SIZE="4"]PASSAGE-2001[/SIZE][/B][/CENTER]
It was not from want of perceiving the beauty of external nature but from the different way of perceiving it, that the early Greeks did not turn their genius to portray, either in color or in poetry, the outlines, the hues, and contrasts of all fair valley, and hold cliffs, and golden moons, and rosy lawns which their beautiful country affords in lavish abundance.

Primitive people never so far as I know, enjoy when is called the picturesque in nature, wild forests, beetling cliffs, reaches of Alpine snow are with them great hindrances to human intercourse, and difficulties in the way of agriculture. They are furthermore the homes of the enemies of mankind, of the eagle, the wolf, or the tiger, and are most dangerous in times of earthquake or tempest. Hence the grand and striking features of nature are at first looked upon with fear and dislike. I do not suppose that Greeks different in the respect from other people, except that the frequent occurrence of mountains and forests made agriculture peculiarly difficult and intercourse scanty, thus increasing their dislike for the apparently reckless waste in nature. We have even in Homer a similar feeling as regards the sea, --- the sea that proved the source of all their wealth and the condition of most of their greatness. Before they had learned all this, they called it “the Unvintagable Sea” and looked upon its shore as merely so much waste land. We can, therefore, easily understand, how in the first beginning of Greek art, the representation of wild landscape would find no place, whereas, fruitful fields did not suggest themselves as more than the ordinary background. Art in those days was struggling with material nature to which it felt a certain antagonism.

There was nothing in the social circumstances of the Greeks to produce any revolution in this attitude during their greatest days. The Greek republics were small towns where the pressure of the city life was not felt. But as soon as the days of the Greeks republics were over, the men began to congregate for imperial purposes into Antioch, or Alexandria, or lastly into Rome, than we seek the effect of noise and dust and smoke and turmoil breaking out into the natural longing for rural rest and retirement so that from Alexander’s day …… We find all kinds of authors --- epic poets, lyricist, novelists and preachers --- agreeing in the precise of nature, its rich colors, and its varied sounds. Mohaffy: Rambles in Greece.

[B][SIZE="4"]PRECI:[/SIZE][/B]
[B][CENTER][SIZE="5"]The Greek Perception of the Nature and Their Art[/SIZE][/CENTER][/B]
The early Greeks had different perception regarding the beauty of nature. Therefore, it found no place in the early days of Greek art. The Greeks, similar to ancient people viewed nature as a resistance to the human and agricultural progress as well. They had regarded the wild landscapes of nature as foes of human beings. The fact came from the writing of homer who viewed sea as a waste of land. Moreover, the Greeks in the victorious days provided no change in their stance about the nature, because they led a life of rural setting with smaller towns. But, later, when their victorious days came to an end, the imperial life shadowed their former life. Thus, the beauty of nature found its place in the later days of the Greek art.

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092232]One great defect of our civilization is that it does not know what to do with its knowledge. Science, as we have seen, has given us powers fit for the gods, yet we use them like small children.
For example, we do not know how to manage our machines. Machines were made to be man's servants; yet he has grown so dependent on them that they are in a fair way to become his masters. Already most men spend most of their lives looking after and waiting upon machines. And the machines are very stern masters. They must be fed with coal, and given petrol to drink, and oil to wash with, and must be kept at the right temperature. And if they do not get their meals when they expect them, they grow sulky and refuse to work, or burst with rage, and blow up, and spread ruin and destruction all round them. So we have to wait upon them very attentively and do all that we can to keep them in a good temper. Already we find it difficult either to work or play without the machines, and a time may come when they rule us altogether, just as we rule the animals.[205 words][/QUOTE]

[COLOR="Navy"][COLOR="Indigo"][B][U][I]TITLE: Humans and Machines[/I][/U][/B]
[I]Science has given knowledge and capabilities to humans but they do not know how to use them properly. Humans have become very dependent on machine for daily routine work and they are using machines for various purposes. Frequent use of machines has made machines master of humans and humans their servants. But Machine requires proper maintenance and get fed up. Without proper maintenance they can be disastrous to humans. [69 words]
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[COLOR="RoyalBlue"][B]Please suggest me correction or improvement if any.[/B][/COLOR]

[QUOTE=The dream of rain;1092249][CENTER][B][SIZE="4"]PASSAGE-2001[/SIZE][/B][/CENTER]
It was not from want of perceiving the beauty of external nature but from the different way of perceiving it, that the early Greeks did not turn their genius to portray, either in color or in poetry, the outlines, the hues, and contrasts of all fair valley, and hold cliffs, and golden moons, and rosy lawns which their beautiful country affords in lavish abundance.

