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[Jugni]

War on terror in Pakistan
Introduction
Soviet Union’s invasion at Afghanistan
Taliban -------American product
Pakistan in war
Blasts in Pakistan------at shrines, at mosques and at public places
Aftermath of these blasts:
Shaky economy
Low foreign investment
International isolation
Causes of these blasts:
Foreign intrusion
Poverty
Religious exploitation
Universal availability of explosives and weapons
Measures Pakistan should take:
Negotiations with Taliban leaders
Operations if negotiations fail
Check of goods at airports and boarders
Elaboration of unity between political parties and good relations with neighbor counties
Conclusion

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Originally Posted by Jugni

War on terror in Pakistan
Introduction
Soviet Union’s invasion at Afghanistan
Taliban -------American product
Pakistan in war
Blasts in Pakistan------at shrines, at mosques and at public places
Aftermath of these blasts:
Shaky economy
Low foreign investment
International isolation
Causes of these blasts:
Foreign intrusion
Poverty
Religious exploitation
Universal availability of explosives and weapons
Measures Pakistan should take:
Negotiations with Taliban leaders
Operations if negotiations fail
Check of goods at airports and boarders
Elaboration of unity between political parties and good relations with neighbor counties
Conclusion

Pakistan in war
Blasts in Pakistan------at shrines, at mosques and at public places
add this too.
1. rise of TTP, the local taliban
2. surge in extremism and sectarianism
3. further social and ethnic division
4. Operation in WAziristan and Swat
AND
Causes of these blasts: dont write BLAST. Write TERRORISM
Foreign intrusion
Poverty
Religious exploitation
Universal availability of explosives and weapons
add these in the causes
1. Weak foreign policy
2. Political instability
3. Vision less leadership
4. Military coups

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Measures Pakistan should take:
Negotiations with Taliban leaders
Operations if negotiations fail
Check of goods at airports and boarders
Elaboration of unity between political parties and good relations with neighbor counties

Add these:
Redress the causes mentioned above.

Ur outline is OK, not good.