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Is colonial mentality impeding Pakistan's progress
I ended up with the following outline in the Essay. My introduction was not that impressive, however, I believe I justified my points well based on general observations. Any chance of getting through the exam with such a short outline? :blink:
Title: Is colonial mentality impeding Pakistan’s Progress? Outline: - Introduction - Genesis of colonial mentality in Pakistan - Manifestations of colonial mentality - Factors impeding Pakistan’s progress - Colonial mentality in the political sphere[INDENT]o Divide and rule policy – an impediment to national integration o No culture of freedom of expression in political parties o Landlords and feudal consider political rule their birth-right – a legacy of colonial mindset[/INDENT]- Administrative sector and the colonial mentality[INDENT]o Bureaucratic red-tapism – adherence to colonial rules and procedures o Culture of elite corps among public administrators – inherited from colonial era o Reluctance to change – modernization[/INDENT]- Colonial mentality impeding progress in social sphere[INDENT]o Supremacy of English language – causing rift in national unity o Resistance to adopt anything foreign considering at detrimental to cultural norms[/INDENT]- Judiciary and police – still stuck in the colonial rules and acts - Conclusion |
What was your thesis statement?
First points (genesis manifestations) are irrelevant. And if you failed to accurately define colonial mentality in genesis, you kind of committed essay-suicide. Because your lower portion will also be ignored due to that blunder. Aik to irrelevant, aur ooper se ho bhi ghalat. Nobody tolerates that. Khayr tell your thesis statement for a more complete assessmemt. |
Btw, defining colonial mentality is difficult. Even those who have attempted the essay don't know what is technically meant by the term (I also didn't have a full concept till after the exam, when I researched it). And this might prove fatal for us who have attempted this essay.
Almost all of the candidates who wrote on this interpreted it as a kind of superiority complex left by British in minds of bureaucrats, politicians and feudals. While what it actually means is an inferiority comolex in the minds of general people which makes them hate everything local and revere everything that comes/came from colonial masters. |
[QUOTE=PartyPooper;1003691]Btw, defining colonial mentality is difficult. Even those who have attempted the essay don't know what is technically meant by the term (I also didn't have a full concept till after the exam, when I researched it). And this might prove fatal for us who have attempted this essay.
Almost all of the candidates who wrote on this interpreted it as a kind of superiority complex left by British in minds of bureaucrats, politicians and feudals. While what it actually means is an inferiority comolex in the minds of general people which makes them hate everything local and revere everything that comes/came from colonial masters.[/QUOTE] Ideas should matter,not robots like qualities.In my view, they should not fail a person because he/she forgets a single definition. |
[QUOTE=wasxxm;1003677]I ended up with the following outline in the Essay. My introduction was not that impressive, however, I believe I justified my points well based on general observations. Any chance of getting through the exam with such a short outline? :blink:
Title: Is colonial mentality impeding Pakistan’s Progress? Outline: - Introduction - Genesis of colonial mentality in Pakistan - Manifestations of colonial mentality - Factors impeding Pakistan’s progress - Colonial mentality in the political sphere[INDENT]o Divide and rule policy – an impediment to national integration o No culture of freedom of expression in political parties o Landlords and feudal consider political rule their birth-right – a legacy of colonial mindset[/INDENT]- Administrative sector and the colonial mentality[INDENT]o Bureaucratic red-tapism – adherence to colonial rules and procedures o Culture of elite corps among public administrators – inherited from colonial era o Reluctance to change – modernization[/INDENT]- Colonial mentality impeding progress in social sphere[INDENT]o Supremacy of English language – causing rift in national unity o Resistance to adopt anything foreign considering at detrimental to cultural norms[/INDENT]- Judiciary and police – still stuck in the colonial rules and acts - Conclusion[/QUOTE] I think its relevant and good overall,but you could have suggested ways to extirpate colonial hangover. |
I have a slow writing speed; ran out of time to include suggestions for remedy of the colonial mentality.
