seniors need your critical analysis plz
 

outline and introduction is here

[SIZE="4"][B][U][CENTER]Failure of Democracy in Pakistan
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[B][U]Thesis Statement[/U][/B]
Strength of the states depends on their ways of governance. Pakistan was unfortunate enough that it lost its sincere leadership on its very birth. Since that, Pakistan has been a victim of several ailments. Failure of democracy is one of the foremost causes of those ailments.

[B][U]Outline[/U][/B]
1. Introduction
a. What is democracy?
b. Democracy is essential for the development

2. How Democracy originated and flourished on political soil?
a. Origin of Democracy in Greece
b. Islamic vision of democracy
i. Medina as a first democratic state according to the principles of Islam
ii. Nizam of Shoora and consultation
iii. Democracy in the period of pious caliphates
“The ignorance of one voter in a democracy impairs the security of all” (J.F. Kennedy)

3. Essentials of democracy
a. Literacy is the foremost because one should know who to choose
b. Free media so that people may get information about every state affair
c. Democratization of political parties
d. Integrity of nation
e. Strict adherence to rule of law

4. Pakistan’s experience of democracy
a. Political history in the first decade 1947-58
b. Three martial laws and continuous involvement of army
c. Lost decade of Pakistan: 1990s
d. Presently democracy is under the shadow of fear

5. Factors that led to the failure of democracy in Pakistan
a. Feudalism has been a root cause
b. Absence of competent leadership
c. Weaknesses of democratic institutions
d. Recurrent military takeover
e. Illiteracy of the masses to choose a right person as a leader
“Democracy cannot succeed unless those who express their choice are prepared to choose wisely. The real safeguard for democracy, therefore, is education.” (F.D. Roosevelt)

6. Repercussions due to the failure of democracy
a. Impacts on economy
b. Social fabric is tarnished
c. Extremism took place
d. Poverty has been increasing
e. Corruption ruled over every institution

7. democracy can be sustained in Pakistan if
a. Political parties start introducing democracy within themselves- end of inherent leadership
b. Devolution of power to strengthen democracy at root level
c. Involvement of middle class into politics
d. Democratic institutions should be strengthen: legislature, executive, and judiciary
e. Emergency measures should be undertaken to reduce illiteracy from the country
f. Accountability should be at every level with the availability of equality in justice
g. Transparency should be ensured to select competent individuals.
h. Drastic changes are needed to end colonial bureaucratic system

8. Conclusion

[B][U]Introduction [/U][/B]
One can feel proud in 21st century that he has power to decide his fate. Democracy is the most appropriate form of government, as considered, in today’s world. Involvement of people at every sphere is a characterizing feature of democracy which ensures development.
Democracy, as defined popularly ‘government of people, for the people, and by the people’ provides a chance to people to exercise their will through political means. Involvement of people also ensures accountability and transparency if implemented in its true sense.
Strength of the states depends on their ways of governance. Pakistan was unfortunate enough that it lost its sincere leadership on its very birth. Since that, Pakistan has been a victim of several ailments. Failure of democracy is one of the foremost causes of those ailments.

[QUOTE=Shehla malik;752636]outline and introduction is here

[SIZE="4"][B][U][CENTER]Failure of Democracy in Pakistan
[/CENTER][/U][/B][/SIZE]
[B][U]Thesis Statement[/U][/B]
Strength of the states depends on their ways of governance. Pakistan was unfortunate enough that it lost its sincere leadership on its very birth. Since that, Pakistan has been a victim of several ailments. Failure of democracy is one of the foremost causes of those ailments.

[B][U]Outline[/U][/B]
1. Introduction
a. What is democracy?
b. Democracy is essential for the development

2. How Democracy originated and flourished on political soil?
a. Origin of Democracy in Greece
b. Islamic vision of democracy
i. Medina as a first democratic state according to the principles of Islam
ii. Nizam of Shoora and consultation
iii. Democracy in the period of pious caliphates
“The ignorance of one voter in a democracy impairs the security of all” (J.F. Kennedy)

3. Essentials of democracy
a. Literacy is the foremost because one should know who to choose
b. Free media so that people may get information about every state affair
c. Democratization of political parties
d. Integrity of nation
e. Strict adherence to rule of law

4. Pakistan’s experience of democracy
a. Political history in the first decade 1947-58
b. Three martial laws and continuous involvement of army
c. Lost decade of Pakistan: 1990s
d. Presently democracy is under the shadow of fear

5. Factors that led to the failure of democracy in Pakistan
a. Feudalism has been a root cause
b. Absence of competent leadership
c. Weaknesses of democratic institutions
d. Recurrent military takeover
e. Illiteracy of the masses to choose a right person as a leader
“Democracy cannot succeed unless those who express their choice are prepared to choose wisely. The real safeguard for democracy, therefore, is education.” (F.D. Roosevelt)

