well Miss Naqvi unexpectedly this is not DR junaid or nosheen its from my side.
hope this wouldnt be a sore attempt.

Plentiful production in short time is the need of hour.So manual work replaced by tools and tools by machines.These advanced methods not only helped men in increasing production and became the cause of betterment but also saved time..Now it is high time for us to do something practically by following modern methods in the field of agriculture,as seen in Europe and America.Using such methods our peasants can get rid of problematic weather and disapponitment.To avoid loss and make our agriculture more profitable,the usage of up to date methods,is absolutely necessary.
Title:--Advantages of advanced methods.

producing abundant in short span of time is the right lesson to teach cultivator in our country.As machine replaced ordinary tools in west ,we must also well utilize new technology to efficently perform primary and secondary economic activties.irregularities in water down pour is pitfall to agriculture where as irrigation system and modren means of ploughing can lead toward healthy economy.
title: agriculture in modren world

To exceed in life man requires more work in less time. He first invent tools to save time and energy.It enabled him to get the best in different fields.Tools increase production in less time .From tools man deceloped big machines with the passage of time.These facts have to be taught to our farmers practically to make progress.In Advanced countries all agricultural activities are performed by machines efficiently from sowing to storing.In our country the farmer depend on weather for ploughing which lead to late sowing.Because of less man power and slow harvesting rain can ruine the crops.However using machines for ploughing and harvestin will result in better yield speedily.In this way every turn of weather can be utilized.

Title:
Need of new ways in agriculture.

[QUOTE=humayun "The King"]Man’s tool replaced by modern machinery so as old tactics replaced by modern tools that made up the procedure more speedy and easy. These tools gave better results in a jiffy in this competitive world. Use of machines and technology in this country will result in certain advantages as it is done in west; all procedure from plough to storage is done mostly by machine work. Old procedure of harvesting fields that is a length and cumbersome should be replaced my more mechanical, as a result it will enhance the growth more rapidly.
[B]Title:[/B]Modern Methods in Agriculture[/QUOTE]

[B][COLOR="Red"]Title: Modern Methods in Agriculture[/COLOR][/B]

Man’s tool replaced by modern machinery so as old tactics replaced by modern tools that made up the procedures speedier and easy that leaded to advancement. These tools gave better results in a jiffy to survive in this competitive world. Use of machines and technology in this country will result in certain advantages as it is done in west; all procedure from plough to storage is done mostly by machine work. Old procedure of harvesting and sowing are dependent upon the weather change and cause damage to yield. Machines can help to overcome that dependency and complete the task in little time that will result in enhanced growth. ([B]Words 108[/B])

HUMAYUN your effort is good but you missed the main point about harvesting and sowing and another thing is limit of words. Add one more line to make it exact according to the demand. Title is really good.

Keep working...

[QUOTE=saira butt]well Miss Naqvi unexpectedly this is not DR junaid or nosheen its from my side.
hope this wouldnt be a sore attempt.

Plentiful production in short time is the need of hour.So manual work replaced by tools and tools by machines.These advanced methods not only helped men in increasing production and became the cause of betterment but also saved time..Now it is high time for us to do something practically by following modern methods in the field of agriculture,as seen in Europe and America.Using such methods our peasants can get rid of problematic weather and disapponitment.To avoid loss and make our agriculture more profitable,the usage of up to date methods,is absolutely necessary.
Title:--Advantages of advanced methods.[/QUOTE]


[B][COLOR="red"]Title:--Advantages of advanced methods in agriculture.[/COLOR][/B]

Plentiful production in short time is the need of hour. Machines help to do more work in little time. In the past manual work replaced by tools and then tools by machines. These advanced methods not only helped men in increasing production and became the cause of betterment but also saved time. Now it is high time for us to do something practically by following modern methods in the field of agriculture, as seen in Europe and America. Using such methods our peasants can get rid of problematic and disappointing weather that result loss of yield. To avoid loss and make our agriculture more profitable, the usage of up to date methods, is absolutely necessary.

(Words 120)

[COLOR="red"][B]Welcome to our practice thread[/B][/COLOR].

You have worked really well. Sorry for the delay actually I read your reply today so added correction of yours as well. I take a week to add next paragraph and then check the work of those members who participate. I have made some changes to your passage in order to meet the demand of words. Keep working like this.

Best Wishes

[QUOTE=dr.junaid]producing abundant in short span of time is the right lesson to teach cultivator in our country.As machine replaced ordinary tools in west ,we must also well utilize new technology to efficently perform primary and secondary economic activties.irregularities in water down pour is pitfall to agriculture where as irrigation system and modren means of ploughing can lead toward healthy economy.
title: agriculture in modren world[/QUOTE]

(words 66)

Dr Junaid you are repeating the same mistakes. Sorry to say but your précis always condensed then required demand. I m not changing it this time and looking for self correction.