And thanks you made me feel good for the rest of the exams. :) |
[QUOTE=infinite optimism;1003704]Ideas should matter,not robots like qualities.In my view, they should not fail a person because he/she forgets a single definition.[/QUOTE]
It does not matter what you think they should do. The only thing that matters is what they actually do. And they do fail if candidates do not grasp what the topic asked. If you don't know what a topic is, don't choose it. If they ask you to write an essay on Fatima Jinnah and you write about Muhammad Ali Jinnah, and later say that only ideas should matter, that won't be a very rational excuse. If you say both sounded like Jinnah, even then the excuse will be dumb. Sorry to be harsh. But I give you facts. I have wasted many a precious years of my life running after this. I know stuff (ghaat ghaat ka paani pia hai bhai) I admire your name though. Like your optimism regarding the world in general and FPSC examiners in particular. |
[QUOTE=PartyPooper;1003712]It does not matter what you think they should do. The only thing that matters is what they actually do.
And they do fail if candidates do not grasp what the topic asked. If you don't know what a topic is, don't choose it. If they ask you to write an essay on Fatima Jinnah and you write about Muhammad Ali Jinnah, and later say that only ideas should matter, that won't be a very rational excuse. If you say both sounded like Jinnah, even then the excuse will be dumb. Sorry to be harsh. But I give you facts. I have wasted many a precious years of my life running after this. I know stuff (ghaat ghaat ka paani pia hai bhai) I admire your name though. Like your optimism regarding the world in general and FPSC examiners in particular.[/QUOTE] OK,been-that-done-that brother.I am just trying to say that that they might not expect a candidate to know each and every thing about a topic,like a definition.What should matter is the bigger picture. |
[QUOTE=infinite optimism;1003713]OK,been-that-done-that brother.I am just trying to say that that they might not expect a candidate to know each and every thing about a topic,like a definition.What should matter is the bigger picture.[/QUOTE]
What you think is wrong (ridiculous was the word tha came to mind originally). They expect that a student who is writing a 100 marks essay on a topic will at least know its friggin definition!! Lol come on!!! :D My infinitely optimist simpleton brother/or sister. Jo b ho ap. |
[QUOTE=PartyPooper;1003691]Btw, defining colonial mentality is difficult. Even those who have attempted the essay don't know what is technically meant by the term (I also didn't have a full concept till after the exam, when I researched it). And this might prove fatal for us who have attempted this essay.
Almost all of the candidates who wrote on this interpreted it as a kind of superiority complex left by British in minds of bureaucrats, politicians and feudals. While what it actually means is an inferiority comolex in the minds of general people which makes them hate everything local and revere everything that comes/came from colonial masters.[/QUOTE] Wikipedia has used his own interpretation of the term 'colonial mentality', however, in academic sense, colonial mentality is the exploitation of the citizens with sole focus on revenue collection, and law and order; and no focus on development. As its not a dictionary term, one can rationally come up with his own way of defining the term. |
[QUOTE=sheikh87;1003772]Wikipedia has used his own interpretation of the term 'colonial mentality', however, in academic sense, colonial mentality is the exploitation of the citizens with sole focus on revenue collection, and law and order; and no focus on development. As its not a dictionary term, one can rationally come up with his own way of defining the term.[/QUOTE]
Source for this 'academic' definition? Wikipedia's definition is garbage. It cites no references. Some Tom, Dick or Harry probably came up with it in his basement. Sent from my iPhone using Tapatalk |
-Introduction
1. Indicators of a country's progress -----Rule of Law: Mechanisms of Accountability and Transparent System. -----Social Integration -----Social Development -----Effective Administrative Machinery 2. Characteristics of Colonial Mentality -----Divide and Rule -----Elitist Administrative Services -----Focus on Revenue Collection and Law and Order only while neglecting social development -----Disdain for freedom of Expression -----Lack of Rule of Law 3. Manifestations of Colonial Mentality Impeding Progress of Pakistan -----Elitist Administrative Model which is despotic and self aggrandizing -----Docile and Pliable Bureaucracy at the hands of Politicians which focus on obliging politicans rather than citizens -----Fragile Rule of Law which affects Pakistan's economy -----Politics of Ethnicity which undermines Social Integration -----Power Politics which makes the sole objectives of Political Parties to gain or retain power. -----Disdain for Freedom of Expression which undermines transparency and promotes corruption 4. Way Forward -----Strengthening Rule of Law by empowering anti-corruption units. -----Empowering Bureaucracy by providing them constitutional security of Tenure. -----Promoting Education. 5. Conclusion |
[QUOTE=PartyPooper;1003775]Source for this 'academic' definition?
