Introduction
sep 9/11 attack on U.S
U.S INVASION OF AFGHANISTAN
U.S INVASION OF IRAQ

HUMAN RIGHTS.
Freedom of conscience
Freedom of thought
Freedom of expression in a sense that consoles collective liberty
freedom of movement
freedom of beliefs

How war on terror has has contributed to the growing abuse of human rights

Missing persons
stern laws (Protection of Pakistan Ordinance,PATRIOT Act,LAWS ENACTED BY ARAB COUNTRIES)
bar on freedom of expression (ARAB STATES)
bar on freedom of movement
Indiscriminate killings (drones, military operations)



BUT

Terrorism is itself an excess so, its eradicating measures will also be excessive

CONCLUSION.

Though you have tried to stay close to the topic but I can see distractions in your outline like denial of the Holocaust has nothing to do with the War on Terrorism, weakening of UNO and Unilateralism of America was going on even before the WoT began, and the unjust economic order of the Muslim world which you have mentioned in your outline is also not apt. Now, I am no one to issue a verdict on whether you will get 40 marks or not but you have made major mistakes,I pray that your efforts do not go in vain.

As far as the topic is concerned, It has been observed that most of the respected members sharing their outlines here have misconstrued it.Growing violations of human rights contributed to by the WoT reminds me of the macabre tales of atrocities committed in the prisons of Abu Gharib and Guantanamo Bay,indiscriminate killings by the use of drone attacks (for instance Mamana bibi case, Amnesty International report; Will I be Next?), threatening female education and blowing up of schools by the Taliban, targeting of Polio workers, soaring Islamophobia around the globe etc. More points could be added but these were the points which could have justified the theme of the essay.

Good approach.But this line "Terrorism is itself an excess so, its eradicating measures will also be excessive" has confused me.Kindly take note of the topic again, It wasn't about terrorism.The more you stay focused on the topic, the safer you shall be.

i just took the topic in a sense that war on terror inintiated by the america who has evil ambitions contains the seeds of hatred against the muslim world in general;be it iraq,be it afghanistan,be it libya,be it pakistan etc.In that approach i wrote the points that highlighted their evil ambitions in the form of their unjust economic order ,their status quo which they donot want to be disturbed by the Muslim world.further i quoted the theories like clash of civilization by sameul p.hungtington,their so-called slogan of freedom of expression ,the biased thoughts of their intellectuals like William moore,Voltair who called muslims as a sub standard specie of the planet.In line with that approach i wrote about the curtailed freedom of expression as can be seen in the denial of holocaust.Whereas same on the part of west is supposed to be all right as in charlie hebdow case. Further i highlighted the phenomenon of islamophobia which has erupted as a nutural outcome of the biasedness against the Muslim world. the point is i just wrote on that theme .In this way the all process is depicting itself as a violation of human rights particularly in the Muslim world. but i am repenting had i wrote the examples of drone attacks,guantanamobay,batgram airbase,my essay would have been in a safe zone.let's see what will happen!

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