please evaluate my Précis

[Muhammad Fiaz Hussain]

Long years ago we made a tryst with destiny, and now the time comes when we-shall redeem our pledge, not wholly or in full measure, but very substantially. At the stroke of midnight hour, when the world sleeps, India will awake to life and freedom. A moment comes, which comes rarely in history, when we step out from the old to the new, when an age ends, and when the soul of nation, long suppressed, finds utterance. It is fitting that at this solemn moment we take the pledge of dedication to the service of India and her people and to the still larger cause of humanity.

At the dawn of history India started on her unending quest, and trackless centuries are filled with her striving and the grandeur of her success and her failures. Through good and ill fortune alike she has never lost sight of that quest or forgotten the ideals which gave her strength. We end today a period of ill fortune and India discovers herself again. The achievement we celebrate today is but a step, an opening of opportunity, to the greater triumphs and achievements that await us. Are we brave enough and wise enough to grasp this opportunity and accept the challenge of the future?

Freedom and power brings responsibility. That responsibility rests upon this Assembly, a sovereign body representing the sovereign people of India. Before the birth of freedom we have endured all the pains of labor and our hearts are heavy with the memory of this sorrow. Some of those pains continue even now. Nevertheless, the past is over and it is the future that beckons to us now. That future is not one of ease or resting but of incessant striving so that we may fulfill the pledges we have so often taken and the one we shall take today. The service of India means the service of the millions who suffer. It means the ending of poverty and ignorance and disease and inequality of opportunity. The ambition of the greatest man of our generation has been to wipe every tear from every eye. That may be beyond us, but as long as there are tears and suffering, so long our work will not be over.
-Jawaharlal Nehru

Titles

1. Our tryst with destiny lies in our responsible future
2. The rediscovery of India lies in our struggle against all sufferings.

Précis

We had struggled for the independence of India for the welfare of her people and the humanity. Now we have won the freedom. As the sovereign people of India, we shall have to re-discover its ideals and fulfill them with responsibility. This is the time we fulfilled our past pledges. This requires an untiring effort to do away with all sufferings which humanity is enduring.

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Originally Posted by Muhammad Fiaz Hussain

Long years ago we made a tryst with destiny, and now the time comes when we-shall redeem our pledge, not wholly or in full measure, but very substantially. At the stroke of midnight hour, when the world sleeps, India will awake to life and freedom. A moment comes, which comes rarely in history, when we step out from the old to the new, when an age ends, and when the soul of nation, long suppressed, finds utterance. It is fitting that at this solemn moment we take the pledge of dedication to the service of India and her people and to the still larger cause of humanity.

At the dawn of history India started on her unending quest, and trackless centuries are filled with her striving and the grandeur of her success and her failures. Through good and ill fortune alike she has never lost sight of that quest or forgotten the ideals which gave her strength. We end today a period of ill fortune and India discovers herself again. The achievement we celebrate today is but a step, an opening of opportunity, to the greater triumphs and achievements that await us. Are we brave enough and wise enough to grasp this opportunity and accept the challenge of the future?

Freedom and power brings responsibility. That responsibility rests upon this Assembly, a sovereign body representing the sovereign people of India. Before the birth of freedom we have endured all the pains of labor and our hearts are heavy with the memory of this sorrow. Some of those pains continue even now. Nevertheless, the past is over and it is the future that beckons to us now. That future is not one of ease or resting but of incessant striving so that we may fulfill the pledges we have so often taken and the one we shall take today. The service of India means the service of the millions who suffer. It means the ending of poverty and ignorance and disease and inequality of opportunity. The ambition of the greatest man of our generation has been to wipe every tear from every eye. That may be beyond us, but as long as there are tears and suffering, so long our work will not be over.
-Jawaharlal Nehru

Titles

1. Our tryst with destiny lies in our responsible future
2. The rediscovery of India lies in our struggle against all sufferings.

Précis

We had struggled for the independence of India for the welfare of her people and the humanity. Now we have won the freedom. As the sovereign people of India, we shall have to re-discover its ideals and fulfill them with responsibility. This is the time we fulfilled our past pledges. This requires an untiring effort to do away with all sufferings which humanity is enduring.

your precis is too short;keeping in view the length of original passage..remember precis should be 1/3rd of the original passage,you cant miss out the important points..

[Muhammad iqbal Serwar]

Dear please reattempt it with atleast one third length of orignal passage

[Muhammad Fiaz Hussain]

Thanks Dears for comments. But it is too late. I have passed in CE 2011.