Primitive people never so far as I know, enjoy when is called the picturesque in nature, wild forests, beetling cliffs, reaches of Alpine snow are with them great hindrances to human intercourse, and difficulties in the way of agriculture. They are furthermore the homes of the enemies of mankind, of the eagle, the wolf, or the tiger, and are most dangerous in times of earthquake or tempest. Hence the grand and striking features of nature are at first looked upon with fear and dislike. I do not suppose that Greeks different in the respect from other people, except that the frequent occurrence of mountains and forests made agriculture peculiarly difficult and intercourse scanty, thus increasing their dislike for the apparently reckless waste in nature. We have even in Homer a similar feeling as regards the sea, --- the sea that proved the source of all their wealth and the condition of most of their greatness. Before they had learned all this, they called it “the Unvintagable Sea” and looked upon its shore as merely so much waste land. We can, therefore, easily understand, how in the first beginning of Greek art, the representation of wild landscape would find no place, whereas, fruitful fields did not suggest themselves as more than the ordinary background. Art in those days was struggling with material nature to which it felt a certain antagonism.

There was nothing in the social circumstances of the Greeks to produce any revolution in this attitude during their greatest days. The Greek republics were small towns where the pressure of the city life was not felt. But as soon as the days of the Greeks republics were over, the men began to congregate for imperial purposes into Antioch, or Alexandria, or lastly into Rome, than we seek the effect of noise and dust and smoke and turmoil breaking out into the natural longing for rural rest and retirement so that from Alexander’s day …… We find all kinds of authors --- epic poets, lyricist, novelists and preachers --- agreeing in the precise of nature, its rich colors, and its varied sounds. Mohaffy: Rambles in Greece.

[B][SIZE="4"]PRECI:[/SIZE][/B]
[B][CENTER][SIZE="5"]The Greek Perception of the Nature and Their Art[/SIZE][/CENTER][/B]
The early Greeks had different perception regarding the beauty of nature. Therefore, it found no place in the early days of Greek art. The Greeks, similar to ancient people viewed nature as a resistance to the human and agricultural progress as well. They had regarded the wild landscapes of nature as foes of human beings. The fact came from the writing of homer who viewed sea as a waste of land. Moreover, the Greeks in the victorious days provided no change in their stance about the nature, because they led a life of rural setting with smaller towns. But, later, when their victorious days came to an end, the imperial life shadowed their former life. Thus, the beauty of nature found its place in the later days of the Greek art.[/QUOTE]

[I][COLOR="Blue"]I have read you precis. It is wonderful. According to my perception their are some issues in your precis.
Your precis is not in general. You have quoted some same elements of the paragraph. You need to talk in general while writing. Like you quoted "agricultural" and "agricultural landscape" etc. You don't need to quote them. Just write in general.
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[B][CENTER]Title: The evolution of Greek natural Art.[/CENTER]
Precis:[/B]
[I]The ancient Greek did not give an importance to natural beauty of their country. Ancient people disliked the natural phenomena and occurrences and regarded them as disastrous to their existence. The Greek like other ancient people,also disliked natural art and did not take advantages of it. Homer had similar reaction to nature as they considered sea as a source of possible dangers before getting advantage of wealth of sea. At that time natural art of Greek was struggling. In these days there was no social interaction among the Greek. When their early days ended then social change commenced by the imperialism this can be noted by Greek authors in their writings[110 words]

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[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092230]Precis writing group. Post your precis and take part in precis writing.[/QUOTE]

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092313][COLOR="Navy"][COLOR="Indigo"][B][U][I]TITLE: Humans and Machines[/I][/U][/B]
[I]Science has given knowledge and capabilities to humans but they do not know how to use them properly. Humans have become very dependent on machine for daily routine work and they are using machines for various purposes. Frequent use of machines has made machines master of humans and humans their servants. But Machine requires proper maintenance and get fed up. Without proper maintenance they can be disastrous to humans. [69 words]
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[COLOR="RoyalBlue"][B]Please suggest me correction or improvement if any.[/B][/COLOR][/QUOTE]

Its good but lemme point out somethings i felt:
> the topic is about relationship of machines with humans. so there is not point to talk about [COLOR="Red"]"Science has given knowledge and capabilities to humans but they do not know how to use them properly."[/COLOR] (Irrelevant)
> Use past tense. avoid present tense. (skim DOs and DONTs of precis)
>Keep it up. your doing good. :))
P.S. Criticism is welcomed