Wikipedia's definition is garbage. It cites no references. Some Tom, Dick or Harry probably came up with it in his basement. Sent from my iPhone using Tapatalk[/QUOTE] Google "Is Colonial Mentality Hindering India's success?" and check all the essays and articles. Essay Examiner actually copied the idea from these sites just putting in Pakistan instead of India. |
one more thing. Colonial mentality of Indo-Pakistan can be different to those of American or African Colonies. Colonial Mentality simply emerges out of the mentality i.e the ways, of the colonizing countries. Vietnam would have a legacy of different colonial mentality which would reflect the French ways of administration and ruling. Similarly, that of Philippine would resemble US. So, cannot be a single definition. Not possible. But one thing is essential in all: exploitation. But still, as its not a dictionary term, its quite subjective.
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This topic can be interpreted differently. It's not a Physics numerical that one has to reach the exact answers. No two persons can have same arguments on a particular essay. This is what essay is all about. It all depends whether one was able to reference content in the exam or not.
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[QUOTE=sheikh87;1003777]-Introduction
1. Indicators of a country's progress -----Rule of Law: Mechanisms of Accountability and Transparent System. -----Social Integration -----Social Development -----Effective Administrative Machinery 2. Characteristics of Colonial Mentality -----Divide and Rule -----Elitist Administrative Services -----Focus on Revenue Collection and Law and Order only while neglecting social development -----Disdain for freedom of Expression -----Lack of Rule of Law 3. Manifestations of Colonial Mentality Impeding Progress of Pakistan -----Elitist Administrative Model which is despotic and self aggrandizing -----Docile and Pliable Bureaucracy at the hands of Politicians which focus on obliging politicans rather than citizens -----Fragile Rule of Law which affects Pakistan's economy -----Politics of Ethnicity which undermines Social Integration -----Power Politics which makes the sole objectives of Political Parties to gain or retain power. -----Disdain for Freedom of Expression which undermines transparency and promotes corruption 4. Way Forward -----Strengthening Rule of Law by empowering anti-corruption units. -----Empowering Bureaucracy by providing them constitutional security of Tenure. -----Promoting Education. 5. Conclusion[/QUOTE] Is this your outline in the essay this time? |
[QUOTE=Ahmad Abbas;1003784]Is this your outline in the essay this time?[/QUOTE]
Yes. Some points are missing. Just wrote what i can recall. |
[QUOTE=sheikh87;1003785]Yes. Some points are missing. Just wrote what i can recall.[/QUOTE]
Then it's good one. Now did you reference what you wrote? |
[QUOTE=Ahmad Abbas;1003783]This topic can be interpreted differently. It's not a Physics numerical that one has to reach the exact answers. No two persons can have same arguments on a particular essay. This is what essay is all about. It all depends whether one was able to reference content in the exam or not.[/QUOTE]
hmm, But ive done some browsing now and have to agree with partypooer. The topic is highly problematic. |
[QUOTE=Ahmad Abbas;1003786]Then it's good one. Now did you reference what you wrote?[/QUOTE]
Yes. Rationalized every aspect by creating a linkage from the British Colonial rule. For e.g, linked Politics of Ethnicity with British Politics of Divide and rule, power politics of political parties with British struggle of retaining control over important departments of the Indian machinery, docile and pliable bureaucracy with the British policy of keeping the admin machinery under their control through British Governor e.t.c |
[QUOTE=sheikh87;1003787]hmm, But ive done some browsing now and have to agree with partypooer. The topic is highly problematic.[/QUOTE]
As I said it all depends whether one is able to rederence the content. Never write on the topic you can't justify. As I look at the topic it is asking about your opinion. You can agree and disagree with the statement. However, both ways it has to be justified academically with proper references like it's done in a research essay |