Waiting for another attempt......

[QUOTE=Nosheen]To exceed in life man requires more work in less time. He first invent tools to save time and energy.It enabled him to get the best in different fields.Tools increase production in less time .From tools man deceloped big machines with the passage of time.These facts have to be taught to our farmers practically to make progress.In Advanced countries all agricultural activities are performed by machines efficiently from sowing to storing.In our country the farmer depend on weather for ploughing which lead to late sowing.Because of less man power and slow harvesting rain can ruine the crops.However using machines for ploughing and harvestin will result in better yield speedily.In this way every turn of weather can be utilized.

Title:
Need of new ways in agriculture.[/QUOTE]

[B][COLOR="Red"]Need of new ways in agriculture.[/COLOR][/B]

To exceed in life man requires more work in less time. He first invented tools to save time and energy. It enabled him to get the best in different fields. Tools increased production in less time. From tools man developed big machines. These facts have to be taught to our farmers practically to make progress. In Advanced countries all agricultural activities are performed by machines efficiently from sowing to storing. In our country the farmer depend on weather for ploughing which lead to late sowing. Because of less man power and slow harvesting rain can ruin the crops. However, machines for ploughing and harvesting result in better yield. In this way every turn of weather can be utilized and progress will be the natural outcome. ([B]Words 125[/B])

Well done Nosheen this time your work is really good, I have made a minute change in your passage and you can check it out. Actually it has 118 words so to make it exact there are little changes. But overall your work is really good. Keep working like this, Inshahallah you will make a good score in exams.

[B][COLOR="red"][SIZE="3"]Analysis of the paragraph[/SIZE][/COLOR][/B]

[B][COLOR="red"]First Paragraph:[/COLOR][/B]

It is an introductory paragraph and so does not touch the actual subject of the passage. In the passage writer is recommending the use of tools for the farmers of our country whereas in the first paragraph he simply tells abut the use of tools. While writing we will have to rewrite these points in a manner that they are connected with the subject matter of the passage. Secondly there are a large number of examples of machines. The analysis of passage goes like this,

[B][COLOR="red"]Topic Point:[/COLOR][/B] Use of tools helped man to progress and distinguish himself from apes.

[COLOR="red"][B]Supporting Arguments:[/B][/COLOR]

(1) Savage is replaced by man because man could do large amount of work in a short time.

(2) Tools have increased output and made progress possible.

[B][COLOR="red"]Second Paragraph:[/COLOR][/B]

It is a short paragraph giving a statement that tools have been replaced by machines. There are no arguments or explanations. So the analysis of the paragraph goes like this,

[B][COLOR="red"]Topic Point:[/COLOR][/B] Machines have replaced tools.

[B][COLOR="red"]Supporting Arguments:[/COLOR][/B] None

[B][COLOR="red"]Third Paragraph:[/COLOR][/B]

It is in this paragraph that the writer comes to the pith of the argument. Reference to Europe and America is passing reference and cannot be called an example. Each sentence takes the arguments further. Analysis of the paragraph goes like this;

[COLOR="red"][B]Topic Point:[/B][/COLOR] We should adopt mechanical methods of cultivation to eliminate disadvantage.

[B][COLOR="red"]Supporting Arguments:[/COLOR][/B]

(1) We should not theorize on mechanized farming but should put the idea into practice.
(2) In Europe and America mechanical devices for every agricultural activity are used.
(3) Mechanised farming has many advantages -
(a) Big tracts of land can be ploughed to avail of a brief rain;
(b) Saves from disadvantages of late sowing;
(c) Solves harvesting problems.

[COLOR="red"][B][SIZE="3"]Progress: The result of mechanised farming [/SIZE][/B][/COLOR]

Mechanised farming is helpful in agriculture and is the time of need for making progress. After brief rain speedy ploughing is needed and only machines can do it. Similarly late sowing, if followed by heavy rains may cause damage to unripe crops. Mechanised farming proves helpful at the time of harvest, when crops may lie in the fields till it is spoiled by rains so a speedy solution is required. Machines speed up harvesting and save the crops. Initially man replaced savages with the help of tools, which gave him extra hands to do work speedily. Thus output was increased and man made progress. As man replaced savages, so countries using machines will have upper hand over other.

([B][COLOR="red"]words 124[/COLOR][/B])

ok thx Miss Naqvi i will make sure next time it would b better

[QUOTE=saira butt]ok thx Miss Naqvi i will make sure next time it would b better[/QUOTE]

Very good. And I do hope next time you will come up with best work.

Will Inshahallah add another passage tomorrow.