[QUOTE=The dream of rain;1092376]Its good but lemme point out somethings i felt:
> the topic is about relationship of machines with humans. so there is not point to talk about [COLOR="Red"]"Science has given knowledge and capabilities to humans but they do not know how to use them properly."[/COLOR] (Irrelevant)
> Use past tense. avoid present tense. (skim DOs and DONTs of precis)
>Keep it up. your doing good. :))
P.S. Criticism is welcomed[/QUOTE]

Okay. Let make a precise of this paragraph so that I can see how you fix issues you highlighted in my precis.

Please check my attempt
 

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092231]One great defect of our civilization is that it does not know what to do with its knowledge. Science, as we have seen, has given us powers fit for the gods, yet we use them like small children.
For example, we do not know how to manage our machines. Machines were made to be man's servants; yet he has grown so dependent on them that they are in a fair way to become his masters. Already most men spend most of their lives looking after and waiting upon machines. And the machines are very stern masters. They must be fed with coal, and given petrol to drink, and oil to wash with, and must be kept at the right temperature. And if they do not get their meals when they expect them, they grow sulky and refuse to work, or burst with rage, and blow up, and spread ruin and destruction all round them. So we have to wait upon them very attentively and do all that we can to keep them in a good temper. Already we find it difficult either to work or play without the machines, and a time may come when they rule us altogether, just as we rule the animals.[/QUOTE]

[B] Men and machines[/B]
Though science has enriched humans with immense knowledge, they are oblivious of using it for their benefits. They made Machines to serve them. But, instead of getting any advantage, they, like servants, engaged themselves in caring of their instruments, and completing their needs to avoid any damage. Their reliance on these self-made tools was to such an extent that it has enabled them to rule mankind in future. (Words 71)

Please check my attempt
 

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092232]We all know what we mean by a "good" man. The ideally good man does not drink or smoke, avoids bad language, converses in the presence of men only exactly as he would if there were ladies present, attends church regularly and holds the correct opinion on all subjects. He has a wholesome horror of wrong-doing and realizes that it is our painful duty to castigate sin. He has a still greater horror of wrong thinking, and considers it the business of the authorities to safeguard the young against those who question the wisdom of the views generally accepted by middle-aged successful citizens. Apart from his professional duties, at which he is assiduous, he spends much time in good works: he may encourage patriotism and military training; he may promote industry, sobriety and virtue among wage earners and their children by seeing to it that failures in these respects receive due punishment; he may be a trustee of a university and prevent an ill-judged respect for learning from allowing the employment of professors with subversive ideas. Above all, of course, his "morals" in the narrow sense must be irreproachable. (189 words)[/QUOTE]


[B] An ideal person[/B]
An ideal person spurns smoking and all sorts of bad habits. He speaks to others in mild words. He maintains optimistic views on all issues. He strives hard to promote his unchallengeable ethical ideas, and asks others to reject immoralities. Also, being morally educated, he opposes the appointment of ignoble and corrupt individuals, and demands the concerned elements to protect youth form them. (Words 63)

[QUOTE=Innocent Hafeez;1092626][B] Men and machines[/B]
Though science has enriched humans with immense knowledge, they are oblivious of using it for their benefits. They made Machines to serve them. But, instead of getting any advantage, they, like servants, engaged themselves in caring of their instruments, and completing their needs to avoid any damage. Their reliance on these self-made tools was to such an extent that it has enabled them to rule mankind in future. (Words 71)[/QUOTE]

[B]My suggestions:[/B]
1- I think following sentence is wrong and not in context of original paragraph.
"[I] But, instead of getting any advantage,[/I]".
In original paragraph at no place it is written that humans are not getting any advantage of machines. Paragraph is about not proper use of machines.
Instead you can write " [B][I]But, instead of getting desired advantages,[/I][/B]".
2- Word like "[B][I]instruments[/I][/B]" or any replacement of it, is not used in original paragraph. So don't use "[B][I]instruments[/I][/B]".
Instead you can write,"managing them properly"
3- Don't use word "[B][I]tools[/I][/B]". Always focus and write keyword that is "[I][B]machines[/B][/I]". Keyword should not be replaced by any other word