6. Repercussions due to the failure of democracy
a. Impacts on economy
b. Social fabric is tarnished
c. Extremism took place
d. Poverty has been increasing
e. Corruption ruled over every institution

7. democracy can be sustained in Pakistan if
a. Political parties start introducing democracy within themselves- end of inherent leadership
b. Devolution of power to strengthen democracy at root level
c. Involvement of middle class into politics
d. Democratic institutions should be strengthen: legislature, executive, and judiciary
e. Emergency measures should be undertaken to reduce illiteracy from the country
f. Accountability should be at every level with the availability of equality in justice
g. Transparency should be ensured to select competent individuals.
h. Drastic changes are needed to end colonial bureaucratic system

8. Conclusion

[B][U]Introduction [/U][/B]
One can feel proud in 21st century that he has power to decide his fate. Democracy is the most appropriate form of government, as considered, in today’s world. Involvement of people at every sphere is a characterizing feature of democracy which ensures development.
Democracy, as defined popularly ‘government of people, for the people, and by the people’ provides a chance to people to exercise their will through political means. Involvement of people also ensures accountability and transparency if implemented in its true sense.
Strength of the states depends on their ways of governance. Pakistan was unfortunate enough that it lost its sincere leadership on its very birth. Since that, Pakistan has been a victim of several ailments. Failure of democracy is one of the foremost causes of those ailments.[/QUOTE]

nice effort
good outline
here also add the examples of the pure democratic countries like United state of America and India.
also shows there progress due to implementation of democracy.
Also add quotations with related paragraph.

relevance to the topic is very important in essay
 

[QUOTE=Shehla malik;752636]outline and introduction is here

[SIZE="4"][B][U][CENTER]Failure of Democracy in Pakistan
[/CENTER][/U][/B][/SIZE]
[B][U]Thesis Statement[/U][/B]
Strength of the states depends on their ways of governance. Pakistan was unfortunate enough that it lost its sincere leadership on its very birth. Since that, Pakistan has been a victim of several ailments. Failure of democracy is one of the foremost causes of those ailments.

[B][U]Outline[/U][/B]
1. Introduction
a. What is democracy?
b. Democracy is essential for the development

2. How Democracy originated and flourished on political soil?
a. Origin of Democracy in Greece
b. Islamic vision of democracy
i. Medina as a first democratic state according to the principles of Islam
ii. Nizam of Shoora and consultation
iii. Democracy in the period of pious caliphates
“The ignorance of one voter in a democracy impairs the security of all” (J.F. Kennedy)

3. Essentials of democracy
a. Literacy is the foremost because one should know who to choose
b. Free media so that people may get information about every state affair
c. Democratization of political parties
d. Integrity of nation
e. Strict adherence to rule of law

4. Pakistan’s experience of democracy
a. Political history in the first decade 1947-58
b. Three martial laws and continuous involvement of army
c. Lost decade of Pakistan: 1990s
d. Presently democracy is under the shadow of fear

5. Factors that led to the failure of democracy in Pakistan
a. Feudalism has been a root cause
b. Absence of competent leadership
c. Weaknesses of democratic institutions
d. Recurrent military takeover
e. Illiteracy of the masses to choose a right person as a leader
“Democracy cannot succeed unless those who express their choice are prepared to choose wisely. The real safeguard for democracy, therefore, is education.” (F.D. Roosevelt)

6. Repercussions due to the failure of democracy
a. Impacts on economy
b. Social fabric is tarnished
c. Extremism took place
d. Poverty has been increasing
e. Corruption ruled over every institution

7. democracy can be sustained in Pakistan if
a. Political parties start introducing democracy within themselves- end of inherent leadership
b. Devolution of power to strengthen democracy at root level
c. Involvement of middle class into politics
d. Democratic institutions should be strengthen: legislature, executive, and judiciary
e. Emergency measures should be undertaken to reduce illiteracy from the country
f. Accountability should be at every level with the availability of equality in justice
g. Transparency should be ensured to select competent individuals.
h. Drastic changes are needed to end colonial bureaucratic system

8. Conclusion

[B][U]Introduction [/U][/B]
One can feel proud in 21st century that he has power to decide his fate. Democracy is the most appropriate form of government, as considered, in today’s world. Involvement of people at every sphere is a characterizing feature of democracy which ensures development.
Democracy, as defined popularly ‘government of people, for the people, and by the people’ provides a chance to people to exercise their will through political means. Involvement of people also ensures accountability and transparency if implemented in its true sense.
Strength of the states depends on their ways of governance. Pakistan was unfortunate enough that it lost its sincere leadership on its very birth. Since that, Pakistan has been a victim of several ailments. Failure of democracy is one of the foremost causes of those ailments.[/QUOTE]

relevance to the topic is very important in essay.

Point no 1,2,3 are totally irrelevant.
point no 4 was the real area of your essay but you have touched it in a cursory manner.

Best wishes and prayers for you