Please evalute outlines of Democracy: Hopes and Hurdles
 

[B]Democracy in Pakistan: Hopes and Hurdles (CSS 2018)[/B]
1. Introduction
2. An overview of Pakistan's Democratic history.
3. Promising hopes for Pakistan's democratic system:
• Third consecutive and smooth transition of democratic governments in history of Pakistan.
• Emergence of new national level political parties
• Accountability drive across the board
• Civilian supermacy rather than military: a case stuy of Pak-India recent skirmishes
4. Hurdles in strenthening democracy in Pakistan:
• Poor role of Election Commission
• Entrenched dynastic politics in Pakistan
• Lack of true intra- party elections
• Horse trading and corrupting influence of money politics
• Weak and ineffective role of Local government
5. Way forward to resolve hurdles:
• Educating masses especially civic education
• Strenthening Election commission
• Political parties must come up from ethnic politics to national politics
• Abolishing feudal system
Conclusion

good attempt. Try bringing logical sequence in the outline. For instance writing the most important point first and least important point at last. In my opinion, Civil-Military balance should have been the first point. Keep trying. Best of luck.

[QUOTE=damask;1088705]good attempt. Try bringing logical sequence in the outline. For instance writing the most important point first and least important point at last. In my opinion, Civil-Military balance should have been the first point. Keep trying. Best of luck.[/QUOTE]Thank you for your valuable suggestion

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Overall good!
Don’t use full-stop and colon in outline.
The word ‘level’ is unnecessary.
And, it should be ‘civilian supremacy over the military’.



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