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092632][B]My suggestions:[/B]
1- I think following sentence is wrong and not in context of original paragraph.
"[I] But, instead of getting any advantage,[/I]".
In original paragraph at no place it is written that humans are not getting any advantage of machines. Paragraph is about not proper use of machines.
Instead you can write " [B][I]But, instead of getting desired advantages,[/I][/B]".
2- Word like "[B][I]instruments[/I][/B]" or any replacement of it, is not used in original paragraph. So don't use "[B][I]instruments[/I][/B]".
Instead you can write,"managing them properly"
3- Don't use word "[B][I]tools[/I][/B]". Always focus and write keyword that is "[I][B]machines[/B][/I]". Keyword should not be replaced by any other word[/QUOTE]

Thanks for your analysis.
but i have used instruments and tools to symbolize machines as we have to avoid repetition. If you happen to go through any passage of English, you will have seen many synonyms for single word. For example, we use words like poor governance, crisis of governance and some others witin the same passage. But, they convey the same sense as that of the actual topic on governance. You can give your more opinions on this. Plus, kindly check my precis on the previous page

[QUOTE=Innocent Hafeez;1092693]Thanks for your analysis.
but i have used instruments and tools to symbolize machines as we have to avoid repetition. If you happen to go through any passage of English, you will have seen many synonyms for single word. For example, we use words like poor governance, crisis of governance and some others witin the same passage. But, they convey the same sense as that of the actual topic on governance. You can give your more opinions on this. Plus, kindly check my precis on the previous page[/QUOTE]
As far as I know, you need to replace other words in the precis. You cannot replace keywords with other words. Machines is a keyword and it should not be replaced by "tools"or "instruments".

[QUOTE=Innocent Hafeez;1092627][B] An ideal person[/B]
An ideal person spurns smoking and all sorts of bad habits. He speaks to others in mild words. He maintains optimistic views on all issues. He strives hard to promote his unchallengeable ethical ideas, and asks others to reject immoralities. Also, being morally educated, he opposes the appointment of ignoble and corrupt individuals, and demands the concerned elements to protect youth form them. (Words 63)[/QUOTE]

My options:
1- am not satisfied with the precis you made.
2-According to me, you are lacking main ideas of the original paragraph.
3- This passage is about ideal person who is optimistic and avoid bad habits and who is good by his behaviors with other person. He is professional in his work and restrict other people from doing bad deeds. He is hard working and assist other people for good.
4- I will suggest you one thing that make your precis in general. Don't use words or examples given in paragraphs. Just states them generally.

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092728]As far as I know, you need to replace other words in the precis. You cannot replace keywords with other words. Machines is a keyword and it should not be replaced by "tools"or "instruments".[/QUOTE]

Ok agreed.

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092731]My options:
1- am not satisfied with the precis you made.
2-According to me, you are lacking main ideas of the original paragraph.
3- This passage is about ideal person who is optimistic and avoid bad habits and who is good by his behaviors with other person. He is professional in his work and restrict other people from doing bad deeds. He is hard working and assist other people for good.
4- I will suggest you one thing that make your precis in general. Don't use words or examples given in paragraphs. Just states them generally.[/QUOTE]

Thanks for your analysis.
But I have mentioned all that you have described in your 3rd point. Both are almost same. So, how i am lacking main idea. Kindly, shed some light on this. And, if you have precised this passage share it so that i could clarify myself.

[QUOTE=Innocent Hafeez;1092736]Thanks for your analysis.
But I have mentioned all that you have described in your 3rd point. Both are almost same. So, how i am lacking main idea. Kindly, shed some light on this. And, if you have precised this passage share it so that i could clarify myself.[/QUOTE]

[B]Your Precis:[/B]

[I]An ideal person spurns smoking and all sorts of bad habits. He speaks to others in mild words. He maintains optimistic views on all issues. He strives hard to promote his unchallengeable ethical ideas, and asks others to reject immoralities. Also, being morally educated, he opposes the appointment of ignoble and corrupt individuals, and demands the concerned elements to protect youth form them. (Words 63)[/I]

[B]Actually,[/B]
1- You have used some examples and words from original passage such as 'smoking '. Writer was giving more details by adding example of 'smoking '.This is irrelevant to write in Precis. [COLOR="Red"]Please note, in precis you have to skip irrelevant details.[/COLOR]
2- Other thing I noted, is that you are using some sentences from the original paragraph. You just need to comprehend the idea of writer and write in your own words in general.