[QUOTE=Ahmad Abbas;1003789]As I said it all depends whether one is able to rederence the content. Never write on the topic you can't justify. As I look at the topic it is asking about your opinion. You can agree and disagree with the statement. However, both ways it has to be justified academically with proper references like it's done in a research essay[/QUOTE]
I believe arguments are more important than references. Coherent structure with ample arguments is all what is required. |
Maybe i have misunderstood. Im sure, by reference you don't mean quoting statistical data :)
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[QUOTE=sheikh87;1003790]I believe arguments are more important than references. Coherent structure with ample arguments is all what is required.[/QUOTE]
Argument and coherence as necessary as references. It's a complete package. In fact, an essay not referenced isn't an essay rather a story. What took us too long too understand was that essays in CSS are related to different disciplines so rules developed by those disciplines need to be entertained. Good arguments are not all ours we read them somewhere, add our own analyse things and its unethical to not acknowledge the original thinker. Again we need fscts and figures too that too are from some sources. So we have to mention those. Basically we have to qualify what we are saying that's the essence of an essay |
[QUOTE=sheikh87;1003792]Maybe i have misunderstood. Im sure, by reference you don't mean quoting statistical data :)[/QUOTE]
No statistical data, these are qualitative essays. We need to mention our sources in-text (like the idea we're getting from a particular book, journal paper, news reports or interviews) There is an article by Pervez Hoodboy "Enough of PhDs" in Dawn. If you read it you'll know how much we lack in qualitative research and how HEC has failed. In Pakistan even PhDs don't know how to present a paper, Pervez says. |
And one needs to read that book recommended by FPSC "Little Brown" it teaches you how to reference an essay and what actually is a research essay. What we do here? We run after English teachers that's the biggest mistake we do and academies ruin many in this process with their pathetic and outdated essay techniques. Whereas, If you see it in "Little Brown" it asks you to write a research paper by following the MLA or APA style of referencing.
Not giving them is one of the reasons that even toppers score very less in essay. And FPSC then has to fail the majority of candidates in this paper. |
[QUOTE=wasxxm;1003677]I ended up with the following outline in the Essay. My introduction was not that impressive, however, I believe I justified my points well based on general observations. Any of getting through the exam with such a short outline? :blink:
Title: Is colonial mentality impeding Pakistan’s Progress? Outline: - Introduction - Genesis of colonial mentality in Pakistan - Manifestations of colonial mentality - Factors impeding Pakistan’s progress - Colonial mentality in the political sphere[INDENT]o Divide and rule policy – an impediment to national integration o No culture of freedom of expression in political parties o Landlords and feudal consider political rule their birth-right – a legacy of colonial mindset[/INDENT]- Administrative sector and the colonial mentality[INDENT]o Bureaucratic red-tapism – adherence to colonial rules and procedures o Culture of elite corps among public administrators – inherited from colonial era o Reluctance to change – modernization[/INDENT]- Colonial mentality impeding progress in social sphere[INDENT]o Supremacy of English language – causing rift in national unity o Resistance to adopt anything foreign considering at detrimental to cultural norms[/INDENT]- Judiciary and police – still stuck in the colonial rules and acts - Conclusion[/QUOTE] I did the same essay, I focused on enslaved mindset of Pakistanis, be that historically in playing role for US in cold war against ISSR, in education by following english ideals, in financial by relying on loans and trade, in national mindset by western imitation and brain drain, in cultural sphere through Hollywood and Bollywood. Later I gave example of american recolution as an exact way to get away with this mindset by making policies according to customised needs. I concluded with one-line solution to stick to our ideological struggle of Pakistan ka matlab kia and promote urdu, culture and Pakistani exports with self reliance to get out of this colonial mentality. Please comment |
[QUOTE=wasxxm;1003677]I ended up with the following outline in the Essay. My introduction was not that impressive, however, I believe I justified my points well based on general observations. Any chance of getting through the exam with such a short outline? :blink:
Title: Is colonial mentality impeding Pakistan’s Progress? Outline: - Introduction - Genesis of colonial mentality in Pakistan - Manifestations of colonial mentality - Factors impeding Pakistan’s progress - Colonial mentality in the political sphere[INDENT]o Divide and rule policy – an impediment to national integration o No culture of freedom of expression in political parties o Landlords and feudal consider political rule their birth-right – a legacy of colonial mindset[/INDENT]- Administrative sector and the colonial mentality[INDENT]o Bureaucratic red-tapism – adherence to colonial rules and procedures o Culture of elite corps among public administrators – inherited from colonial era o Reluctance to change – modernization[/INDENT]- Colonial mentality impeding progress in social sphere[INDENT]o Supremacy of English language – causing rift in national unity o Resistance to adopt anything foreign considering at detrimental to cultural norms[/INDENT]- Judiciary and police – still stuck in the colonial rules and acts - Conclusion[/QUOTE] This is the best essay. You will pass bro. |
[QUOTE=Muhammad Owais Siddiqui;1003879]I did the same essay, I focused on enslaved mindset of Pakistanis, be that historically in playing role for US in cold war against ISSR, in education by following english ideals, in financial by relying on loans and trade, in national mindset by western imitation and brain drain, in cultural sphere through Hollywood and Bollywood. Later I gave example of american recolution as an exact way to get away with this mindset by making policies according to customised needs. I concluded with one-line solution to stick to our ideological struggle of Pakistan ka matlab kia and promote urdu, culture and Pakistani exports with self reliance to get out of this colonial mentality.
Please comment[/QUOTE] Excellent! And well justified |
[QUOTE=Muhammad Owais Siddiqui;1003879]I did the same essay, I focused on enslaved mindset of Pakistanis, be that historically in playing role for US in cold war against ISSR, in education by following english ideals, in financial by relying on loans and trade, in national mindset by western imitation and brain drain, in cultural sphere through Hollywood and Bollywood. Later I gave example of american recolution as an exact way to get away with this mindset by making policies according to customised needs. I concluded with one-line solution to stick to our ideological struggle of Pakistan ka matlab kia and promote urdu, culture and Pakistani exports with self reliance to get out of this colonial mentality.
Please comment[/QUOTE] Out of all the outlines on this topic, yours seem to hit the topic most directly. If you maintained proper structure, dealt a good technical treatment, and used proper grammar, you will pass. Sent from my iPhone using Tapatalk |
Anything in brackets was not part of outline, Its just to give you guys a sense of what I wrote in the essay
- Introduction - What is a Mentality[LIST][*]Defining mentality[/LIST][LIST][*]How it creates social structures (how a mentality creates a societal mindset and worldview)[/LIST][LIST][*]How it establishes social norms and values (how it forms established norms within society)[/LIST]- What is a Colonial mentality[LIST][*] Defining a colonial mentality (what it is and where it was formed and comes form)[/LIST][LIST][*] How it was perceived historically and today (colonial mindset in the past is very different on how it is used today due to social changes and transformation of society, so I explained how it was used in the past and how it is different today)[/LIST][LIST][*] Characteristics of a colonial mentality (listed 6 and described each)[/LIST]- Colonial mentality an Impediment to Pakistan[LIST][*]A historical perspective (from 1947 onwards explained using 5 examples how it impeded Pakistans progress)[/LIST][LIST][*]Current scenario (5 examples to support my argument on how it is impeding Pakistans progress today)[/LIST]- Consequences of a colonial mentality (this point is the extension of the last point, the results of colonial mentality impeding Pakistans progress throughout history and today. What negative results have we seen due to it. Gave 6 examples and explained each) - Remedies to this issue (how we can overtime and slowly remove a colonial mindset from Pakistan. Gave 6 examples) - Conclusion |
Thanks, INSHALLAH.
