rate my outline

[lizaaudacious]

the given topic is
poverty erodes away morality
outline
1.introduction
1a.general definitions of both variables
1b.defining both of them in specific terms
2.analysis of the term poverty
3.different aspects of poverty
4.statistical measures about poverty in the world
5.few instances supporting the issue

6.dictionary definition of morality
7.extension of definition
8.morality with refernce to different religions

9.is there any relationship existing between the two ?
9a.what sort of relationship it is?
9b.elaborating the nature of relationship

10.poverty affects morality in a negative way
11.explanation with the help of few examples
12.conclusion
12a.yes poverty erodes away morality

[New Student]

@Liza Audicious

If I assume that as per your outline, there are 12 paragraphs dividing the essay in 12 parts, then it is clear that more emphasis goes to defining the two variables i.e. poverty and morality. However, your essay is about the erosion of morality by poverty (main theme) and eight of your paragraphs are just used in explaining the two terms and less emphasis is on the main theme of the esaay i.e. in the last three paragraphs.

I would suggest you to put more emphasis on the main theme and the parapheral issues like explaining the two variables should be done in a paragraph or two.

It also seems from the outline that you may not have enough material to write about the main theme. If that happens in exam, my suggestion would be to opt for the essay where you have more material to put as per the main theme and avoid the one where you have less things to explain. I would also suggest that try to avoid repeating the ideas in such essays in order to elongate the essay.

Regards

[MUHAMMAD IJAZ GILL]

@Lizaaudicious

u should b very careful in choosing essay topic in paper. In essay paper, every year 1 to 2 topics r related to current affairs. So u should have good prepration of current afairs. It will help u in attempting essay paper.

U dont waste time in practicing such tpe essays as umentioned. newstudent analysed ur outline in a better way.

U practice essay from cuuent affairs area. Give this time to objective portion which will help u in increasing ur aggregate

[lizaaudacious]

thank you so v much .both ov you did a v gud job 4 me.i have many issues while writing outline .indeed i thought it a v easy job and never tried it b4 .so now m running out of my skin while i have to do it......i will try to improve myself .thankyu so much
REGARDS