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092891][B]Your Precis:[/B]

[I]An ideal person spurns smoking and all sorts of bad habits. He speaks to others in mild words. He maintains optimistic views on all issues. He strives hard to promote his unchallengeable ethical ideas, and asks others to reject immoralities. Also, being morally educated, he opposes the appointment of ignoble and corrupt individuals, and demands the concerned elements to protect youth form them. (Words 63)[/I]

[B]Actually,[/B]
1- You have used some examples and words from original passage such as 'smoking '. Writer was giving more details by adding example of 'smoking '.This is irrelevant to write in Precis. [COLOR="Red"]Please note, in precis you have to skip irrelevant details.[/COLOR]
2- Other thing I noted, is that you are using some sentences from the original paragraph. You just need to comprehend the idea of writer and write in your own words in general.[/QUOTE]

Ok I understood. But, what i have learnt is that we can use some originals words not all. Still, i will improve my expression.

Suggestion: each one day one!
 

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1092230]Precis writing group. Post your precis and take part in precis writing.[/QUOTE]

Dear members,
You are requested to practice a precis everyday. For this purpose, one precis from past should be posted and all aspirants can solve and post their attempts for review. So that we can move to the next one.
In this way it will be practice continuously and member will remain on same precis for corrections.
Thanks , hope u like the suggestion

Precis 2002. Let's solve it!
 

Make a precis of the given passage, also give a suitable heading" (20)
'The official name of our species is homo sapiens; but there are many anthropologists who prefer to think of man as homo Faber-the smith, the maker of tools It would be possible. I think, to reconcile these two definitions in a third. If man is a knower and an efficient doer, it is only because he is also a talker In order to be Faber and Sapiens, Homo must first be loquax, the loquacious one. Without language we should merely be hairless chimpanzees. Indeed \vc should be some thing much worse. Possessed of a high IQ but no language, we should be like the Yahoos of Gulliver's Travels- Creatures too clever to be guided by instinct, too Self-centered to live in a state of animal grace, and therefore condemned forever, frustrated and malignant, between contented apehood and aspiring'humanity. It was language that made possible the accumulation of knowledge and the broadcasting of information. It was language that permitted the expression of religious insight, the formulation of ethical ideals, the codification to laws, It was language, in a word, that turned us into human beings and gave birth to civilization.

P.S. this precis is follow up to the above suggestion. Let's break this!

Review this fellow aspirants.
 

[QUOTE=The dream of rain;1092928]Make a precis of the given passage, also give a suitable heading" (20)
[B][B]Passage from 2002 [/B][/B]
'The official name of our species is homo sapiens; but there are many anthropologists who prefer to think of man as homo Faber-the smith, the maker of tools It would be possible. I think, to reconcile these two definitions in a third. If man is a knower and an efficient doer, it is only because he is also a talker In order to be Faber and Sapiens, Homo must first be loquax, the loquacious one. Without language we should merely be hairless chimpanzees. Indeed \vc should be some thing much worse. Possessed of a high IQ but no language, we should be like the Yahoos of Gulliver's Travels- Creatures too clever to be guided by instinct, too Self-centered to live in a state of animal grace, and therefore condemned forever, frustrated and malignant, between contented ape-hood and aspiring' humanity. It was language that made possible the accumulation of knowledge and the broadcasting of information. It was language that permitted the expression of religious insight, the formulation of ethical ideals, the codification to laws, It was language, in a word, that turned us into human beings and gave birth to civilization.

P.S. this precis is follow up to the above suggestion. Let's break this![/QUOTE]


Here is my attempt for above precis:


[SIZE="4"][CENTER][B]Importance of language[/B][/CENTER][/SIZE]
[INDENT]Man without language would be an animal, an uncivilized and intelligent being. Language made him an intelligent being and the creator of tools. It enabled man to receive knowledge and information. It also provided him conduit to express religious vision. Besides, it enabled him to enact ethical and legal norms. Therefore, it transformed an animal into a civilized and intellectual being.[/INDENT]
P.S. word count of the precis is 62. While, original passage is of 189.
Critical review is welcomed.
Thanks,

Precis Paragraph 3
 

[B][U][CENTER]Precis Paragraph 3.[/CENTER][/U][/B]