My grammar was ok, paragraphing was fine, articulation was a little good instead one where I messed a little fallacy. My outline was awesome, intro plus first paragraphed argument was very much to the point, conclusion was a hurried attemp in last five minutes. I trust ALLAH, I'll surely get it INSHALLAH. Thanks again! |
Sorry I forgot to add that Colonial mentality can be different according to each country and who uses it. It was very important to first establish a definition of what you think it is, so that the person marking the essay has a clear idea of your definition of a colonial mentality. Also, it was very important to establish context. We are talking about Pakistan so our perspective has to be how a colonial mentality was used and applied to Pakistan / South Asia and how it has evolved over time.
Those 2 points of defining your meaning of colonial mentality and then establishing proper context in terms of Pakistan itself were very important. At least that is what I think. Not sure if I will pass but I think I did a good enough job. |
I absolutely agree with 'PartyPooper' brother on the arguments which he presented here. This is the sole reason because of which I didn't attempt this topic. 😀😇
You can check my outline in a thread under the heading of 'military engagements by UN; is the world moving towards peace?'. |
Hey
I attempted the same essay. I took colonial in a relatively simpler context. To me colonial meant just the backward or primitive thinking. My thesis statement was "in which hidden ways colonial thinking is impeding pakistans progress, how can we over come those and what are the benefits that it is going to bring for pakistan". I mentioned creative hidden ways, like the primitive thought of choosing a permanent career, women not allowed to work, technology being considered a secondary source and reliance on paper work in government sector, women/honor killing, religious biasis, unappreciated entrepuernship sector, english language complex and many more. I took those in a flow though. Sath sath mentioned examples and how it is halting the progress of pakistan. Then mentioned strategies of overcoming colonial thinking and mentioned the importance and concluded. Any opinions? :( |
Kindly share the length of your essay in terms of pages .....!
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My Views
[QUOTE=Muhammad Owais Siddiqui;1003879]I did the same essay, I focused on enslaved mindset of Pakistanis, be that historically in playing role for US in cold war against ISSR, in education by following english ideals, in financial by relying on loans and trade, in national mindset by western imitation and brain drain, in cultural sphere through Hollywood and Bollywood. Later I gave example of american recolution as an exact way to get away with this mindset by making policies according to customised needs. I concluded with one-line solution to stick to our ideological struggle of Pakistan ka matlab kia and promote urdu, culture and Pakistani exports with self reliance to get out of this colonial mentality.
Please comment[/QUOTE] Dear , after reviewing all of the shared outlines, i find your outline and ideas hitting the bull's eye. I endorse the the way "party pooper" has defined colonial mentality. For other members who have shared their outlines , they should also share their thesis statement . If thesis statement is not right , you have failed the essay. That was a very tricky essay . And the rule of css essay is ; never ever attempt an essay about which you have 1 percent doubt. |
IS COLONIAL MINDSET IMPEDING PAKISTAN'S PROGRESS?
