OK... Thank you
I dedicated my two hours on this :P
I try to re write it. thanks anyways

[QUOTE=naheed Akhtar;889238]OK... Thank you
I dedicated my two hours on this :P
I try to re write it. thanks anyways[/QUOTE]

Good effort, really nice outline.

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somebody please check my introduction
Is pakistan a failed state ?
introduction : The struggling pakistan against all the odds in shape of terrorism, growing radicalization, frequent natural disasters , constant civil military tussle to name a few are being perceived as very soon Pakistan will be swallowed by these monstrous challenges. Ever since, pakistan has appeared on map , it has remained focus of various imperlialist intrigues, not to mention the designs of her arch rival india. however, as Ibn e khaldun points out, physical failures never marked the end of any nation, rather it emerged out more prosperous ,stronger and victorious one. It is true ,these challenges are unprecedented and huge ,but Pakistan can never be declared a failed state because on its back there is a strong media , active and more responsible judiciary, youth which is more aware than before about democracy, rapidly evolving political culture and last but not the least a very dynamic civil society. Still ,there are much needed measures which must be adopted by pakistan in order to rise more stabilized and developed country.

sorry some correction .is* being perceived as a state that will be swallowed soon by these monstrous challenges.

[QUOTE=princeling;889293]somebody please check my introduction
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Is pakistan a failed state ?
introduction : [COLOR="Red"]The struggling pakistan[/COLOR](Pakistan strugling) against all the odds in shape of terrorism, growing radicalization, frequent natural disasters , constant civil military tussle to name a few are being perceived as very soon Pakistan will be swallowed by these monstrous challenges. Ever since, pakistan has appeared on map , it has remained focus of various imperlialist intrigues, not to mention the designs of her arch rival india. however, as Ibn e khaldun points out, physical failures never marked the end of any nation, rather it emerged out more prosperous ,stronger and victorious one. It is true ,these challenges are unprecedented and huge ,but Pakistan can never be declared a failed state because on its back there is a strong media , active and more responsible judiciary, youth which is more aware than before about democracy, rapidly evolving political culture and last but not the least a very dynamic civil society. Still ,there are much needed measures which must be adopted by pakistan in order to rise more stabilized and developed country.
[COLOR="Red"]The idea is good, you managed to portray what you wanted and explained it well by clarifying that Pakistan despite many challenges is not a failed state.
However, your punctuations and long sentences need a little bit of work. Overall intro is good.
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[QUOTE=naheed Akhtar;889197]
Conclusion[/QUOTE]

1. Introduction
2. What is Gender
2.1 Gender vs sex
3. What is meant by gender equality?
A) Is gender equality a myth, YES
3.1 Gender inequality: when one gender is discriminated and denied its basic rights
3.2 Right to know/education
3.3 Right to be respected
3.4 Right to protection
A) Violence on women: honor killing, rape cases, acid throwing, political violence, violence on women by women (dowry related violence,same sex violence)
3.4 Right to vote: [I]Example: Man kills sister for voting [url]http://www.dawn.com/news/1223641/man-kills-sister-for-voting[/url][/I]3.5 Right to employment and fair working conditions: A) wage difference for male and female employees
B) Maternity leaves
3.6 right to trade/engage in business
3.7. Right to marriage
3.8 Right to own property
4. Is Segregation of gender (separation of men and boys from women and girls in social settings )n schools, madarsas,jobs/occupation really required ?
4.1 Gender equality and religion
4.2 Gender equality and our society/traditions/culture
5. Gender equality in Pakistan[COLOR="red"] ( What about earlier points, which country's examples were you quoting there?)[/COLOR]
5.1: male vs female literacy ratio
5.2 conditions of women health in country
5.3 Less opportunities for females in employment sector
6. Gender inequality is a global phenomenon
6.1 Despite worldwide Progress, Women and Girls Remain the Majority of the World’s Unhealthy, Unfed, Unpaid, tortured and discriminated
7. Role of State and NGOs in this regard
7.1 Govt is required to formulate laws and ensure its implementation
7.2 NGOs need to create awareness among people for the rights of women
A) provide women access to education
B) ensure women representation in all fields
C) make women financially independent

[COLOR="red"]You have written a very detailed and to the point outline about gender inequality. Let's see how you explain any of these points in paragraphs to convey your message.
Nice work.[/COLOR]

thank you brother :)

i am not commenting on the outline , just for the sake of discussion, why we discuss only two genders, include the third one. please change your attitude of writing about the problems of two and third always ignored.

[QUOTE=waqarabbasi;889445]i am not commenting on the outline , just for the sake of discussion, why we discuss only two genders, include the third one. please change your attitude of writing about the problems of two and third always ignored.[/QUOTE]

They are a very small segment of the population. That is why they are ignored. It doesn't mean that there is any kind of disrespect to them. They are also humans like us, all of us respect them. But the thing is that they are so minute in their numbers that they are not included in the discussion of gender equality.

[QUOTE=Ambivalent;889463]They are a very small segment of the population. That is why they are ignored. It doesn't mean that there is any kind of disrespect to them. They are also humans like us, all of us respect them. But the thing is that they are so minute in their numbers that they are not included in the discussion of gender equality.[/QUOTE]
they, being small in number, are ignored. there are painful facts about society's indifference and hatred toward them. i collected once to write my article in the newspaper. I will try to recollect and write an essay. and the word you used ' respect', mre bhai who respect them? mre ar ap jese chand liberal log , we do not make any difference. they are subjected to inhumane treatment, not only by society but by their parents, too. and it is because of our silence that no rights are granted to them.