All human beings are liable to err. To be at peace with oneself,the realization of this fact is essential.Humanity is faced with numerous struggles and difficulties.We should view our own problems as part of a universal struggle and brace ourselves to meet every difficulty with fortitude.To be frantic and desperate n such occasions cannot help the situation .Perhaps the greatest folly is for each of us to hug his troubles to himself.Often the path through our worst worries can be made smoother if we seek the guidance of a trusted friend. But there are limits to human wisdom.The only adequate way to endure large evils is to find large consolations.The key to this search is prayer.The faith in a beneficent "Higher Power" can carry us through our most anxious moments.It has cured many people of their diseases and banished melancholy from their hearts.It was faith in God coupled with hardwork, which enabled Alexis Carrel to face ridicule and rejection calmly and finally became the recipient of the Nobel Prize.Finally ,how much less we should be if we could see our struggle as a part of the struggle of a whole creation intent on growth and renewal. By doing so, we not only make our lives easier ,but we also add our bit to the sum of human dignity and faith.[220 words]

[B][U][CENTER]Precis Paragraph 04[/CENTER][/U][/B]

It is not luck but labour that makes men. Luck says an American writer, is ever waiting for something to turn up: labour with keen eye and strong will always turns up something. Luck lies in bed and wishes the postman would bring him news of a legacy; labour turns out at six and with busy pen and ringing hammer lays the foundation of a competence. Luck whines; labour watches. Luck relies on chance; labour on character. Luck slips downwards to self-indulgence; labour strides upwards and aspires to independence. The conviction, therefore, is extending that diligence is the mother of good luck: in other words, that a man’s success in life will be proportionate to his efforts, to his industry, to his attention to small things.(126 words)

you need improvement

Precis Paragraph 05
 

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Nothing sharpens a man’s wits like poverty. Hence many of the greatest men have originally been poor men. Poverty often purifies and braces a man’s morals. To spirited people, difficult tasks are usually the most delightful ones. If we may rely upon the testimony of history, men are brave, truthful and magnanimous not in proportion to their wealth, but in proportion to their smallness of means. And the best are often the poorest—always supposing that they sufficient to meet their temporal wants. A divine has said that God has created poverty but He has not created misery. And there is certainly a great difference between the two. While honest poverty is honourable, misery is humiliating, in as much as the latter is for the most part the result of misconduct and often of idleness and drunkenness. Poverty is no disgrace to him who can put up with it, but he who finds the beggar’s staff get warm in his hand, never does any good but a great amount of evil.
The poor are often the happiest of people—far more so than the rich, but though they may be envied, no one will be found willing to take their place. Moore has told the story of the over-fed, over-satisfied Eastern despot who sent a messenger to travel through the world in order to find out the happiest man. When discovered, the messenger was immediately to seize him, take his shirt off his back and bring it to the Chief. The messenger found the happiest man in an Irishman—happy, dancing and flourishing his shillelagh. But when the ambassador proceeded to seize him and undress him, he found that the Irishman had no shirt to his back.[287 words]

Precis Paragraph 06
 

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One of the most ominous and discreditable symptoms of the want of candour in present-day sociology is the deliberate neglect of the population question. It is or should be transparently clear that if the State is resolved, on humanitarian grounds, to inhibit the operation of natural selection, some rational regulation of population, both as regards quantity and quality, is
imperatively necessary. There is no self-acting adjustment, apart from starvation, of numbers to the means of subsistence. If all natural checks are removed, a population in advance of the optimum number will be produced, and maintained at the cost of a reduction in the standard of living. When this pressure begins to be felt, that section of the population which is capable of reflection, and which has a standard of living which may be lost, will voluntarily restrict its numbers, even to the point of failing to replace deaths by an equivalent number of new births; while the underworld, which always exists in every civilised society the failures and misfits and derelicts, moral and physical will exercise no restraint, and will be a constantly increasing drain upon the national resources. The population will thus be recruited, in a very undue proportion, by those strata of society which do not possess the qualities of useful citizens.

The importance of the problem would seem to be sufficiently obvious. But politicians know that the subject is unpopular. The unborn have no votes. Employers like a surplus of labour, which can be drawn upon when trade is good. Militarists want as much food for powder as they can get. Revolutionists instinctively oppose any real remedy for social evils; they know that every unwanted child is a potential insurgent. All three can appeal to a quasi-religious prejudice, resting apparently on the ancient theory of natural rights, which were supposed to include the right of unlimited procreation. This objection is now chiefly urged by celibate or childless priests; but it is held with such fanatical vehemence that the fear of losing the votes which they control is a welcome excuse for the baser sort of politician to shelve the subject as inopportune. The Socialist calculation is probably erroneous; for experience has shown that it is aspiration, not desperation, that makes revolutions.[words: 374]

[QUOTE=sukheil;1092974]you need improvement[/QUOTE]

Reply with quote. No one knows who you are referring to.
Plus, for suggesting someone improvements you should point out mistakes/areas for improvements. Such a review looks amateur.