● Introduction ● We have always been Slaves ** ○ Mehmood Ghaznavi ** ○ Muhammad Ghouri ** ○ Later Sultans followed by Mughals ** ○ British ● Psychological Effects of Slavery ** ○ On Ruling Elite ***** • Elitist Attitude ***** • Dynastic Politics ***** • Non-democratic methods ***** • Opposition to Dissent ***** • Opposition to Free Media ***** • Opposition to Free Judiciary ***** • Increase in Nepotism ** ○ On Common Man ***** • Fear of Authority and Power ***** • Mentally Suppressed ***** • Acceptance of Dynastic Politics ***** • Fear of Raising Voice over Injustice ***** • Considering the Rulers as Supreme ***** • Non-participation in Politics ● Current Situation of Pakistan ** ○ Rulers have Elitist mindset ** ○ Suffering from Curse of Dynastic Politics ** ○ Experienced Several Martial Laws ** ○ Rulers hate Dissenting Voice ** ○ Media is Controlled by an Invisible Hand ** ○ Judiciary has been Controlled in the Past ** ○ Nepotism is at its Peak ** ○ Common Man is Afraid of 'Thana' and 'Katcheri' ** ○ Common Man has Accepted Dynastic Politics ** ○ Common Man is Afraid to Question the Rulers ** ○ Common Man is unable to be part of Politics ● Is this Colonial Mindset Helping Pakistan? ● What should be Done to Let Go of this Mindset? ** ○ Rulers must be Held Accountable to the People ** ○ Rulers must be Brought under Rule of Law ** ○ Dynastic Politics must be Discouraged ** ○ Democratic trends must be Encouraged ** ○ Freedom of Media ** ○ Freedom of Judiciary ** ○ Rulers should be Questioned ** ○ Meritocracy should be Promoted ** ○ End to 'Thana' and 'Katcheri' Culture ** ○ Provision of Justice ** ○ Common Man should be Freed Mentally ● Conclusion |
[QUOTE=Ehtasham Khattak;1004971]IS COLONIAL MINDSET IMPEDING PAKISTAN'S PROGRESS?
● Introduction ● We have always been Slaves ** ○ Mehmood Ghaznavi ** ○ Muhammad Ghouri ** ○ Later Sultans followed by Mughals ** ○ British ● Psychological Effects of Slavery ** ○ On Ruling Elite ***** • Elitist Attitude ***** • Dynastic Politics ***** • Non-democratic methods ***** • Opposition to Dissent ***** • Opposition to Free Media ***** • Opposition to Free Judiciary ***** • Increase in Nepotism ** ○ On Common Man ***** • Fear of Authority and Power ***** • Mentally Suppressed ***** • Acceptance of Dynastic Politics ***** • Fear of Raising Voice over Injustice ***** • Considering the Rulers as Supreme ***** • Non-participation in Politics ● Current Situation of Pakistan ** ○ Rulers have Elitist mindset ** ○ Suffering from Curse of Dynastic Politics ** ○ Experienced Several Martial Laws ** ○ Rulers hate Dissenting Voice ** ○ Media is Controlled by an Invisible Hand ** ○ Judiciary has been Controlled in the Past ** ○ Nepotism is at its Peak ** ○ Common Man is Afraid of 'Thana' and 'Katcheri' ** ○ Common Man has Accepted Dynastic Politics ** ○ Common Man is Afraid to Question the Rulers ** ○ Common Man is unable to be part of Politics ● Is this Colonial Mindset Helping Pakistan? ● What should be Done to Let Go of this Mindset? ** ○ Rulers must be Held Accountable to the People ** ○ Rulers must be Brought under Rule of Law ** ○ Dynastic Politics must be Discouraged ** ○ Democratic trends must be Encouraged ** ○ Freedom of Media ** ○ Freedom of Judiciary ** ○ Rulers should be Questioned ** ○ Meritocracy should be Promoted ** ○ End to 'Thana' and 'Katcheri' Culture ** ○ Provision of Justice ** ○ Common Man should be Freed Mentally ● Conclusion[/QUOTE] Your thesis statement? If you were able to organize all this data you have given into meaningful structure, and made sense justifying and linking these points to your thesis statement, you will get through. All depends on thesis statement. Otherwise a good effort. Sent from my iPhone using Tapatalk |
I started by narrating a historical event. Thesis statement followed, in which I agreed that, Yes it is the colonial mindset which is impeding the progress of Pakistan.
Every heading, sub-heading of the outline was the starting line of a paragraph in essay. And yes, I connected the ideas. What do you think? |
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