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All human beings are liable to err. To be at peace with oneself,the realization of this fact is essential.Humanity is faced with numerous struggles and difficulties.We should view our own problems as part of a universal struggle and brace ourselves to meet every difficulty with fortitude.To be frantic and desperate n such occasions cannot help the situation .Perhaps the greatest folly is for each of us to hug his troubles to himself.Often the path through our worst worries can be made smoother if we seek the guidance of a trusted friend. But there are limits to human wisdom.The only adequate way to endure large evils is to find large consolations.The key to this search is prayer.The faith in a beneficent "Higher Power" can carry us through our most anxious moments.It has cured many people of their diseases and banished melancholy from their hearts.It was faith in God coupled with hardwork, which enabled Alexis Carrel to face ridicule and rejection calmly and finally became the recipient of the Nobel Prize.Finally ,how much less we should be if we could see our struggle as a part of the struggle of a whole creation intent on growth and renewal. By doing so, we not only make our lives easier ,but we also add our bit to the sum of human dignity and faith.[220 words][/QUOTE]
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Facing problems[/B]
An individual should face all sorts of challenges bravely. He ought to cooperate with others about his worries. Since humans are fallible, the viable answer to his problems is worship. It has, along with struggle, enabled many persons such as the Nobel laureate Alex Carrel to reach their destination. Besides, he needs to consider his ills universal because all humans are facing them. This will better help him resolve his riddles, and will also ensure his contribution to the welfare of mankind. (Words 82)

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Nothing sharpens a man’s wits like poverty. Hence many of the greatest men have originally been poor men. Poverty often purifies and braces a man’s morals. To spirited people, difficult tasks are usually the most delightful ones. If we may rely upon the testimony of history, men are brave, truthful and magnanimous not in proportion to their wealth, but in proportion to their smallness of means. And the best are often the poorest—always supposing that they sufficient to meet their temporal wants. A divine has said that God has created poverty but He has not created misery. And there is certainly a great difference between the two. While honest poverty is honourable, misery is humiliating, in as much as the latter is for the most part the result of misconduct and often of idleness and drunkenness. Poverty is no disgrace to him who can put up with it, but he who finds the beggar’s staff get warm in his hand, never does any good but a great amount of evil.
The poor are often the happiest of people—far more so than the rich, but though they may be envied, no one will be found willing to take their place. Moore has told the story of the over-fed, over-satisfied Eastern despot who sent a messenger to travel through the world in order to find out the happiest man. When discovered, the messenger was immediately to seize him, take his shirt off his back and bring it to the Chief. The messenger found the happiest man in an Irishman—happy, dancing and flourishing his shillelagh. But when the ambassador proceeded to seize him and undress him, he found that the Irishman had no shirt to his back.[287 words][/QUOTE][B]
Poverty is a gift[/B]
Poverty makes man to lead a pious and successful life. History records that successful persons emerged from their poor condition. But, poverty should not be confused with miserliness. While the former is God-gifted, the latter is disgusting and results in man’s disgrace. It is also believed that poverty is a source of happiness. In the words of Moore, the rich master was surprised to see that the most delighted person, as presented by his subordinate on his orders, had even no piece of cloth on the back of his body. (words 96)

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It is not luck but labour that makes men. Luck says an American writer, is ever waiting for something to turn up: labour with keen eye and strong will always turns up something. Luck lies in bed and wishes the postman would bring him news of a legacy; labour turns out at six and with busy pen and ringing hammer lays the foundation of a competence. Luck whines; labour watches. Luck relies on chance; labour on character. Luck slips downwards to self-indulgence; labour strides upwards and aspires to independence. The conviction, therefore, is extending that diligence is the mother of good luck: in other words, that a man’s success in life will be proportionate to his efforts, to his industry, to his attention to small things.(126 words)[/QUOTE]

[B]Labor makes man[/B]
Man’ accomplishments in his journey depend upon his strenuous struggle not upon his luck. Because, luck makes him lazy and depend on others. On the other hand, labor encourages him to work tirelessly for a free and an active life. (Words 40)

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[QUOTE=Innocent Hafeez;1093001][B]Labor makes man[/B]
Man’ accomplishments in his journey depend upon his strenuous struggle not upon his luck. Because, luck makes him lazy and depend on others. On the other hand, labor encourages him to work tirelessly for a free and an active life. (Words 40)[/QUOTE]
You have some issues in precis.
1- First your title is not completely suitable. Title should be "Labor not the luck, makes a man". (2.5/5 marks)
2- Total words are 126 so 1/3 should be 42 or 43. your words are 40. (2/3) marks.
3- you added some extra words such as "luck makes him lazy and depend on others". Laziness and self-dependence have not been mentioned in original paragraph. Therefore, you got (-2 Marks)
4- Your score from precis is 4/7
So your total score is (2.5/5+2/3-2+4/7=6.5/15 )

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It is not luck but labour that makes men. Luck says an American writer, is ever waiting for something to turn up: labour with keen eye and strong will always turns up something. Luck lies in bed and wishes the postman would bring him news of a legacy; labour turns out at six and with busy pen and ringing hammer lays the foundation of a competence. Luck whines; labour watches. Luck relies on chance; labour on character. Luck slips downwards to self-indulgence; labour strides upwards and aspires to independence. The conviction, therefore, is extending that diligence is the mother of good luck: in other words, that a man’s success in life will be proportionate to his efforts, to his industry, to his attention to small things.(126 words)[/QUOTE]

[B][U][CENTER]Labor is the key to success not luck. [/CENTER][/U][/B]
[I]A man can accomplish his ambitions by labor not by luck. Luck only lies in dreams. Labor turns luck into reality. Labor develops self-dependence and character. Labor moves a man on the glory of success luck does not. Handwork makes a good luck. (43 words)[/I]
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Please evaluate. Thanks in advance.[/COLOR][/B]

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It is physically impossible for a well-educated, intellectual, or brave man to make money the chief object of his thoughts just as it is for him to make his dinner the principal object of them. All healthy people like their dinners, but their dinner is not the main object of their lives. So all healthy minded people like making money ought to like it and enjoy the sensation of winning it; it is something better than money.
A good soldier, for instance, mainly wishes to do his fighting well. He is glad of his pay—very properly so and justly grumbles when you keep him ten years without it—till, his main mission of life is to win battles, not to be paid for winning them. So of clergymen. The clergyman's object is essentially baptize and preach not to be paid for preaching. So of doctors. They like fees no doubt—ought to like them; yet if they are brave and well-educated the entire object to their lives is not fees. They on the whole, desire to cure the sick; and if they are good doctors and the choice were fairly to them, would rather cure their patient and lose their fee than kill him and get it. And so with all the other brave and rightly trained men: their work is first, their fee second—very important always; but still second.

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1093002]You have some issues in precis.
1- First your title is not completely suitable. Title should be "Labor not the luck, makes a man". (2.5/5 marks)
2- Total words are 126 so 1/3 should be 42 or 43. your words are 40. (2/3) marks.
3- you added some extra words such as "luck makes him lazy and depend on others". Laziness and self-dependence have not been mentioned in original paragraph. Therefore, you got (-2 Marks)
4- Your score from precis is 4/7
So your total score is (2.5/5+2/3-2+4/7=6.5/15 )[/QUOTE]

Oh such low marks. I deserved it.
But i have some reservations. Words do not matter but quality does. How can we right exat length of words given it is subjetive. So, 40 or 42 does not matter i have learnt our word limit can exeed or decline but it should be near to the actual targetted limit.
[B]you added some extra words such as "luck makes him lazy and depend on others". Laziness and self-dependence have not been mentioned in original paragraph.[/B]
To your this point let me quote passage
[B]Luck lies in bed and wishes the postman would bring him news of[/B] a legacy; labour turns out at six and with busy pen and ringing hammer lays the foundation of a competence.
The highlighted line indicates that beliver of luck does not want to do anything himself and relies on others.
This is my opinion. You can give your own further. And, thanks for your analysis.

[QUOTE=Saba Arif;1093004][B][U][CENTER]Labor is the key to success not luck. [/CENTER][/U][/B]
[I]A man can accomplish his ambitions by labor not by luck. Luck only lies in dreams. Labor turns luck into reality. Labor develops self-dependence and character. Labor moves a man on the glory of success luck does not. Handwork makes a good luck. (43 words)[/I]
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Please evaluate. Thanks in advance.[/COLOR][/B][/QUOTE]

Your precis is better written. No mistake at all. But, idea or theme is same that i have shared in my attempt. Hope you get it.

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